Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more fluent and accurate: avoid hesitations and pronunciation errors ("toll Billings" → "tall buildings"). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and use a linking word if adding detail.

例: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, my neighbourhood has a cluster of modern apartment blocks, so I often see high-rises when I walk to the shops.

提案: Improve grammar and clarity: respond directly with a topic sentence, then give a reason using correct tense and linking words. Avoid double negatives and redundant words.

例: No, I don't usually take photos of buildings because I'm not very interested in architecture. However, I would take pictures of famous landmarks if I visited them.

提案: Be specific and concise: say directly whether you have a particular building in mind, then give a specific example or a short plan. Use linking words for coherence and correct small errors ("I would I hope" → "I hope").

例: At the moment I don't have a specific building in mind, but I hope to visit famous landmarks like the Eiffel Tower in future because I enjoy sightseeing.

提案: Clarify and correct grammar, and add a brief supporting detail with a linking phrase. Fix plural/singular errors and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because I enjoy panoramic views of the city, especially at night. For instance, living on a high floor would let me see the city lights and skyline every evening.

× Yeah, yeah, I think there are lots of toll Billings near my place because I live in umm residence area which has a lot of apartment S So yeah, there are lots of tall buildings near my place.

✓ Yeah, yeah, I think there are lots of tall buildings near my place because I live in a residential area which has a lot of apartments. So yeah, there are lots of tall buildings near my place.

Errors: 'toll Billings' is mispronounced but intended 'tall buildings' (not a grammar category); 'residence area' should be 'a residential area' (adjective form) and needs the article 'a'; 'apartment S' should be 'apartments' (plural). Suggestions: use correct adjective form 'residential' to modify 'area', include the indefinite article 'a' for singular countable noun 'residential area', and use the plural 'apartments' without spacing. Also split into two clear sentences for fluency.

× No, I never really taken any photos buildings 'cause I'm never really get any interested to any buildings, but some people definitely likes to take a picture of it because that's some of them really famous.

✓ No, I have never really taken any photos of buildings because I'm never really interested in any buildings, but some people definitely like to take pictures of them because some of them are really famous.

Errors: 'I never really taken' misses the auxiliary 'have' for present perfect (past participle use). 'photos buildings' needs preposition 'of'. 'I'm never really get any interested to any buildings' mixes verb forms and prepositions; correct is 'I'm never really interested in any buildings' (adjective 'interested' + preposition 'in'). 'some people definitely likes' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; use 'like' for plural subject. 'take a picture of it' should be 'take pictures of them' to match plural 'buildings'. 'that's some of them really famous' should be 'some of them are really famous'. Suggestions: use 'have' + past participle, use 'interested in', ensure subject-verb agreement, and use correct prepositions 'of' and 'in'.

× No, not at all in my mind for now. But I know there are lots of umm buildings really famous for the travel or sightseeing, so I would I hope in the future I can get interested in those kind of things.

✓ No, not at all in my mind for now. But I know there are lots of buildings that are really famous for travel or sightseeing, so I hope in the future I will become interested in those kinds of things.

Errors: 'buildings really famous for the travel' needs a relative clause and correct noun usage; use 'buildings that are really famous for travel or sightseeing'. 'I would I hope' is redundant; use 'I hope'. 'I can get interested' is awkward for future change; use 'I will become interested' or 'I might become interested'. 'those kind of things' should be 'those kinds of things' (agreement between 'those' and plural 'kinds'). Suggestions: use 'that are' for clauses, avoid redundant words, choose natural future expression 'will become' or 'might become', and match plural forms.

× Yeah, I actually do 'cause I really like the view from the top of the buildings and looking down like all city lights at night. So I think if I live in a tall buildings I can enjoy those views every single night.

✓ Yeah, I actually do because I really like the view from the top of buildings and looking down at all the city lights at night. So I think if I live in a tall building I can enjoy those views every single night.

Errors: 'the top of the buildings' is acceptable but smoother as 'the top of buildings' or 'the top of a building' depending on context; 'looking down like all city lights' needs preposition 'at' and article 'the' before 'city lights'. 'a tall buildings' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'buildings'; correct is 'a tall building' (singular) or 'tall buildings' without 'a'. Suggestions: use correct article-noun agreement ('a tall building'), include preposition 'at' with 'looking down', and use 'the city lights' to refer to specific lights in the city.