Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Pronunciation and word choice need correction (e.g., 'toll' → 'tall'). Make the response more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition such as 'over there' and 'there'. Use linking words (e.g., 'because', 'so').

例: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, a well-known tower called Çamlıca Tower is on the Asian side of Istanbul and attracts many tourists because it has restaurants and viewing platforms, so it’s often very crowded in the evenings.

提案: Fluency is affected by fillers and hesitation ('umm', 'like') and some grammar errors ('have never look back'). Keep answer within 2–3 sentences: state habit, give one reason and a brief supporting detail using linking words like 'however' or 'but'.

例: Yes, I often take photos of interesting modern buildings when I spot them. However, I rarely research their history, so I usually don’t review those photos later.

提案: Answer is clear but slightly repetitive and incomplete at the end. Use concise structure: topic sentence + specific reasons (one or two). Avoid redundancy ('which is found in...') and finish the thought. Use varied vocabulary ('impressed by', 'iconic', 'observation deck').

例: Yes, I would love to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai. It is the tallest building in the world, and I’m keen to go to its observation deck because the views are reportedly spectacular and it’s an iconic example of modern architecture.

提案: This answer is direct and personal, but phrasing could be smoother and avoid informal words like 'back in the day'. Use a clear topic sentence and one concise supporting detail using a linking word such as 'because' or 'after'.

例: No, I wouldn’t want to live in a tall building because I suffer from a fear of heights. For instance, when I lived on the twentieth floor I felt very uncomfortable, so I prefer lower floors.

× Yes, there's a toll building near my home.

✓ Yes, there's a tall building near my home.

The word 'toll' is a wrong choice (spelling/word choice), not an article error strictly, but within the provided list the closest match is 'Article errors' when a wrong article/word causes meaning change. Here 'toll' should be 'tall'. Suggestion: check spelling and choose the correct adjective; read sentences aloud to spot mispronunciations that affect spelling.

× It's called Chamla Jacquelese, which is found in the Asia side of Istanbul, and there are a lot of tourists around it.

✓ It's called Chamla Jacquelese, which is on the Asian side of Istanbul, and there are a lot of tourists around it.

Use 'on the Asian side' rather than 'in the Asia side'. 'Asia' should be the adjective 'Asian' and the preposition 'on' is correct for parts/sides of a city. Suggestion: use adjective form for continent names (Asian) and 'on the ... side' for location expressions.

× People like to visit there and have their meals for dinner over there, and it's really crowded.

✓ People like to visit and have their dinner there, and it's really crowded.

Redundant 'there' and awkward phrase 'have their meals for dinner over there'. Place adverb 'there' after the verb phrase and use 'dinner' rather than 'meals for dinner'. Remove duplicate 'over there'. Suggestion: simplify to 'have their dinner there' and avoid repeating location words.

× But to be honest I don't like historical things and I don't really umm search the historical context behind it so I have never look at back look back to the photos I have taken.

✓ But to be honest I don't like historical things and I don't really look into the historical context behind them, so I have never looked back at the photos I have taken.

Errors: incorrect verb forms 'search' should be 'look into' and 'have never look' should be 'have never looked' (past participle). Also plural agreement 'them' for 'things' and correct word order 'look back at'. Suggestion: use present perfect 'have never looked' for experiences up to now and use 'look into' for researching context.

× Yes I do take photos of the buildings I see whenever I see like such cool things.

✓ Yes, I do take photos of buildings whenever I see something cool.

Awkward repetition 'I see whenever I see' and filler 'like'. Use simple structure 'whenever I see something cool'. Suggestion: avoid filler words and reduce repetition; use 'do take' only for emphasis.

× Yes, there is a building I would like to visit in the upcoming years.

✓ Yes, there is a building I would like to visit in the coming years.

'Upcoming years' is understandable but 'coming years' is more natural. This falls under 'There be issue' because of the expression with 'there is'. Suggestion: prefer 'in the coming years' for future plans.

× It's Burj Khalifa, which is found in Dubai, United Arab Emirates.

✓ It's the Burj Khalifa, which is in Dubai, United Arab Emirates.

Use definite article 'the' with named tall buildings: 'the Burj Khalifa'. Also 'in Dubai' is more natural than 'found in Dubai'. Suggestion: use 'the' for unique landmarks and use 'in' for cities/countries.

× And the reason why I want to see it is that it's the tallest building I have ever heard about it and tourists are really attracted to that building and they mentioned that it's really.

✓ The reason I want to see it is that it's the tallest building I have heard of, and tourists are really attracted to it.

Errors: unnecessary 'why' after 'reason', wrong verb phrase 'heard about it' should be 'heard of', and sentence fragment 'they mentioned that it's really' incomplete — remove. Suggestion: simplify: 'The reason I want to see it is that it's the tallest building I have heard of.'

× No, I would not want to live in a tall building because I have been having difficulties about heights.

✓ No, I would not want to live in a tall building because I have difficulties with heights.

'Have been having difficulties about heights' is awkward. Use 'have difficulties with heights' or 'am afraid of heights'. Present perfect continuous is unnecessary. Suggestion: use 'have difficulties with' or 'am afraid of' for phobias.

× Back in the day I was living in the 20th floor and that was really scary.

✓ Back in the day I lived on the 20th floor and that was really scary.

Use simple past 'lived' for a past situation. Use preposition 'on the 20th floor' not 'in'. Suggestion: use 'lived on the 20th floor' for floor-level location.

× So I would not prefer to live in a tall building.

✓ So I would not prefer to live in a tall building.

Sentence is grammatical but slightly unnatural; better: 'So I would prefer not to live in a tall building.' This is a word order improvement classified under 'Present tense issue' because of modal preference expression. Suggestion: use 'prefer not to' rather than 'would not prefer to'.