Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer direct, correct grammar and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail using a linking word. Correct vocabulary (e.g., 'tall buildings', 'near my home') and phrasing (e.g., 'the tallest building')

例: No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home because my neighborhood is mainly residential. However, the tallest nearby building is the university, which has five floors.

提案: Lead with a clear direct answer, then give two concise, linked supporting details. Use correct tense and smoother linking words (e.g., 'for example', 'also', 'when'). Avoid filler sounds and complete your sentences.

例: Yes, I sometimes take photos of buildings, especially well-known landmarks. For example, I took many pictures when I visited the Tokyo Skytree, and I also photograph unusual architectural styles when I travel abroad.

提案: Give a direct answer and correct contradictory statement. Use precise grammar and link reasons clearly. Avoid saying you both would like to visit and would not; instead explain why you want to go and whether you have been.

例: Yes, I would like to visit Abeno Harukas in Osaka because it is the tallest building in Japan and offers great views. I haven't been there yet, so I hope to go on my next trip to Osaka.

提案: Start with a clear direct statement, then give a specific reason and a brief consequence linked logically. Use correct grammar and more natural phrases (e.g., 'I wouldn't want to live', 'escape' -> 'evacuate').

例: No, I wouldn't want to live in a tall building because Japan has frequent earthquakes, and it could be difficult to evacuate quickly from high floors.

× Actually there is no toe breeding near my home because my my area is residential areas and the high tallest building is actually the university building which has fifth floor.

✓ Actually there are no tall buildings near my home because my area is residential and the tallest building is the university, which has five floors.

Errors: 'there is no toe breeding' seems intended as 'tall buildings' and uses singular 'is' with plural; 'my my area' duplicate; 'residential areas' should be 'residential' to describe the area; 'the high tallest building' redundant and ungrammatical; 'which has fifth floor' missing article and number form. Suggestion: use plural verb 'are' with plural noun 'buildings'; use 'the tallest' not 'high tallest'; use 'five floors' and remove duplicates.

× Sometimes I take pictures of buildings, especially when I visit a very famous buildings.

✓ Sometimes I take pictures of buildings, especially when I visit very famous buildings.

Error: unnecessary article 'a' before the plural noun 'buildings' and slight redundancy. Suggestion: remove 'a' to match plural noun and keep present habitual tense 'take'.

× For example, I when I visit Tokyo Skytree I took a lot of pictures.

✓ For example, when I visited Tokyo Skytree I took a lot of pictures.

Error: tense inconsistency and word order. The speaker refers to a past visit so both clauses should be past tense: 'when I visited' and 'I took'. Also remove the extra 'I'. Suggestion: use past tense for completed actions and correct word order.

× In addition, when I visit foreign countries and see rare style of umm construction, I take.

✓ In addition, when I visit foreign countries and see rare styles of construction, I take photos.

Errors: 'see rare style of construction' needs plural 'styles' or 'a rare style'; verb 'take' is incomplete without object. Suggestion: keep present habitual tense 'visit' and 'see', pluralize 'styles', and add object 'photos' to complete the verb.

× I'd like to visit Umm Abeno Harukas in Osaka. Actually this is the highest buildings in Japan, but I have never been to there so that's why I won't visit this building.

✓ I'd like to visit Abeno Harukas in Osaka. Actually this is the highest building in Japan, but I have never been there, so that's why I haven't visited this building yet.

Errors: 'Umm' filler removed; 'highest buildings' plural mismatch with 'this'—use singular 'building'; 'been to there' incorrect word order—use 'been there'; tense inconsistency: saying 'I'd like to visit' implies desire, so use present perfect 'I haven't visited' or 'I have never been there' to state past experience. The phrase 'so that's why I won't visit' contradicts desire; likely intended 'I haven't visited yet.' Suggestion: use singular 'building', correct 'been there', and use consistent tense to express prior non-visit.

× I'm not willing to living in the tall building because there are a lot of natural disasters, such as earthquakes in Japan.

✓ I'm not willing to live in a tall building because there are many natural disasters, such as earthquakes in Japan.

Error: after 'willing' the infinitive 'to live' is required, not 'to living'. Also 'the tall building' should be general 'a tall building' and 'a lot of' can be improved to 'many' for countable 'natural disasters'. Suggestion: use 'to' + base verb, correct article, and use 'many' for plural countable nouns.

× When that disaster happens, I can't escape from the tall place.

✓ If such a disaster happens, I can't escape from a tall place.

Errors: 'When that disaster happens' is awkward and 'the tall place' is vague. For hypothetical or general statements, use 'If such a disaster happens' and 'a tall place' or 'a tall building'. Also maintain present simple for general truths. Suggestion: use 'if' for conditional, 'such' to refer back, and correct noun phrase 'a tall building/place'.