Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer direct, grammatical and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one brief reason with a specific detail. Use linking words (for example, because) and correct verb forms and articles.

例: No, I usually don’t look out of the window when I travel by car or bus because I prefer to sleep. For example, on long trips I find it easier to rest so I arrive feeling refreshed.

提案: Be more precise and avoid filler sounds. Give a short topic sentence, then add a specific example and a linking phrase to explain why or when you take photos. Use correct determiners and plural forms.

例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery from the car window, especially when we drive past forests or mountain ranges. For instance, last summer I photographed a misty pine forest because the light was beautiful.

提案: Give a clear preference or say you like both, then explain briefly with specific reasons using linking words (however, because, for example). Avoid awkward phrases and incorrect tense/word order.

例: I like both, but if I had to choose I would pick the sea because I enjoy the calm and swimming. However, mountains are great for hiking and fresh air, so I go there when I want exercise and quiet.

× No, not at all and then I was in car or a bus.

✓ No, not at all; then I was in a car or a bus.

The sentence omits the indefinite article before 'car' and uses an awkward connector. Add 'a' before 'car' and 'bus' and replace 'and then' with a semicolon or 'then' to show sequence. Use 'a car or a bus' for correct noun phrases.

× I prefer to sleep in the car rather than seeing and looking out window or a ceiling.

✓ I prefer to sleep in the car rather than look out the window or up at the ceiling.

Use the base form 'look' after 'rather than' (not the gerund 'seeing'). Add the definite article 'the' before 'window' and use the preposition 'up at' with 'ceiling'. Also keep parallel structure: 'sleep' vs 'look'.

× Yes, I like to take photos of the view outside the car, like the beautiful forest or a mountains and.

✓ Yes, I like to take photos of the view outside the car, like beautiful forests or mountains.

Use plural 'forests' and 'mountains' when speaking generally. Remove the extra conjunction 'and' at the end. Also remove the article 'the' before 'beautiful' when listing general examples.

× MMM.

✓ (No correction needed; filler sounds like 'mmm' are acceptable in speech but not necessary in writing.)

'MMM' is a filler sound common in spoken responses. It is not a grammatical sentence, so either omit it in a written answer or replace it with a brief pause; no grammatical correction applies.

× I prefer both mountains and the sea, but both have a different charm mountain.

✓ I prefer both the mountains and the sea, but each has a different kind of charm.

Use 'the' with 'mountains' and 'sea' when referring to general categories; 'both have a different charm mountain' is ungrammatical. Replace with 'each has a different kind of charm' to convey the intended meaning and correct word order.

× It's beautiful when you will go at sea at the next level, there's a calm.

✓ It's beautiful when you go to the sea; it feels calm.

English does not use 'will' in subordinate time clauses ('when you go'). Use the simple present 'when you go'. Use the preposition 'to' with 'the sea'. Rephrase 'at the next level' (unclear) to focus on the intended meaning; here 'it feels calm' expresses the calm atmosphere. If you meant a different idea for 'next level', clarify that phrase.