Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one brief supporting detail using a linking word. Correct small grammar issues (e.g., 'watching outside' → 'watching the view' and 'aisle seat' → 'window seat' if you mean by the window).

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy watching the view while travelling, so I usually choose a window seat; for example, I like seeing cityscapes and passing countryside because it helps me relax.

提案: Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Give a direct answer, then a clear reason with one specific example. Fix grammar (e.g., 'take the photo' → 'take photos', 'I love to scrolling' → 'I love scrolling'). Eliminate contradictory endings like 'So no, yeah.'

例: Yes, I often take photos of interesting scenes to keep as memories; for instance, I photographed a dramatic sunset last month and later added it to my photo album on my phone.

提案: Provide a clear, grammatically correct topic sentence and one or two concise supporting details. Use linking words (because, although) and correct phrasing ('I was born in a harbour' and 'it relaxes me'). Mention a specific reason or example for both preferences if you say you like both.

例: I prefer the sea because I grew up in Incheon, a harbour city, and the ocean always makes me feel calm; however, recently I have also started enjoying the mountains for hiking and fresh air.

× Yes I do because I love watching outside while traveling so I always sit on the aisle seat.

✓ Yes, I do because I love looking outside while traveling, so I always sit in the aisle seat.

The phrase 'watching outside' is unnatural; use 'looking outside' for viewing scenery. The correct preposition for a seat is 'in' rather than 'on' when referring to 'the aisle seat'. Add commas for clarity and a hyphenated or simple 'aisle seat' is acceptable.

× Yes, I always take the photo if it's really interesting, so it can be my memory because I love to scrolling my phone, specially my album. So no, yeah.

✓ Yes, I always take a photo if it's really interesting because it can be a memory; I love scrolling through my phone, especially my photo album.

Use the indefinite article 'a' with 'photo' (not 'the') when speaking generally. 'It can be my memory' is better as 'it can be a memory'. 'Love to scrolling' mixes infinitive and gerund; use 'love scrolling' or 'love to scroll'. 'Specially' is incorrect; use 'especially'. Remove unclear filler 'So no, yeah.' or replace with appropriate response.

× I prefer the sea to be honest because I was born in harbor which is called Incheon in South Korea.

✓ I prefer the sea, to be honest, because I was born in a harbor called Incheon in South Korea.

Use commas around the parenthetical 'to be honest'. 'Born in harbor' needs an article: 'in a harbor' (or 'in the harbor' if specific). Here 'a harbor called Incheon' is correct. Place commas for clarity.

× So whenever I see the sea, it relaxed myself.

✓ So whenever I see the sea, I feel relaxed.

'It relaxed myself' is grammatically incorrect. 'Relaxed' is an adjective describing the speaker, so use 'I feel relaxed' or 'it relaxes me'. Do not use reflexive 'myself' here.

× But to be honest these days I started liking the mountain as well.

✓ But to be honest, these days I have started liking the mountains as well.

'These days' requires present perfect 'have started' rather than simple past 'started' to show a recent change continuing into the present. Also 'mountain' should be plural 'mountains' when speaking generally. Add commas for clarity.