Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (No) then give 1–2 specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid filler words (uh) and incorrect phrases like “quite much the landed house.”

例: No, there aren’t many tall buildings near my home. Most houses here are landed properties, but taller skyscrapers like TRX and Merdeka 112 are located in Kuala Lumpur, which is quite far.

提案: Use correct verb forms and clearer vocabulary. Begin with a concise topic sentence (Yes, I do) then give a reason and an example using linking words (for example, especially). Clarify unclear phrases like “banned ethnic” and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy photographing buildings at sunset because the warm light highlights architectural details. For example, I often take pictures of old colonial buildings and modern towers when the light makes them look more dramatic.

提案: Give a direct answer and correct grammar. Start: Yes, I would like to visit Merdeka 118. Then give 2 specific reasons why, using linking words (because, and, for example). Fix tense and article errors (the tallest in Asia).

例: Yes, I would like to visit Merdeka 118 because it is one of the tallest buildings in Asia and has a unique design. For example, I want to see the observation deck and enjoy the city view from the top because I have never been there before.

提案: Answer clearly and give specific reasons using correct vocabulary. Begin: No, I wouldn’t. Then give 2 concrete reasons (fear of heights, prefer garden space) using linking words. Replace unclear phrases like “toll view” and “tail building” with correct terms (tall building, views).

例: No, I wouldn’t like to live in a tall building because I’m afraid of heights and I prefer the outdoor space of a landed house. Also, I find low-rise houses more peaceful and family-friendly.

× Not really uh, nearby my home actually is quite much the landed house for the tall building I think is more in Kuala Lumpur.

✓ Not really. Near my home there are mostly landed houses; I think tall buildings are more in Kuala Lumpur.

The original sentence has incorrect adjective and noun order and awkward phrasing ('the landed house for the tall building', 'quite much'). Use clear subject-verb order and plural nouns when referring to a general category. Also split into two clauses for clarity. Suggestion: state location first, use plural 'houses' and a comparative phrase 'more in Kuala Lumpur'.

× Yes, I quite loved to take photos for buildings and especially banned ethnic or when the sun down sunshine is coming.

✓ Yes, I quite like taking photos of buildings, especially at sunset.

Errors include tense/verb form and wrong prepositions. 'Loved to take' is awkward; use 'like taking' for habitual action (Verb + -ing). Use 'of' for photographing something, and 'sunset' is the correct noun. Remove unclear phrase 'banned ethnic'. Suggest: 'I quite like taking photos of buildings, especially at sunset.'

× I would take the photo because I think the light is quite nice and the building is also very fancy.

✓ I would take photos because I think the light is nice and the buildings look very attractive.

Use plural 'photos' for general habit and 'of' omitted earlier corrected. 'Fancy' can be replaced with 'attractive' or 'impressive' for naturalness. Keep consistent plurality: 'buildings' and plural verb forms. Also 'the photo' is too specific; use 'photos' or 'a photo' when specific.

× Umm the buildings as I would like to visit is the Merdeka 118, because I think it is quite is the tallest building in the Asia and I think it's quite unique.

✓ The building I would like to visit is Merdeka 118 because I think it is one of the tallest buildings in Asia and it is quite unique.

Original has wrong subject agreement ('buildings ... is'), extra words ('quite is'), and incorrect article 'the Asia'. Fix subject-verb agreement, use 'building' singular, 'one of the tallest' or 'the tallest' depending on accuracy, and correct preposition/article usage: 'in Asia'.

× It's a large, huge building and I haven't go to bef go to it before so I want to.

✓ It's a very large building and I haven't been to it before, so I want to visit it.

Incorrect verb forms: 'haven't go' should be present perfect 'haven't been', and 'bef go to' is garbled. Use 'visit' to indicate intent. Also 'large, huge' is redundant; choose one or use 'very large'.

× No really because I think I will more prefer to live at a landed house or the short building because I think I really afraid that toll view although it is called beauty.

✓ Not really, because I would prefer to live in a landed house or a low-rise building; I'm quite afraid of tall views even though some people find them beautiful.

Incorrect modal and comparative expressions: 'will more prefer' should be 'would prefer'. Preposition: 'live in' not 'live at'. 'Short building' is better as 'low-rise building'. 'I really afraid' needs 'I am really afraid of'. 'toll view' likely intended 'tall view/tall heights' corrected to 'tall views' or 'heights'. Clarify contrast and use conditionals/modal correctly.

× But if let me live at the tail building I think I always be afraid at.

✓ But if you let me live in a tall building, I think I would always be afraid.

Errors include missing subject ('if let me'), wrong preposition 'at the tail building', misspelling 'tail' should be 'tall', and wrong verb form 'I always be afraid at'. Use conditional 'if you let me', preposition 'in', and conditional modal 'would'. End with 'afraid' (no trailing preposition).