Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct minor grammar issues. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail. Avoid redundancy (e.g., "at the moment" and "currently" together).

例: Yes. I live in a large, overcrowded city, so there are many tall buildings nearby. In fact, I currently live in one of those high-rise apartments, which gives me a good view of the skyline.

提案: Clarify your position and fix hesitations and repetition. Use a linking phrase to contrast the two situations (when you do and when you don't). Keep it to two or three clear sentences.

例: It depends. If a building has an impressive or unique exterior, I like to take photos to capture its details. However, I usually don't bother photographing buildings in my town because many of them look very similar.

提案: Remove filler words and be more specific about which building or type you want to visit. Use a linking word to explain why and give one clear example.

例: Yes — I would love to visit historic buildings in Europe because I studied their history at school. For example, I would like to see the Colosseum in Rome to experience its architecture and historical atmosphere in person.

提案: State your main idea clearly, correct grammar (use article and singular/plural), and give a specific reason with one supporting detail. Avoid contradictory phrasing.

例: No, I prefer living in a detached house because apartments in tall buildings often feel cramped and can be noisy. For instance, I value having a garden and quiet outdoor space, which is harder to get in a high-rise.

× At the moment I am living in a big and overcrowded city.

✓ At the moment I live in a big and overcrowded city.

Use simple present 'I live' for a current general state or residence rather than present continuous. Present continuous implies temporary action; saying 'at the moment' can allow continuous, but 'live' as a state is normally simple present.

× That's why here a lot of tall buildings and currently I'm also living in one of them.

✓ That's why there are a lot of tall buildings here, and I'm currently living in one of them.

Sentence lacked the verb 'are' (There be issue) and had awkward word order. Reintroduce 'there are' to indicate existence and move 'here' after the clause. Combine with a coordinated clause using 'and' for clarity.

× It depends, if a building has an impressive exterior I I'd like to take photos but most of the time I I would I wouldn't take photos because there are so many similar buildings in the town.

✓ It depends. If a building has an impressive exterior, I would like to take photos, but most of the time I wouldn't take photos because there are so many similar buildings in town.

Fix redundancy and modal consistency: use 'I would like' for preference and 'I wouldn't' for habitual refusal. Also punctuation and repetition errors removed. 'In town' is more natural than 'in the town' in this context.

× Especially buildings in Europe, because I've read a lot about them at school and I know about historical background.

✓ Especially buildings in Europe, because I've read a lot about them at school and I know their historical background.

Use possessive 'their' to link 'historical background' to buildings. 'I know about historical background' is ungrammatical; 'I know their historical background' or 'I know about their historical background' is correct.

× And now I wanna, I want to to see it in real world, in real life.

✓ And now I want to see them in the real world, in real life.

Remove slang 'wanna' and duplicate 'to'. Use plural 'them' to refer back to 'buildings'. Include the article 'the' before 'real world'.

× No, I tend to live in detached house because mostly most of the time a tall building is not spacious and noisy if it's inconvenient for me to live in such buildings.

✓ No, I tend to live in a detached house, because most of the time tall buildings are not spacious and are noisy, so it would be inconvenient for me to live in them.

Add article 'a' before 'detached house'. Fix redundancy 'mostly most of the time' to 'most of the time'. Subject-verb agreement: 'tall buildings are'. Make sentence logical by linking noise and inconvenience and using the pronoun 'them' to refer to buildings.