Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and add a clear comparison phrase. Start with a topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail and a brief reason. Avoid redundancy like repeating 'tall buildings'.

例: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home, mostly hotels and apartment blocks. However, compared with skyscrapers in major cities, they are relatively modest in height, so the skyline still feels low-rise.

提案: Combine short fragments into full sentences and use linking words to make the answer coherent. Give one or two specific examples and explain why you photograph them.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing all kinds of buildings, from skyscrapers and television towers to traditional temples. I especially like capturing unusual details and facades because they show how different cultures express the same function.

提案: Avoid repetition and tighten phrasing. Begin with the direct answer, then give a specific reason or detail about what interests you. Use one linking word to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I would love to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because it is the tallest building in the world and its design and observation deck would offer incredible views and engineering insights.

提案: Be realistic and clear: state whether you want to live in a tall building and give a concrete reason. Avoid vague phrasing and grammatical errors. Use one supporting detail about lifestyle or view.

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building someday because living high up would give me great city views and a sense of privacy; for example, a high-floor apartment would feel peaceful despite being in a busy city.

× Yes, there are some tall buildings near my home.

✓ Yes, there are some tall buildings near my home.

No change needed; preposition 'near' is used correctly. (Included for completeness: no error.)

× They are mainly hotels and apartment buildings.

✓ They are mainly hotels and apartment buildings.

No change needed; articles are correct for plural nouns. (Included for completeness: no error.)

× However, they are not considered tall buildings by the standards of other big cities.

✓ However, they are not considered tall buildings by the standards of other big cities.

No change needed; present passive tense is correct here. (Included for completeness: no error.)

× Yes, I like take photos of buildings, all sorts of buildings.

✓ Yes, I like taking photos of buildings, all sorts of buildings.

When 'like' is followed by a verb to express enjoyment, the verb should take the -ing form. Use 'taking' instead of 'take'. Suggest practicing verbs after like/ love/ enjoy: 'I like doing', 'She enjoys reading'.

× Skyscrapers. Television towers, traditional architecture.

✓ Skyscrapers, television towers, and traditional architecture.

These fragments are sentence fragments lacking a main verb. They should be joined into a single list connected to the previous sentence or made into complete sentences. Here connecting them with commas and 'and' creates a grammatically correct list.

× And architecture from a variety of countries.

✓ And architecture from a variety of countries.

This is a fragment similar to the previous; 'from' is used correctly but the fragment should be joined to form a complete sentence: 'I like taking photos of buildings: skyscrapers, television towers, traditional architecture, and architecture from a variety of countries.'

× Of course, I'd like to visit the Burj Khalifa and Dubai, which is considered the tallest building in the world.

✓ Of course, I'd like to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai, which is considered the tallest building in the world.

The original mixes 'the Burj Khalifa and Dubai' as if they are parallel items; Burj Khalifa is in Dubai. Use 'the Burj Khalifa in Dubai' for clarity. Tense is fine; this is a clarity/preposition/location correction.

× I'd love to visit the building because it is really magnificent and and marvelous.

✓ I'd love to visit the building because it is really magnificent and marvelous.

There is a duplicated 'and'. Remove the repeated word. 'Really' correctly modifies the adjectives. Also 'marvelous' is spelled correctly once. Avoid repetition and proofread to remove duplicate words.

× Yes, I'd love to live in the tall building one day.

✓ Yes, I'd love to live in a tall building one day.

Use the indefinite article 'a' when referring to any tall building in general. 'The tall building' implies a specific building already known; context suggests a non-specific desire. This fixes article usage and agreement with meaning.

× I'd wish to live in the tall building as tall as Burj Khalifa someday because it gave me a really majestic feeling.

✓ I'd like to live in a building as tall as the Burj Khalifa someday because it gives me a really majestic feeling.

Multiple issues matched article and tense patterns: 'I'd wish' is unnatural here—use 'I'd like' or 'I wish' (but 'I'd like' fits the pattern). Use 'a building' (non-specific) and 'the Burj Khalifa' (specific name with article). Use present tense 'gives' to express general feeling rather than past 'gave' which implies it already happened. Also word order: 'as tall as the Burj Khalifa'. These corrections align with article rules and tense consistency.