Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repetitions and grammar errors, and give a brief reason with a linking word. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use more appropriate vocabulary (e.g., ‘I prefer living in tall buildings because the views are beautiful’).

例: Yes. There are many tall buildings near my home. I prefer living in them because they offer great views and make the area feel lively.

提案: Reduce fillers (uh, um) and correct grammar. Give a clear topic sentence and one specific supporting detail using a linking word (e.g., ‘because’ or ‘so’). Mention when and why you take photos. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I sometimes take photos of interesting buildings. I often do this when I have free time because I like studying architectural details and keeping memories of places I’ve visited.

提案: Be specific and correct nouns. Start with a direct sentence naming the building, then give 1–2 clear reasons using linking words (because, and). Avoid vague phrases like ‘Khalifa boards’ — say ‘the building’s design’ or ‘its observation deck’.

例: Yes, I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because it is the tallest building in the world. I’d love to see its impressive design and go up to the observation deck for panoramic views.

提案: Organize ideas and correct grammar. Begin with a clear answer, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid stray ideas. If you mention a city, explain why. Keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building, especially in New York City, because I enjoy city views and convenient amenities. If I could afford it, I would also like to visit famous skyscrapers around the world.

× There are a lot of tall buildings near my home and I prefer living tall buildings because when I home at home I feel beautiful.

✓ There are a lot of tall buildings near my home, and I prefer living in tall buildings because when I am at home I feel comfortable.

The sentence has plural vs. article issues and missing prepositions. 'living tall buildings' requires the preposition 'in'. 'when I home at home' is incorrect: use the verb 'am' and correct word order 'when I am at home'. 'feel beautiful' is unnatural for describing comfort at home; 'feel comfortable' is clearer.

× That's why I uh, prefer uh, live in the tall buildings.

✓ That's why I prefer living in tall buildings.

After 'prefer' you should use the gerund form 'living' when expressing a general preference. Also drop the article 'the' before 'tall buildings' when speaking generally.

× Yes, I do uh, sometimes I take photos of buildings and uh, when I uh, have free time, uh, I will look there picture.

✓ Yes, I do. Sometimes I take photos of buildings, and when I have free time, I look at those pictures.

Use correct noun phrase and preposition: 'look at pictures' not 'look there picture'. 'Those pictures' (plural) matches 'photos'. Also avoid mixing future 'will' with a habitual action; present simple 'I look' is appropriate.

× Yes, I would like to visit Burj Khalifa in Dubai because the Khalifa boards were very beautiful and and well it is very tall in the Dubai.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because its exterior decorations are very beautiful, and it is very tall.

Use 'the Burj Khalifa' as a specific building. 'the Khalifa boards' is unclear; 'its exterior decorations' or 'its facade' is more natural. Do not use 'the' before 'Dubai'. Remove extra 'and' and fix word order.

× Of course, I would like to live in a tall building, I would like to live in New York City, and if I have a lot of money, I visit to all buildings, and I would like to live in old.

✓ Of course, I would like to live in a tall building. I would like to live in New York City, and if I had a lot of money, I would visit many famous buildings. I would also like to live in an older building.

Conditional expressing unreal present/future requires past form 'if I had' and conditional 'I would visit'. 'visit to' is incorrect; use 'visit'. 'all buildings' is unrealistic and unclear; 'many famous buildings' is better. 'live in old' lacks noun and article; use 'an older building'.

× Are there tall buildings near your home?

✓ Are there tall buildings near your home?

No correction needed: the sentence correctly uses 'there are' to ask about existence of plural buildings.

× Yes, I do uh, sometimes I take photos of buildings and uh, when I uh, have free time, uh, I will look there picture. That's why I uh, prefer uh, live in the tall buildings.

✓ Yes, I do. Sometimes I take photos of buildings, and when I have free time, I look at those pictures. That's why I prefer living in tall buildings.

Combined corrections: ensure verb forms match subjects and tenses. Use 'look at those pictures' and gerund 'living'. This fixes third-person issues and other errors.