Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammatical errors, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word.

例: No, there aren’t any. I live in the countryside, so most buildings are low houses and farms; for example, the nearest town only has two-story shops.

提案: Improve grammar and coherence by using a clear topic sentence and one reason with a linking word. Avoid repetition and fix verb agreement.

例: Yes, I do. When I visit interesting places with notable architecture, I often photograph buildings because they help me remember the trip.

提案: Be concise and fluent: give a clear topic sentence naming the building, then one specific reason with linking words. Remove hesitations and correct word order.

例: I would like to visit the Bicycle Building in Ho Chi Minh City because its unique curved facade and colourful balconies make it an interesting example of modern Vietnamese architecture.

提案: Use a direct topic sentence, correct connectors, and provide one specific reason with a linking phrase. Eliminate filler words and finish the thought.

例: No, I don't. I prefer living in a small house on the ground because it feels safer and it's easier to access outdoor space and my garden.

× No they aren't.

✓ No, there aren't any.

The student used 'they' to refer to 'tall buildings' but the negative response to 'Are there tall buildings near your home?' should use 'there' construction: 'There aren't any' or 'No, there aren't any.' Use 'there' for existential sentences and add 'any' in negatives for countable plural nouns.

× I live in a countryside and it doesn't have a lot of tall buildings near my home.

✓ I live in the countryside, and it doesn't have a lot of tall buildings near my home.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'countryside' when referring to the general area where one lives. Also add a comma before the conjunction 'and' joining clauses for clarity.

× Yes I do when I travel a beautiful place and it have a lot of buildings, I often take photos of buildings because it's so it's their great memories for me in the trip.

✓ Yes, I do. When I travel to a beautiful place that has a lot of buildings, I often take photos because they are great memories for me from the trip.

Multiple issues matched to allowed types: missing preposition 'to' before 'a beautiful place' (preposition error) and subject-verb agreement 'it have' should be 'that has' (subject-verb agreement / third person singular). Also pronoun usage: 'it's their great memories' is incorrect; use 'they are great memories' or 'they are a great memory'. Broken sentence structure fixed by splitting into two sentences and using relative clause 'that has' to describe the place.

× I would like to visit bicycle buildings in located in Ho Chi Minh City, Vietnam.

✓ I would like to visit the Bicycle Buildings located in Ho Chi Minh City, Vietnam.

Incorrect word order and unnecessary preposition 'in' before 'located'. Also add the definite article 'the' for a specific named building and capitalize name if appropriate. Use 'located' directly after the noun: 'Bicycle Buildings located in...'. This fixes sentence structure and article use.

× Umm, I want to visit this building because uh, it looks so unique and beautiful structure.

✓ Umm, I want to visit this building because it has a unique and beautiful structure.

'Looks so unique and beautiful structure' mixes adjective use and noun form incorrectly. Use 'has a unique and beautiful structure' or 'looks unique and beautiful.' The correction uses 'has a' plus noun 'structure' to form a grammatical clause.

× No I don't. I don't want to live in a tall building beside I prefer to live in a small home in the on the ground because I feel it's more safe and uh.

✓ No, I don't. I don't want to live in a tall building because I prefer to live in a small home on the ground; I feel it's safer.

'Beside' is the wrong conjunction; use 'because' to give a reason. Remove extra articles 'the on the ground' and use 'on the ground' or 'on the ground floor'. 'More safe' should be 'safer' (comparative adjective). Also tidy sentence by splitting or using a semicolon to connect related ideas.