Typing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Work on clarity, grammar and concision. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, avoid filler sounds (uh, um), correct verb forms and pronouns, and keep to 2–4 supporting sentences. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) and specific details relevant to the question.

例: I prefer handwriting for brainstorming because it helps me think more clearly. For example, at work I often jot down phone numbers and names on paper because it’s faster than unlocking a device. Therefore, handwriting is my choice when I need to record information quickly.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence (desktop or laptop), reduce hesitations, correct word choice (type, desktop), and finish sentences. Use linking phrases to list tasks and include one specific example to support your answer.

例: I usually type on a desktop every day because I need a full keyboard for long tasks. For instance, I type exercise materials from my tutor and enter customer details, such as phone numbers and names. I also use the desktop to check stock levels at work, so most of my work is done on a desktop.

提案: Start with a clear time phrase, correct tense and verb forms, avoid repetition and fillers. Provide one concise supporting detail about how you learned and a result. Use linking words like when and so to make it coherent.

例: I learned to type when I was about six or seven years old when my cousin brought her first laptop and taught me. At first it was difficult because technology was new to me, but after a few days of practice I improved. Now I can type much faster as a result.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence describing your method, avoid redundant phrases, correct collocations (play games, practice typing), and include one specific routine or frequency. Use linking words to show cause and effect.

例: I improved my typing by playing computer games on my cousin’s laptop, which required using the keyboard to control characters. Because I played almost every day, the practice made me faster and more accurate with the keys.

× Well, I already refer handwriting when boss spoke because handwriting will help me think clearer and, uh, brainstorming that I, I generating the idea more effectively.

✓ Well, I already prefer handwriting when my boss speaks because handwriting helps me think more clearly and brainstorm; I generate ideas more effectively.

Pronoun and verb forms: 'refer' is incorrect; use 'prefer'. 'boss' needs the possessive 'my boss'. Tense consistency: 'spoke' should be 'speaks' to indicate habitual action. 'will help' is better as present 'helps' for general truth. 'brainstorming that I, I generating' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'brainstorm; I generate'. Also 'think clearer' should be 'think more clearly' (adverb). Suggestions: use correct verb 'prefer', add possessive pronoun, maintain present simple for habitual actions, use adverb 'more clearly', and simplify phrases to avoid repetition.

× For instance, if I need to write down somebody details like phone number and then names, I always look for pants and a piece of paper, uh, does happen at work because.

✓ For instance, if I need to write down somebody's details like their phone number and name, I always look for pen and a piece of paper; this happens at work.

Pronoun and noun forms: 'somebody details' needs the possessive 'somebody's' or better 'someone's'. Use 'their' as a gender-neutral possessive for 'phone number and name'. Word choice: 'pants' is incorrect; should be 'pen'. Sentence structure: ending fragment 'does happen at work because' is incomplete; replace with 'this happens at work' to complete the sentence. Suggestions: use possessive forms, correct word choice, and complete clauses.

× I usually tap on the desktop because I need to write an excisement from the tutor and I need, uh, full keyboard for a long exercise and I work.

✓ I usually type on the desktop because I need to write an assignment from the tutor, and I need a full keyboard for long tasks at work.

Prepositions and word choice: 'tap on' is colloquial; 'type on' is better. 'write an excisement' is incorrect; likely 'assignment'. 'full keyboard' needs an article 'a full keyboard'. 'for a long exercise and I work' is awkward; use 'for long tasks at work'. Suggestions: use correct collocations ('type on', 'assignment'), include articles, and reorder to clarify meaning.

× I also use keyboard to enter customer details like phone number or their name.

✓ I also use the keyboard to enter customer details like phone numbers or their names.

Use of article: add 'the' before 'keyboard'. Number agreement: 'phone number or their name' mixes singular/plural; make both plural 'phone numbers' and 'names' to match 'customer details'. Suggestions: include articles and ensure parallel number agreement.

× Or sometime I need to check for the stock, uh, if it uh, it would have the correct stock on hand.

✓ Sometimes I need to check the stock to see if we have the correct items on hand.

Adverb form: 'sometime' should be 'sometimes'. Preposition 'check for the stock' is awkward; use 'check the stock'. Conditional phrasing 'if it uh, it would have' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'to see if we have'. Use 'we' for clarity and natural subject. Suggestions: use adverb 'sometimes', simplify clause, and use appropriate subject and verb.

× So more of my work is done on the.

✓ So most of my work is done on the computer.

Sentence fragment: 'on the.' is incomplete; add the object 'computer'. 'more of my work' is acceptable but 'most of my work' is more natural. Suggestions: complete the prepositional phrase and choose clearer quantifier.

× When I was six or seven years old, my cousin brought me her first laptop and that what, what, when she taught me how to tap on the keyboard.

✓ When I was six or seven years old, my cousin brought me her first laptop and that was when she taught me how to type on the keyboard.

Tense and structure: use 'that was when' to link events in the past. 'tap on the keyboard' should be 'type on the keyboard' for correct verb choice. Remove filler repetitions. Suggestions: use 'that was when' for past event sequencing and prefer 'type' over 'tap'.

× Uh, at first I felt it difficult because, uh, technology was so new to me at that time.

✓ At first I found it difficult because technology was so new to me then.

Verb choice: 'felt it difficult' is awkward; use 'found it difficult'. 'at that time' can be simplified to 'then'. Suggestions: use 'found' with 'it difficult' and reduce redundant time phrases.

× Uh, it, it took me a few days to get better at tapping and now my fasting so much faster.

✓ It took me a few days to get better at typing, and now I type much faster.

Word choice and form: 'tapping' should be 'typing'. 'my fasting so much faster' is incorrect; likely 'I type much faster'. 'fasting' is wrong form. Suggestions: use correct verb 'type' and proper subject 'I'. },{