Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, use correct grammar and a clear topic sentence. Start with a simple statement (e.g., "Yes, I often look out the window when I travel by car or bus."), then add one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words such as "because" or "so" to connect ideas. Correct common grammar errors: use present simple for habits (I look), omit filler words (umm), and use correct prepositions (out the window, when I travel). Keep it under 4–5 sentences.

例: Yes, I often look out the window when I travel by car or bus because I enjoy watching the changing scenery. For example, in winter I find the snowy landscapes very calming, and I usually notice small details like frozen ponds or people walking by. This helps me relax and remember the trip.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and organize supporting details with linking words. Start with a concise statement ("Yes, I often take photos from the car window."), then explain reasons using connectors such as "because", "so", or "for example". Use accurate vocabulary (landscape, view, scenery) and correct verb forms (it helps me remember, it's a good way to share). Avoid fillers like "uh" and unnecessary repetition.

例: Yes, I often take photos from the car window because I enjoy capturing interesting landscapes and views. For example, I like photographing rows of trees and old houses; these pictures help me remember the trip and are easy to share with my friends afterwards.

提案: Give a direct opinion first ("I prefer the sea" or "I like both, but I prefer...") and then support it with clear, specific reasons. Use linking phrases such as "because", "however", or "for example". Avoid unclear expressions and incorrect words. Keep sentences grammatically correct (e.g., "my country doesn't have many mountains suitable for hiking"). Don’t attempt long confusing clauses—two or three clear sentences are better.

例: I prefer the sea because my country has a long coastline and pleasant beaches. We don't have many mountains suitable for hiking, so I often visit the seaside to relax, swim, and enjoy the views.

× Is I look outdoor when I traveling umm, sometimes when I was traveling by car the time I very comfortable so in the winter.

✓ Do I look out the window when I travel? Sometimes when I was traveling by car, I felt very comfortable, especially in winter.

Multiple pronoun and verb problems: 'Is I' is incorrect subject-auxiliary order and pronoun use; use 'Do I' for present simple question. 'outdoor' should be 'out the window' or 'outdoors' depending on meaning; here 'look out the window' fits. 'when I traveling' misses auxiliary or correct tense; use 'when I travel' for habitual present or 'when I am traveling' for progressive. 'the time I very comfortable' lacks verb and proper tense; use 'I felt very comfortable' (past) to match 'sometimes when I was traveling'. Suggestion: form questions with do/does, use correct prepositional phrase 'out the window', include auxiliary 'am' for progressive or simple present for habits, and include verbs like 'felt' for past state.

× Yes, I often take a lot of photos of the scenario or set up the car window when I'm travelling.

✓ Yes, I often take a lot of photos of the scenery through the car window when I'm travelling.

Wrong preposition and word choice: 'of the scenario' should be 'of the scenery' (scenery = landscape). 'set up the car window' is incorrect; use 'through the car window' to indicate taking photos via the window. Suggestion: choose correct noun 'scenery' and use 'through' to show direction or medium for the photos.

× I enjoy, uh, capturing a landscape and very was so interesting views or trees for those because it's helped me remember the trip and it's a good way to sharing experience with my friends.

✓ I enjoy capturing landscapes and interesting views or trees because it helps me remember the trip and is a good way to share experiences with my friends.

Several word form and tense errors: 'capturing a landscape and very was so interesting views' mixes forms and incorrect linking verbs. Use plural 'landscapes' or 'a landscape' consistently. 'very was so interesting' is ungrammatical; use 'interesting views'. 'because it's helped me remember' mixes present perfect with 'it' awkwardly; use 'it helps me remember' for general truth. 'a good way to sharing' should be 'a good way to share' (infinitive, not gerund after 'way to'). Suggestion: use parallel noun forms, correct adjective placement, use present simple for general facts, and infinitive after 'way to'.

× I enjoy capturing a landscape and interesting views or trees because it helps me remember the trip and is a good way to share experiences with my friends.

✓ I enjoy capturing landscapes and interesting views or trees because they help me remember the trip and are a good way to share experiences with my friends.

Agreement between subject and verb: 'capturing landscapes and views' is plural, so pronoun and verb should be plural: 'they help' and 'are a good way'. previously 'it helps' treated the plural as singular. Suggestion: ensure number agreement between subjects and verbs and pronouns; use 'they' and plural verbs for plural subjects.

× I like both the mountains and sea but in my country we don't have much mountain for hiking or it's not a signal so savage is preferred have largest sea which the name is causes budget so I want to call them.

✓ I like both the mountains and the sea, but in my country we don't have many mountains for hiking, and the terrain is not suitable. People prefer the sea because we have a large coastline, so I want to visit it.

Many errors: 'much mountain' should be 'many mountains' (countable plural). 'it's not a signal so savage' is unclear; likely meant 'the terrain is not suitable' or 'it is not suitable for hiking'. 'is preferred have largest sea which the name is causes budget' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'People prefer the sea because we have a large coastline'. Use comparative/superlative correctly when needed ('largest' if comparing). Suggestion: use 'many' for countable plural, clear nouns, and simple clauses to express preferences; ensure logical connectors and correct adjective forms.