Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, accuracy and coherence: use correct plural forms (towers), correct place name (Seoul), and link ideas with short sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid redundant phrases.

例: Yes. There are several tall towers near my home, including the tallest tower in Seoul. Many tourists visit it because it is an important landmark, and local families often go there in their free time.

提案: Clarify meaning and correct vocabulary: say "I sometimes take photos of buildings" and explain why, using linking words (for example, because, so). Replace unclear phrases like "exceptionally aspect" and "no property" with specific reasons (unique design, historical value, lack of character).

例: I sometimes take photos of buildings if they have a unique design or are very tall, because many modern buildings in Korea look very similar and I prefer photographing places with distinctive features.

提案: Be more specific and correct grammar: use a clear topic sentence naming a particular building or type. Explain reasons concisely and use linking words (for example, because, so). Replace unclear words ("queenskepper") with 'landscape' or 'city below'.

例: Yes, I would like to visit the tallest observation tower in the city because I enjoy looking down at the city landscape; it helps me relax and reduces my stress.

提案: Correct grammar and repetition: say "live" not "leave" and avoid repeating ideas. Provide one clear reason and an additional brief detail (for example, views, quieter environment). Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because I could enjoy regular views of the city skyline, which I find calming. Also, higher floors tend to be quieter and get more natural light.

× Yes, near my house there are a lot of tower.

✓ Yes, near my house there are a lot of towers.

The noun 'tower' should be plural after 'a lot of'. Use 'towers' to match the plural quantifier. Suggestion: use plural form with 'a lot of', e.g., 'a lot of towers'.

× It is the highest building in the soul and many foreign people or visitors visit it.

✓ It is the highest building in Seoul and many foreign people or visitors visit it.

'Soul' is a misspelling of the proper noun 'Seoul'. Proper nouns do not need 'the' here; 'the highest building in Seoul' is correct. Also correct spelling to 'Seoul'. Suggestion: check proper noun spelling and article usage.

× It is really important landmark in Seoul and traditionally we go there at free time.

✓ It is a really important landmark in Seoul and traditionally we go there in our free time.

Missing article 'a' before 'really important landmark' and incorrect preposition 'at free time'. Use 'in our free time'. Suggestion: include appropriate articles before singular countable nouns and use 'in/at' correctly for time expressions.

× I take the photo of building sometimes if the building is really tall or exceptionally aspect because in Korea there are similar buildings which have no property.

✓ I take photos of buildings sometimes if a building is really tall or especially striking because in Korea there are many similar buildings that have no distinguishing features.

Multiple issues: 'the photo of building' needs plural/general form 'photos of buildings' or 'a photo of a building'; adverb 'exceptionally' misused; 'aspect' wrong word; 'which have no property' is incorrect — use 'that have no distinguishing features' or 'no unique features'. Also 'many' fits quantifier. Suggestion: choose correct noun forms, use 'especially' + adjective, and use 'that' for defining clauses.

× I want to visit taller buildings because I like to look down the city queenskepper and it is really relieved me of the stress, so I want to visit tall buildings.

✓ I want to visit tall buildings because I like to look down at the city skyline and it really relieves me of stress, so I want to visit tall buildings.

Use 'tall buildings' (not comparative 'taller' unless comparing). 'Look down the city' needs preposition 'down at the city skyline'. 'queenskepper' is incorrect; correct word is 'skyline'. 'It is really relieved me' has wrong verb form and voice; use active 'it really relieves me'. Suggestion: use correct noun 'skyline', proper prepositions, and correct verb forms for present simple effects.

× Yes, I want to live in a tall building because if I leave in a tall building I can often view the city skyline and I think it can help me to relieve of my stress.

✓ Yes, I want to live in a tall building because if I live in a tall building I can often view the city skyline and I think it can help me relieve my stress.

Multiple issues: 'leave' should be 'live' (spelling). Use 'live' consistently. 'Help me to relieve of my stress' is ungrammatical: use 'help me relieve my stress' or 'help relieve my stress'. Also no extra 'to' before 'relieve' and remove 'of'. Suggestion: check verb choice and common collocations: 'help someone relieve stress'.