Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear and grammatically correct. Start with a direct topic sentence, use correct nouns and plural forms, and avoid unnecessary words. Add one specific detail (e.g., how many or where) and use a linking word if you add more information.

例: Yes, there are several tall apartment buildings near my home. For example, two high-rise blocks are right across from the park, and they house many families and shops on the ground floor.

提案: Answer directly and use correct tense. Say whether you take photos and give a specific reason and example. Use linking words like because or when to connect ideas and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I sometimes take photos of buildings because I like their architecture. For instance, I often photograph large historic buildings when I walk around the city at sunset because the light makes their details stand out.

提案: Give a clear direct answer and then provide a specific example. If you say 'no' consider rephrasing to show nuance (e.g., not a particular building but I enjoy visiting certain types). Use linking words like however or but to connect ideas and include a brief reason.

例: Not a single specific building, but I enjoy visiting interesting buildings in parks or tourist areas. For example, I would visit an old pavilion in the city park because it has unique carvings and a peaceful atmosphere.

提案: State your opinion clearly and support it with specific reasons. Use correct grammar and linking phrases (for example, because, although, and therefore). Keep it concise (2–3 sentences) and avoid repetition.

例: No, I wouldn't like to live in a very tall building because I prefer quieter, more private spaces. For example, a low-rise apartment with a balcony and a small garden would feel more comfortable and peaceful for me.

× Yeah, they had a lot of toll building near my home there, the apartment.

✓ Yeah, there are a lot of tall buildings near my home, the apartment.

The error involves singular/plural and word choice. 'Building' is singular while 'a lot of' requires a plural noun: 'buildings'. Also 'toll' is a misspelling of 'tall'. The auxiliary 'they had' is incorrect for existence; use 'there are' for present existence. Suggestion: use 'there are' + plural noun and correct spelling.

× Yet I did some buildings, their size is very beautiful, so I very like to do the day outside.

✓ Yes, I have photographed some buildings; their sizes are very beautiful, so I really like spending the day outside.

Multiple tense and word-choice errors. 'Yet' is incorrect here; use 'Yes'. 'I did some buildings' is ungrammatical — use 'I photographed' or 'I have photographed' to convey taking photos. 'Their size is very beautiful' should be plural 'sizes' or better 'they look beautiful'. 'So I very like to do the day outside' mixes grammar and collocations: use 'I really like spending the day outside.' Suggestion: use correct verb for taking photos, match singular/plural, and use proper adverb and gerund 'spending'.

× No, but when some buildings in the park or in the tourism, I will go there.

✓ No, but when there are some buildings in the park or tourist areas, I will go there.

The sentence omits the existential 'there are' needed to state existence of buildings. 'In the tourism' is incorrect; use 'tourist areas' or 'tourist spots'. Also maintain future 'I will go there' is acceptable. Suggestion: include 'there are' and use correct noun phrase 'tourist areas'.

× I don't want to live in a very tall building. I think there's some buildings, it's beautiful and comfortable. It's very important. Is not mean that it must to be very tall.

✓ I don't want to live in a very tall building. I think there are some buildings that are beautiful and comfortable. That's very important. It does not mean that it has to be very tall.

Several errors: 'there's some buildings' mixes singular contraction 'there's' with plural 'buildings' — use 'there are'. 'it's beautiful and comfortable' should agree with plural subject: 'that are beautiful and comfortable.' 'Is not mean' is ungrammatical; use 'It does not mean'. 'must to be' is incorrect modal construction; use 'has to be' or 'must be'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement with plural nouns, use relative clause 'that are', and use correct modal phrasing without 'to' after 'must'.