Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and relevant but slightly long and could be more concise with clearer linking. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word (for example, "because" or "so"). Avoid vague phrases like "quality time" without explanation.

例: Yes, I usually look out the window when travelling by bus or car because it helps me relax and plan the itinerary. For example, I often note interesting buildings or markets that I want to visit later.

提案: The idea is clear, but there are several issues: informal language ('Yeah'), a non-word ('fulber'), and some unclear phrasing ('scoring the phone'). Use standard vocabulary, correct word choice, and link two ideas with a conjunction (e.g., 'but' or 'so'). Keep it concise (max 3–4 sentences).

例: Yes, I often take photos of the view because I like sharing moments with friends. However, I try not to spend too much time on my phone so I can actually enjoy the scenery.

提案: Good direct answer and reasons, but be careful with accuracy and word forms (plural/singular) and avoid listing unlikely examples (tigers are not common everywhere). Use linking words ('because', 'and') and give one specific example to make the detail more believable.

例: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy wildlife and snowy scenery. For example, when I visited a mountain town last winter, I saw many birds and walked through snow-covered trails, which I found very peaceful.

× Yes, I would love to enjoy the scenery when traveling by bus or car as that's a quality time for me to relax and think about the itinerary we have and experience the culture of the country.

✓ Yes, I love enjoying the scenery when traveling by bus or car because that's quality time for me to relax, think about our itinerary, and experience the country's culture.

The original mixes conditional/modal 'would love' with a general habitual activity; use simple present 'love enjoying' for habitual actions. 'As' is acceptable but 'because' is clearer here. 'Quality time' does not need 'a' in this context. 'Think about the itinerary we have' is wordy; 'think about our itinerary' is more natural. Use possessive 'country's culture'. Use commas to separate list items. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Yeah, I always love to take photos of the scenery outside the car window as I love to share the beautiful moments with my friends.

✓ Yes, I always like to take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I enjoy sharing beautiful moments with my friends.

Use 'like to' or 'enjoy' instead of the repeated 'love' to sound natural; 'yeah' is informal so 'yes' is preferred in test context. 'As' can mean 'because' but 'because' is clearer. Avoid repetition by varying verbs. Keep simple present for habitual actions. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× But I keep telling myself not to be a fulber, to not spend too much time on scoring the phone, just to enjoy the scenery.

✓ But I keep telling myself not to be a fool, not to spend too much time looking at my phone, and just to enjoy the scenery.

'Fulber' is not an English word; likely intended 'fool'. 'To not spend' is awkward; use 'not to spend'. 'Scoring the phone' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'looking at my phone'. Add 'and' to join the final clause. This fixes vocabulary and sentence structure errors. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× I would prefer the mountains to the sea because I love the animals on the mountains like birds, bear or even tiger and I love to travel during winter so I can see the beautiful landscape covered by snow.

✓ I prefer the mountains to the sea because I like the animals in the mountains, such as birds, bears, or even tigers, and I enjoy traveling in winter so I can see the beautiful landscape covered in snow.

Use simple present 'prefer' for general preference. 'Animals on the mountains' should be 'in the mountains'. Use plural forms 'bears' and 'tigers' for general references. 'Like' versus 'such as' improves listing examples. Use 'traveling in winter' rather than 'during winter' (both possible, but 'in winter' is more natural). 'Covered by snow' is better as 'covered in snow'. Commas are added for list clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 1}]} PMID: None