Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Content is relevant but sentences are unclear and contain many grammar and word-choice errors. Improve by giving a direct topic sentence, using correct vocabulary (e.g., "town" or "village" not "brown"), and one supporting detail with correct grammar. Keep answers concise (max 3–4 sentences) and use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

例: No, there are no tall buildings near my home. My house is surrounded by forest, so the nearest city with tall buildings is about 20 kilometers away.

提案: Answer shows willingness but is repetitive and has vocabulary/grammar mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (when, why, what you photograph). Use correct noun forms (e.g., "skyscrapers" not "Skykeeper") and linkers like "so" or "because" to make it coherent.

例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings when I travel to Bangkok. I like photographing skyscrapers from the highway because their shapes and lights are interesting, especially at sunset.

提案: The response mentions a specific building but is grammatically confused and awkward. Improve by naming the building correctly, giving one or two clear facts (height, sky bar), and explain briefly why you want to visit using linking words like "because" or "so". Keep it concise and avoid repeating facts incorrectly.

例: I would like to visit the MahaNakhon Tower in Bangkok because it is one of the tallest buildings in Thailand (about 314 meters) and it has a sky bar with great views. From the top you can see the whole city, which I think would be impressive.

提案: Answer is understandable but unclear and contains repeated hesitations and errors ("afraid of telling" and "afraid of tall"). Give a direct opinion sentence then one concise reason. Replace vague phrases with precise words like "afraid of heights" and avoid fillers (umm).

例: No, I wouldn't want to live in a tall building because I am afraid of heights. I prefer a house near the forest where I feel calm and close to nature.

× No, my home is in the brown and my home is surrounded by the forest, so that is none of the tall buildings nearest my home.

✓ No, my home is in the countryside and is surrounded by forest, so there are no tall buildings near my home.

Preposition and word choice errors: 'in the brown' is incorrect; use 'in the countryside' or 'in a rural area'. 'Surrounded by the forest' is acceptable but 'surrounded by forest' is more natural. 'None of the tall buildings nearest my home' is ungrammatical: use 'there are no tall buildings near my home.' The verb 'are' with 'no tall buildings' follows 'there be' construction (Grammar problem type 3 and preposition). Suggest using 'there are no' + plural noun and 'near' for proximity.

× If you want to see the child is breeding, you need to go into the city, which is about 20 kilometers far away from my home.

✓ If you want to see children being raised, you need to go to the city, which is about 20 kilometers from my home.

Article and phrase errors: 'the child is breeding' is wrong word choice and article use. Use plural 'children' and the progressive passive 'being raised' to express that meaning. 'Go into the city' is acceptable but 'go to the city' is more natural. '20 kilometers far away from my home' is redundant; use '20 kilometers from my home.' This fixes incorrect article and preposition usage.

× Yes I do when I ride a car into the city because the city that nearest my hometown is a Bangkok.

✓ Yes I do when I drive into the city because the city nearest my hometown is Bangkok.

Verb choice and article errors: 'ride a car' is non-native; use 'drive' or 'travel by car.' 'The city that nearest my hometown is a Bangkok' has subject-verb and article issues. Use 'the city nearest my hometown is Bangkok' (no article before Bangkok). Also remove 'a' before Bangkok. This addresses third person/regional grammar and article usage.

× They have so many Skykeeper which is have so many tall building.

✓ It has many skyscrapers, which are tall buildings.

Word choice and agreement: 'Skykeeper' is incorrect; use 'skyscrapers.' 'They have so many' vs 'it has many' depends on 'city' being singular, so use 'it has many skyscrapers.' 'Which is have so many tall building' is ungrammatical; use 'which are tall buildings.' Corrects adjective/noun agreement and relative clause structure.

× So when I drive on the highway I will always take the photo of the building because that is not my building near my hometown.

✓ So when I drive on the highway I always take photos of the buildings because there are no buildings like that near my hometown.

Preposition and article issues: 'take the photo of the building' should be 'take photos of the buildings' for habitual action. 'Because that is not my building near my hometown' is unclear; better: 'because there are no buildings like that near my hometown.' This fixes 'there be' structure and pluralization.

× I'm also.

✓ I also do.

Sentence fragment: 'I'm also.' lacks a main verb and is incomplete. For agreement with previous sentence (I always take photos), use 'I also do' or 'I do too.' This corrects sentence structure errors.

× I would like to receive Mahana cardboarding in Bangkok is the tallest building in Thailand is 214 meters tall and the top of the building they have a sky bar and you can take photo or see the sightseeing the city view of the Bangkok from the top of the building right there.

✓ I would like to visit MahaNakhon in Bangkok. It is one of the tallest buildings in Thailand at 314 meters, and at the top there is a sky bar where you can take photos and see the city view of Bangkok from above.

Multiple errors: sentence is run-on and many structural problems. 'Receive Mahana cardboarding' is incorrect phrase; likely intended 'visit MahaNakhon' (a famous tall building). The original '214 meters' is inaccurate for MahaNakhon; common height is 314 meters — if unsure keep 'about 314 meters.' Use separate sentences: state desire to visit, give building height and features, and describe activities. Also correct article use ('the city view of Bangkok' -> 'the city view of Bangkok') and verb forms. This fixes sentence structure, factual phrasing, and noun usage.

× I want to visit even how.

✓ I still want to visit it.

Incorrect phrase and preposition: 'even how' is ungrammatical. Use a simple, clear sentence like 'I still want to visit it' to express determination. This corrects sentence structure and preposition misuse.

× Umm, no thank you, because I'm afraid of telling.

✓ Umm, no thank you, because I'm afraid of heights.

Word choice error: 'afraid of telling' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'afraid of heights.' Use the correct noun phrase 'afraid of heights.' This fixes preposition and noun choice.

× I would love to live in there umm, house that's still on the surrounding forest, because I'm afraid of tall.

✓ I would love to live in a house that is still in the surrounding forest, because I'm afraid of tall buildings.

Article and preposition errors: 'live in there umm, house' should be 'live in a house' or 'live there, in a house.' 'On the surrounding forest' is wrong preposition; use 'in the surrounding forest.' 'I'm afraid of tall' is incomplete; specify 'tall buildings' or 'heights.' This corrects article use, prepositions, and noun completion.