Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear and grammatical: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one or two specific supporting details connected with linking words. Keep answers brief (≤5 sentences). For example, say why you like looking out the window and give a specific moment or feeling.

例: Yes, I often look out the window when I travel by car or bus. I find the changing landscapes relaxing, and I especially enjoy seeing green fields and small villages because they make long journeys feel peaceful.

提案: Use correct grammar and expand slightly with a reason and a brief example. Use a linking word (because or so) to make the answer coherent and add a specific detail about when or what you photograph.

例: Yes, I sometimes take photos of the scenery outside the window because it helps me remember interesting places. For instance, I often photograph mountain views or historic buildings when we pass through the countryside.

提案: Answer directly (mountains or the sea), then give one clear reason with a specific detail and use linking words like because or so. Avoid vague phrasing and keep to two or three sentences.

例: I prefer the sea because the clear blue water and wide horizon help me relax. For example, listening to the waves and watching the color of the sea always calms me down.

× Make him see many beautiful scenery when when we're in a car that's really beautiful and relaxing.

✓ We can see a lot of beautiful scenery when we're in a car; it's really beautiful and relaxing.

The original sentence has awkward structure, a repeated word ('when when'), and an unclear subject ('Make him see') that doesn't fit the context. It should be a first-person observation about seeing scenery. Suggestion: use a clear subject ('we'), correct the repeated word, and split into two clauses for clarity using a semicolon or conjunction.

× Yes, this scenery are beautiful and photographing is a good way to remember it.

✓ Yes, this scenery is beautiful, and taking photographs is a good way to remember it.

'Scenery' is an uncountable noun and requires singular verbs ('is' not 'are'). Also, 'photographing' is grammatical but 'taking photographs' is more natural here. Suggestion: use 'is' with uncountable nouns and prefer 'taking photographs' or 'photography' depending on style.

× I prefer to see, I think see what is clear and the blue color is very beautiful.

✓ I prefer the sea because the water is clear and the blue color is very beautiful.

The original is fragmented and repetitive ('I prefer to see, I think see'), and 'what is clear' is vague. The question asked preference between mountains or sea, so reply should state preference and reasons. Suggestion: state 'I prefer the sea' and give clear reasons ('the water is clear', 'the blue color is beautiful').

× It really makes me feel relaxed.

✓ It really makes me feel relaxed.

This sentence is grammatically correct; present simple is appropriate to express a general truth or habitual feeling. No change needed. The repetition is included to show it's correct in context.