Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home.”), then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct grammar (plural/singular, tense) and simple linking words like “because” or “so” to connect ideas. Avoid long run-on sentences and vague phrases.

例: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. I live in the countryside where there are mostly small houses and open fields, which makes the area very peaceful. I like it because the calm surroundings preserve many childhood memories.

提案: Give a clear, grammatical response and add one specific detail. Use linking words (for example, “When I go to the city, I usually…”) and correct verb forms. Explain purpose briefly and precisely.

例: Yes, I sometimes take photos of buildings when I visit the city. I like to photograph tall or unusual buildings, and I often show the pictures to my grandparents so we can talk about the places I visited.

提案: Answer directly naming the building, then give specific reasons and one supporting detail. Avoid filler words like “uh” and use linking words such as “because” and “so”. Mention why it interests you (history, architecture, family visit).

例: Yes, I would like to visit the White House in the United States because I have read about its history and beautiful architecture online. It would be a meaningful place to see with my family and learn more about American history.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific reasons. Correct grammar (use ‘prefer to live in’ or ‘I prefer my rural home’) and linking words like ‘because’ or ‘so’. Keep it concise and avoid repetition.

例: No, I prefer to live in my rural home because the area has beautiful views and a peaceful atmosphere. I have lived there for many years and enjoy the sense of familiarity and space.

× No, my home is in a countryside that have no building tolling but have very small house and peaceful view and I also like it because it preserve my childhood and many memorable moment.

✓ No, my home is in the countryside, which has no tall buildings but has very small houses and a peaceful view, and I also like it because it preserves my childhood memories and many memorable moments.

Multiple errors: article and noun ('a countryside' -> 'the countryside') and relative clause ('that' -> 'which') improve clarity; subject-verb agreement ('have' -> 'has') because 'the countryside' is singular; plural nouns ('building tolling' incorrect -> 'tall buildings'; 'very small house' -> 'very small houses'); article usage and countables ('a peaceful view' and 'many memorable moments'); verb form agreement ('preserve' -> 'preserves') because subject 'it' refers to 'the countryside' (singular). Suggestion: identify singular vs plural subjects, use correct articles (the/a), and ensure verbs agree with their subjects.

× Yes, when I going to the city I saw many tall buildings and I count them. Also take photo of them and bring it for my grandparents so we can stay about them.

✓ Yes. When I go to the city I see many tall buildings and I count them. I also take photos of them and bring them to my grandparents so we can talk about them.

Tense and verb form errors: 'when I going' should be 'when I go' (use base verb after time clause for habitual action); 'I saw' mixes past with habitual context so use present 'see' or past consistently; 'I count' is acceptable as 'I count them' but better as 'I count them' for habit; noun plural and article: 'take photo' -> 'take photos'; pronoun/object placement: 'bring it for my grandparents' -> 'bring them to my grandparents'; incorrect verb 'stay about' -> 'talk about'. Suggestion: decide whether describing habitual actions (use present simple) or past events (use past simple) and keep consistency; use correct gerund/base forms after time clauses.

× I'd like to visit, uh, White House in the US 'cause I have heard of it on the Internet, so I think it's very, very beautiful and the good place to visit with my family.

✓ I'd like to visit the White House in the US because I have heard about it on the Internet, so I think it's very, very beautiful and a good place to visit with my family.

Article error: 'White House' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to the specific building. Preposition: 'heard of it' is possible but 'heard about it' is more natural when talking about information from the Internet. Article: 'the good place' -> 'a good place' because introducing an opinion not previously specified. Suggestion: use 'the' for unique, specific places and choose 'a' for general descriptions; prefer 'heard about' for information sources.

× No, I'm still lower my home at the rural area because they are very have very beautiful views and I live there for many years and don't think live in the tall building.

✓ No, I still live in my rural home because it has very beautiful views. I have lived there for many years and I don't want to live in a tall building.

Multiple errors: 'I'm still lower my home at the rural area' is ungrammatical; use 'I still live in my rural home' for correct verb and word order. Pronoun/number: 'they are very have very beautiful views' -> 'it has very beautiful views' (home or area singular) or 'they have' if referring to 'views' but clearer to say 'it has'. Tense: 'I live there for many years' should be present perfect 'I have lived there for many years' to indicate duration up to now. Modal/verb: 'don't think live in the tall building' -> 'I don't want to live in a tall building' to express desire. Suggestion: simplify sentences, choose correct tense for duration (present perfect), ensure subject-verb agreement, and use proper modal verbs for desire.