Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は直接的だが、語彙や文法の誤り、冗長さと一部意味のずれがある。改善点：1) 主語と動詞の一致や動詞形（look at / look out / working → looking / travel → travelling）を正す。2) 冗長な表現（"at the window, at the scenery"）を簡潔にする。3) 接続詞や関連語（because, so, and）を使って情報を論理的に繋げる。4) 具体的な詳細（どんな景色を好むか、どの部分が面白いか）を一つ加えると効果的。

例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. I especially enjoy seeing local streets and small shops because they show how people live in different places. For example, I like spotting unusual buildings and street markets, which helps me notice local culture.

提案: 内容は伝わるが、多くの文法ミスと冗長表現がある。改善点：1) 冠詞・複数形（a photo / photos）や不定詞・名詞句（to keep memories）を正す。2) 冗長な語を減らす（"seeing the outside the car" は不要）。3) 理由を一つに絞り、具体的な例（どんな瞬間を撮るか）を加える。4) 文章を2文以内にまとめて簡潔に話す。

例: Yes, I usually take photos from the car window because I want to keep memories of interesting places. For example, I often photograph colorful markets or unusual buildings that I might want to visit later.

提案: 答えは明確だが、発音を示す「あー」や語彙の誤用（"bars"）と文法ミスがある。改善点：1) 話し始めのためらい音（"MMM"）は避ける。2) 誤った語（"bars" → "birds" など）を訂正する。3) 理由を明確に・具体的にし、接続詞で流れを良くする。4) 1〜2文で理由と具体例を述べる。

例: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy being surrounded by trees and flowers. For example, I like hiking on quiet trails where I can hear birds and see wildflowers, which feels peaceful compared with crowded beaches.

× I enjoy working out the window when travel by bicycle because I like seeing new places and noticing small details of everyday life.

✓ I enjoy looking out of the window when travelling by bicycle because I like seeing new places and noticing small details of everyday life.

The correct verb + -ing form for observing through a window is 'looking out (of) the window', not 'working out the window'. Also use 'travelling' (gerund) to match the structure 'when travelling by bicycle'. Use the preposition 'out of' with window for natural phrasing. Suggestion: replace 'working' with 'looking' and add 'of' after 'out'.

× Yes, I usually take photo of the scenery outside the car window because I like seeing the outside the car and also I want to keep this memory to photo photos so I take many pictures of.

✓ Yes, I usually take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I like seeing outside the car and I want to keep this memory, so I take many pictures.

Countable noun 'photo' should be plural 'photos' when referring to multiple images. The phrase 'seeing the outside the car' is ungrammatical; use 'seeing outside the car'. 'Keep this memory to photo photos' is incorrect; use 'keep this memory' and 'take many pictures'. Also remove redundant 'of' at the end. Suggestion: use plural 'photos', correct word order and remove repetition.

× MMM actually I prefer the mountains to the sea.

✓ Actually, I prefer the mountains to the sea.

Starting with 'MMM' is a hesitation marker, not needed in written correction. No article error in nouns here, but streamline sentence by removing filler. If focusing on article rules: 'the mountains' and 'the sea' correctly use definite articles for known geographical features. Suggestion: omit hesitation and keep the definite articles as is.

× This is because I like the nature like flower or trees or bars and in the mountains more those creatures exist.

✓ This is because I like nature, such as flowers and trees, and there are more of those creatures in the mountains.

Use 'nature' without 'the' when speaking generally. Use plural nouns 'flowers' and 'trees'. 'Bars' seems incorrect; likely 'birds' or 'bears'—clarify intended word. Use the existential construction 'there are more of those creatures in the mountains' to express higher quantity. Suggestion: use 'such as' and plural nouns, and reorder clause for clarity.