Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant and mostly natural, but it could be more concise and use a clearer topic sentence. Avoid vague phrasing like "some block buildings" and add a linking phrase to compare to famous cities. Also watch small grammar: say "not as tall as skyscrapers in New York."

例: Yes. There are several apartment blocks near my home, but they are not very tall compared with skyscrapers in New York. For example, the tallest in my area is only about 12 stories, so the skyline looks much lower than in large international cities.

提案: Good content and clear reason for your preference. To improve, combine short sentences for fluency and use linking words (e.g., "because" already used) and more precise vocabulary (e.g., "glass-clad buildings" instead of "building blocks made of glass"). Keep answers within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing buildings, especially glass-clad ones, because they reflect the sky and create interesting patterns. Also, I often focus on the skyline at sunrise or sunset to capture dramatic colors and reflections.

提案: Clear and relevant. Improve by starting with a stronger topic sentence and adding a linking word to explain why you want to visit. Use slightly more accurate phrasing ("looked at photos of it" → "seen photos of it") and avoid minor grammar issues ("view of the whole city").

例: Yes, I would love to visit the CN Tower in Toronto because I have seen many photos of it and it looks impressive. It is very tall and has an observation deck where visitors can enjoy panoramic views of the whole city.

提案: Your answer expresses enthusiasm and gives reasons, which is good. To improve, correct grammar ("how panoramic views it opens" → "the panoramic views it offers"), avoid awkward or redundant phrasing ("go to bed when it's dark"), and make sentences shorter and clearer. Use linking words like "because" and "so" to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I would. Living on the 20th floor of a skyscraper appeals to me because it offers panoramic views of the city. For instance, I imagine seeing the city lights at night and enjoying colorful sunrises from my window, which would be very relaxing.

× Yes, there are some block buildings with lots of apartments in them, but they are not skyscrapers as in New York, for example.

✓ Yes, there are some block buildings with lots of apartments in them, but they are not skyscrapers like those in New York, for example.

The phrase 'as in New York' is awkward here. Use 'like those in New York' to compare plural buildings; 'those' refers to skyscrapers. This fixes a comparison phrasing issue and clarifies the reference. Grammar problem type ID:1

× For example, those building blocks that are made of glass.

✓ For example, those building blocks that are made of glass are my favorites.

The original is a sentence fragment lacking a main verb. Adding a verb completes the sentence. Also 'building blocks' is plural and fits 'those'. This addresses sentence completeness (sentence without a verb) and plural consistency. Grammar problem type ID:23

× They look beautiful because they reflect the sky.

✓ They look beautiful because they reflect the sky.

No grammatical change needed here; sentence is correct. Pronoun 'they' correctly refers to 'building blocks'. No error to correct, included for completeness. Grammar problem type ID:12

× That's why they're a perfect combination.

✓ That's why they make a perfect combination.

'They're a perfect combination' is understandable but slightly awkward; 'they make a perfect combination' clarifies that the buildings and the sky together form a combination. This improves verb choice and clarity. Grammar problem type ID:13

× Yes, I would really love to visit Toronto CN Tower as I've seen it on the photos.

✓ Yes, I would really love to visit the CN Tower in Toronto, as I've seen it in photos.

Use the definite article 'the CN Tower' for a specific landmark and the preposition 'in Toronto' for location. Also use 'in photos' rather than 'on the photos'. These are article and preposition errors. Grammar problem type ID:17

× It's quite a high skyscraper and there is an area where people can go upstairs and have a nice view of all the city.

✓ It's quite a tall skyscraper, and there is an area where people can go up and have a nice view of the whole city.

Use 'tall' instead of 'high' for buildings (adjective collocation). 'Go upstairs' is acceptable, but 'go up' is more natural here. Use 'the whole city' instead of 'all the city'. These correct adjective choice and article/quantifier use. Grammar problem type ID:13

× Yes, I would love to live in a tall building, for example in a skyscraper apartment building on a 20th floor, because I like how panoramic views it opens and you can go to bed when it's dark and you can see all the lights of the city or you can wake up with the sunset blooming around the space.

✓ Yes, I would love to live in a tall building, for example in a skyscraper apartment on the 20th floor, because I like the panoramic views it offers: you can go to bed when it's dark and see all the city lights, or you can wake up to the sunrise lighting the surroundings.

Several issues: use 'on the 20th floor' with the definite article; 'skyscraper apartment building' is wordy so 'skyscraper apartment' is clearer. 'How panoramic views it opens' is ungrammatical — use 'the panoramic views it offers'. 'Wake up with the sunset blooming around the space' is unclear and mixes timeframes; 'wake up to the sunrise' is logical. This corrects article use, word choice, verb usage, and clarity. Grammar problem type ID:22