Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct minor errors (e.g., 'files' -> likely 'fields') and add a clear topic sentence plus one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Keep to under 4–5 sentences. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., 'landscape' -> 'scenery', 'historic buildings').

例: Yes, I often look out the window when I travel by bus or car because I find the scenery relaxing. For example, I enjoy noticing historic buildings and winding rivers, and I sometimes spot small farms and colorful fields that I never see at home.

提案: Good direct answer and clear reason. To improve, add a linking word and a brief example to make it more specific and natural—also avoid repeating 'view' and 'beauty' too closely.

例: No, I usually don't take photos from the car window because I prefer to enjoy the moment. For instance, when driving along the coast I focus on the sea and fresh air rather than taking pictures on my phone.

提案: Correct the vocabulary errors ('beans' -> 'beach'; 'snowing' -> 'snowy') and give a clearer topic sentence with brief supporting details and linking words. Keep sentences grammatically correct and provide one specific detail for each preference.

例: It depends on the season: in summer I prefer the sea because I enjoy swimming and relaxing on the beach, while in winter I prefer the mountains for their peaceful, snowy landscapes and quiet walking trails.

× It's helped me relax and notice more things like old buildings, rivers, or files that I wouldn't see from home.

✓ It has helped me relax and notice more things like old buildings, rivers, or fields that I wouldn't see from home.

The contracted form 'It's helped' is acceptable but can be clarified to 'It has helped' for formality; more importantly the word 'files' is a wrong word choice (lexical error) and should be 'fields'. This falls under article errors because the list includes 'Article errors' and related lexical selection; replace 'files' with 'fields' to correctly refer to landscape features. Suggestion: proofread for typos and choose context-appropriate nouns.

× I like to appreciate the natural beauty as we pass by and I find it more relaxing than looking at the pictures on my phone.

✓ I like to appreciate the natural beauty as we pass by, and I find it more relaxing than looking at pictures on my phone.

The original contains a minor article usage 'the pictures' which implies specific pictures; in this context the general idea is better expressed without the definite article. This is an adjective/article choice issue categorized under incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs. Suggestion: omit unnecessary articles for general statements.

× In summer I prefer the sea because I enjoy swimming and relaxing on the beans, but in the winter I prefer mountains or sky and the peaceful snowing scenery.

✓ In summer I prefer the sea because I enjoy swimming and relaxing on the beach, but in winter I prefer the mountains or the sky and the peaceful snowy scenery.

Multiple problems: 'beans' is a wrong word (should be 'beach'), 'the winter' is acceptable but 'in winter' is more natural, 'mountains' should take 'the' when contrasted ('the mountains'), and 'peaceful snowing scenery' is ungrammatical — use 'peaceful snowy scenery'. These involve singular/plural and adjective form errors; categorized primarily as a singular and plural issue because of incorrect noun forms and count usage. Suggestion: choose correct nouns ('beach'), use 'in winter', add or omit articles consistently, and use adjective 'snowy' instead of the -ing form 'snowing'.

× ...and the peaceful snowing scenery.

✓ ...and the peaceful snowy scenery.

Using 'snowing' as a modifier before 'scenery' is incorrect because 'snowing' is a verb form describing the action rather than an adjective describing the scenery. The correct adjective is 'snowy'. This matches the 'Verb + -ing form' problem type. Suggestion: use established adjectival forms (snowy) when describing a noun.

× Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching the changing landscape and the views.

✓ Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching the changing landscape and the views.

The common prepositional pair is 'look out of the window' or simply 'look out the window'; both are used, but 'look out of the window' is often considered more precise. This is an incorrect use of prepositions issue. Suggestion: use 'look out of the window' for clarity or keep 'look out the window' which is also idiomatic.

× No, I don't usually take photos from the car window because I prefer to enjoy the view.

✓ No, I don't usually take photos from the car window because I prefer to enjoy the view.

This sentence is grammatically correct in present simple tense; no change needed. Included to show verification under present tense category and confirm correctness.