Typing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and fix small errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "stare staring") and correct collocations (e.g., "friendly to my eyes" → "easier on my eyes").

例: I prefer handwriting because it helps me concentrate better. For example, when I write notes by hand I remember information more easily, and it is also easier on my eyes than looking at a screen for long periods.

提案: Begin with a direct answer, then give a specific personal detail. Improve grammar (capitalize appropriately, use singular/plural correctly) and use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas. Replace vague phrases like 'in this era' with 'these days' or 'nowadays'.

例: Yes, I type every day. Nowadays it is hard to avoid using a keyboard because most school and office tasks are digital; for instance, I work at an internet company, so I write reports and emails on a laptop daily.

提案: Provide a fluent, single-paragraph reply with clearer sequencing and correct word choice. Combine short fragments and correct unclear phrases (e.g., 'look for cutters' is unclear). Use linking words like 'when' and 'so' and give a concrete example of a typing program or activity.

例: I learned to type when I was about seven or eight, while I was in primary school. My parents bought me a computer for the holidays, so I practised a lot by playing games and using simple timed typing programs, which improved my accuracy.

提案: Clarify timeframe and correct mistakes (e.g., 'about 911' is wrong). Use present tense for ongoing improvement, or past tense for past methods, and give a specific method and result. Avoid vague phrases and explain how the activity improved your typing.

例: I improved my typing mostly by practising online chats and texting. For example, after I got my first mobile phone as a teenager, I sent messages constantly and that daily practice gradually increased my speed and accuracy.

× I prefer handwriting As for me handwriting helps me be more concentrated.

✓ I prefer handwriting. As for me, handwriting helps me be more concentrated.

Missing punctuation and missing comma after introductory phrase. Insert a period to separate two independent clauses and a comma after 'As for me' to set off the introductory phrase. This is sentence-structure/flow and article usage around 'handwriting' is fine but punctuation is needed to make it grammatical.

× Also handwriting is more friendly to my eyes.

✓ Also, handwriting is friendlier to my eyes.

The comparative form of the adjective 'friendly' is 'friendlier' (or 'more friendly' is acceptable but less concise). Add a comma after 'Also' as an introductory element. Use 'friendlier' to compare handwriting vs typing.

× If I keep typing and stare staring at the screen for a long time, my eyes will feel painful and I cannot keep focus.

✓ If I keep typing and staring at the screen for a long time, my eyes start to hurt and I cannot keep my focus.

Removed duplicate word 'stare staring' (typo). 'Feel painful' is not natural; use 'start to hurt' or 'feel pain'. 'Keep focus' needs possessive adjective 'my focus'. Also changed 'will' to present 'start' to match the real conditional general truth with 'if' and continuous habit; either 'will' is possible but present simple often used for general conditions. Ensure verb forms and collocations are natural.

× Yes I do.

✓ Yes, I do.

Missing comma after introductory 'Yes'. The verb form 'do' is correct for first person; this correction addresses punctuation.

× I think in this era it's unavoidable to use a desktop or laptop keyboard every day, especially for students and company Staffs.

✓ I think in this era it's unavoidable to use a desktop or laptop keyboard every day, especially for students and company staff.

Do not capitalize 'Staffs' and 'staff' in this sense is an uncountable noun meaning employees, so do not add plural 's'. Also no article change needed; capitalization and pluralization were incorrect.

× As for me, I work at an Internet company so I have to prepare reports and emails on a keyboard daily.

✓ As for me, I work at an internet company, so I have to prepare reports and emails on a keyboard daily.

Lowercase 'internet' is common in modern usage; add a comma before 'so' to join the clauses. The sentence is otherwise acceptable. (If the speaker means a specific company, 'an internet company' is correct.)

× I learned to type on keyboard when I was quite young, around 7 or 8. While I was in primary school.

✓ I learned to type on the keyboard when I was quite young, around seven or eight, while I was in primary school.

Combine the sentence fragment 'While I was in primary school.' with the previous sentence. Add the definite article 'the' before 'keyboard'. Write numbers as words ('seven or eight') in formal speech. This fixes the sentence-fragment problem and article usage.

× My parents bought me a computer so I could look for cutters and play games during the school holidays, and I practiced the typing a lot by playing games and using simple timing programs.

✓ My parents bought me a computer so I could look for tutorials and play games during the school holidays, and I practiced typing a lot by playing games and using simple timing programs.

'Look for cutters' is likely a misuse; probably 'tutorials' or 'cut scenes' is intended. I corrected to 'tutorials'. Remove 'the' before 'typing'—'practiced typing' is correct. Ensure word choice is natural. If 'cutters' had another intended meaning, replace accordingly.

× I improved my typing meaning by chatting with my friends online.

✓ I improved my typing mainly by chatting with my friends online.

'Meaning' is incorrect here; 'mainly' (or 'mainly by') expresses the intended idea. Use 'improved my typing mainly by...' for correct adverb placement and meaning.

× When I was about 911 I got my first mobile phone and messaged friends constantly, which helped me develop speed and accuracy.

✓ When I was about 9 or 11, I got my first mobile phone and messaged friends constantly, which helped me develop speed and accuracy.

'911' is incorrect for an age; likely '9 or 11' was intended. Add commas to separate the time phrase. Use numerals or words appropriately; here '9 or 11' clarified. Ensure clarity: if the intended single age is known, use that number; if uncertain, use 'nine or eleven.'