Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and directly addresses the question, but it can be improved by adding a little more specific detail and varying sentence structure. Avoid repeating the same phrase (“tall buildings”) and add one supporting detail (e.g., how many floors or the surrounding area) using a linking word.

例: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home; in fact, I live in one of them. It’s about 20 stories high and is surrounded by shops and cafes, so the area feels quite lively.

提案: The answer conveys the main idea but has hesitations, repetition and some grammatical errors. Make the response more concise, remove filler words, correct tense and add a brief reason for the change in habit using a linking word.

例: I used to take photos of high-rise buildings when I found them unusual, but now I rarely do this because they’re common in my neighborhood and no longer feel special.

提案: Good content and clear intention. Improve grammar and fluency by removing repetition and combining sentences with linking words. Add a brief reason why you want to visit to make the answer more specific.

例: Yes, I’d like to visit the CN Tower, one of Canada’s major attractions. I haven’t had the chance yet, but I’m planning to go next month because I want to see the panoramic views from the observation deck.

提案: Your answer is direct and gives reasons, which is good. Improve grammar (pronoun consistency, articles) and use linking words to present contrasting ideas more naturally. Provide one concise specific example to strengthen your reason.

例: No, I wouldn’t want to live in a tall building because elevator waits can be long and tiring. Instead, I prefer a house with a driveway so I can park my car and enter my home quickly.

× Yes, initially I used to take uh pictures when I when I see high rise buildings, but now it, it became like a very common to me, so I don't take uh, any pictures of them now.

✓ Yes, initially I used to take pictures when I saw high-rise buildings, but now it has become so common to me, so I don't take any pictures of them anymore.

Errors: incorrect verb forms and -ing usage. 'when I see' should be past 'when I saw' to match 'used to'. 'it became like a very common to me' is ungrammatical: use present perfect 'has become' to show change up to now and 'so common to me' (or 'so common for me'). Also unnecessary filler 'uh' removed and 'any pictures of them now' better as 'any pictures of them anymore'. Suggest using consistent past for habitual past actions and present perfect for changes that affect present.

× I never get a chance to go there.

✓ I never got a chance to go there.

Error: tense mismatch. The speaker refers to a past opportunity; therefore simple past 'got' is correct. Alternatively, present perfect 'have gotten' could be used if emphasizing up to now. Use past for past events.

× I'm planning to go there in the next month.

✓ I'm planning to go there next month.

Error: incorrect use of 'the' with time expression. 'in the next month' is unnatural in this context; use 'next month' or 'in a month's time'. Also present continuous 'I'm planning' correctly expresses a planned future action.

× No, I don't like to live in a tall building because it takes a lot of time to reach your apartment and you need to wait in the elevator for longer times that makes us exhaust.

✓ No, I don't like living in a tall building because it takes a long time to reach your apartment and you need to wait in the elevator for longer, which makes us exhausted.

Errors: gerund/infinitive choice and subject-verb agreement with relative clause. 'like to live' is acceptable but 'like living' is more natural here. 'a lot of time' -> 'a long time'. 'for longer times that makes us exhaust' is ungrammatical: 'for longer' or 'for longer periods', and relative clause requires plural verb agreement 'which makes us exhausted' or 'which makes us feel exhausted'. Use 'exhausted' (adjective), not 'exhaust' (verb).

× Instead, I like staying in a house where I can park my car and directly go into my home.

✓ Instead, I prefer living in a house where I can park my car and go directly into my home.

Errors: preposition and word order. 'go into my home' is awkward; 'go directly into my home' is acceptable but 'go straight into my house' is more natural. Also 'like staying in a house' is better as 'prefer living in a house' to contrast choices. 'directly go into' word order adjusted to 'go directly into'.