Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Keep answers concise and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors (e.g., use past/continuous forms correctly and correct word order). Also limit to about 2–4 sentences and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., "farmland" instead of "farm field").

例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by car or bus. For example, I often watch the green farmland and open sky along the route, which relaxes me and makes the journey more enjoyable.

提案: Be more fluent and remove fillers ("uh"). Combine related ideas with linking words (e.g., "and", "so", "because") and correct small mistakes ("share with my cousin", avoid repeating words). Give one specific example of what you photograph. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: Sometimes I take photos of the scenery so I can look back at the view later, and I often share the best pictures with my cousin to show how beautiful Cambodia is. For instance, I photographed a bright rice terrace last month to remember the colours and share them with family.

提案: Give a clear direct answer first, then explain with a specific reason using linking words. Avoid hesitation and contradictory time words (e.g., "summer break, I mean spring"). Use correct tense and collocations ("go swimming", "we prefer the mountains in spring"). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: I like both, but it depends on the season. For example, in summer I prefer the sea because my friends and I go swimming and relax on the beach, while in spring we prefer the mountains for hiking and cooler weather.

× I usually do look out the window to see the view of along the journey, watching the sky and the farm field so that I can see that the rolling farm field is full of green which attracted my eyes along the way to the provinces.

✓ I usually look out of the window to see the view along the journey, watching the sky and the farm fields so I can see the rolling fields full of green that attract my eyes as we travel to the provinces.

Problems: unnecessary auxiliary 'do' with habitual present; incorrect preposition 'of' and word order 'view of along'; incorrect use of singular/plural 'farm field' and tense/agreement 'attracted my eyes'. Corrections: remove unnecessary 'do' because simple present expresses habitual action; use 'look out of the window' and 'view along the journey' for correct prepositions and word order; pluralize 'farm fields' and 'rolling fields' for natural expression; change 'which attracted my eyes' to 'that attract my eyes' to agree with present-tense habitual observation. Suggestion: use simple present for routines, keep consistent plural forms, and match verb tense and subject agreement.

× So it depends. Sometimes I do take the photos of the landscape and the view so that I can save it or look at it again later.

✓ So it depends. Sometimes I take photos of the landscape and the view so that I can save them or look at them again later.

Problems: unnecessary 'do' auxiliary in affirmative sentence; incorrect article 'the photos of' and wrong pronoun 'it' referring to plural 'photos'. Corrections: remove 'do' for simple present; say 'take photos' without 'the' for general pictures; use plural pronoun 'them' to refer to 'photos'. Suggestion: with habitual actions use simple present and ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents.

× And sometimes I do share to my cousin to tell them how the view in in my country looks like.

✓ And sometimes I share them with my cousin to show them what the view in my country looks like.

Problems: incorrect verb pattern 'share to' (should be 'share with'); unnecessary 'do'; wrong object pronoun and repetition 'in in'; awkward structure 'tell them how the view ... looks like'. Corrections: use 'share them with my cousin'; use 'show them what the view ... looks like' or 'tell them how the view in my country looks'. Suggestion: learn common verb-preposition collocations (share with), avoid double words, and use 'show/tell someone what something looks like' for clarity.

× As you know, Cambodia is very beautiful and full of uh, uh, pretty landscape.

✓ As you know, Cambodia is very beautiful and full of pretty landscapes.

Problems: countable noun 'landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' when speaking generally; filler words 'uh' removed for formality. Corrections: use 'pretty landscapes' to indicate multiple scenes. Suggestion: use plural for countable nouns when referring to many items in general statements.

× I prefer both, but it depends on the season.

✓ I prefer both, but it depends on the season.

No grammatical change needed. Sentence correctly uses present simple to express general preference and condition. Suggestion: none necessary.

× For example, this is summer I have planned with my friends to go to the sea so that we can, you know, go for swim and relax during our weekend.

✓ For example, this summer I have planned with my friends to go to the sea so that we can go for a swim and relax over the weekend.

Problems: awkward time phrase 'this is summer' should be 'this summer'; verb phrase 'go for swim' missing article 'a'; 'during our weekend' more natural as 'over the weekend'. Corrections: 'this summer' for time, 'go for a swim', 'over the weekend'. Suggestion: use 'this summer' for the current season, include articles with singular nouns like 'a swim', and use idiomatic time phrases such as 'over the weekend'.

× But during, uh, summer break, I mean spring, we rather go to the mountains.

✓ But during spring break we usually go to the mountains.

Problems: confusing phrase 'during, uh, summer break, I mean spring' and incorrect use of 'rather' in this context. Corrections: clarify the season as 'during spring break' and use 'usually' to indicate preference/habit. Suggestion: avoid filler words, state the season clearly, and use 'prefer' or 'usually' instead of 'rather' when describing habitual actions.