Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答需要更直接、简洁并纠正语法和时态错误。先给出主题句（有/没有高楼），然后用一两句具体细节支持，避免重复（如“used to to”或多个时态混用）。可以用连词连贯信息。注意单复数和时态一致性。

例: Yes, there was a tall shopping mall near my home when I lived in Beijing. Every weekend my friends and I used to go there for food and movies, and it was a popular meeting place.

提案: 回答要更自然、逻辑更清楚并修正词汇搭配错误。先给出明确回答（Yes/No），然后说明原因并举例。避免笨拙表达（如“keen for the nature”，“comfortable to make a close relationship to nature instead of beauty”）。用恰当的词汇如 "prefer"、"natural scenery"。

例: No, I usually prefer photographing natural scenery rather than buildings. For example, I enjoy capturing forests and rivers because they feel more peaceful and expressive than man-made structures.

提案: 回答应更简洁并修正语法与用词（如“watch”需用过去式“watched”，“families”应为“family”，“Peking”现在一般说“Beijing”或“the CCTV Tower”）。先直接回答，再给出理由并补充具体情境或情感。

例: Yes, I would like to visit the CCTV Tower in Beijing. I grew up watching it on TV with my family, so seeing it in person would be exciting and nostalgic.

提案: 回答需更自然并纠正表达（如“can't breathe under this accommodation”和“close to the nature”不合适）。先直接回答（No），然后给出具体原因并举例理想的居住环境。注意句型和连接词使用，使内容紧凑。

例: No, I wouldn't want to live in a tall building. I prefer being close to nature, so I would rather live in a small lodge by a river where I can enjoy fresh air and quiet surroundings.

× Oh yeah, I used to to live in Beijing when I was in high school, so there is there was a tall shopping mall near my home and every weekend we go there for eating and like watching movies.

✓ Oh yeah, I used to live in Beijing when I was in high school, so there was a tall shopping mall near my home and every weekend we went there to eat and watch movies.

句子中出现了多处时态和用法问题：1) “used to to live” 有重复的 to，应去掉一个；“used to” 表示过去的习惯，应使用过去时，不需要其他助动词。2) 同一句中混用了现在时 “is there was”，应保持过去时一致，改为 “there was”。3) “every weekend we go there for eating and like watching movies.” 描述过去的习惯应使用过去时，改为 “we went there”；“for eating” 用法不自然，常用不定式表示目的，改为 “to eat”；“like watching movies” 中的 like 可去掉或改为并列动词短语 “and watch movies”。建议：保持时态一致，表达过去习惯用 “used to” 或过去式，目的用不定式。

× Well to be honest, I'd love to take photos of nature sceneries instead of artificial buildings because I'm keen for the nature and I think it is comfortable to make a close relationship to nature instead of beauty.

✓ Well, to be honest, I'd love to take photos of natural scenery instead of artificial buildings because I'm keen on nature and I think it's more comfortable to be close to nature than to seek beauty.

问题包括词汇搭配和结构错误：1) “nature sceneries” 用法错误，scenery 是不可数名词，前面用形容词 natural 修饰，改为 “natural scenery”。2) “keen for the nature” 搭配不当，正确的是 “keen on nature”。3) “make a close relationship to nature” 表达不自然，应使用短语 “be close to nature” 或 “have a close relationship with nature”。4) 最后比较结构不正确，用 “instead of beauty” 不明确，改为 “be close to nature than to seek beauty” 或 “rather than seeking beauty”。建议：注意不可数名词用法和常见动词短语搭配（keen on, be close to）。

× Yeah, of course, since I was born in Beijing and in my childhood, every night I watch the news with my families. So I really want to visit the CCTV tower in Peking.

✓ Yeah, of course. Since I was born in Beijing, in my childhood every night I watched the news with my family. So I really want to visit the CCTV tower in Beijing.

存在人称、数和用词问题：1) “every night I watch the news with my families.” 使用现在时与“in my childhood”冲突，描述过去应该用过去时 “watched”。2) “families” 应为可数复数，表示一家人应使用单数 “family”。3) “Peking” 虽然是北京的旧称，但现代口语通常用 “Beijing”。建议：保持时态一致（过去描述过去），注意 family 作集合名词通常用单数形式。

× Well, to be honest I don't like living in a tall building. I think I can't breathe under this accommodation. I would like to close to the nature, so I will choose to live in a lodge near a river maybe.

✓ Well, to be honest, I don't like living in a tall building. I think I can't breathe in such accommodation. I would like to be close to nature, so I would choose to live in a lodge near a river, maybe.

主要有介词和结构错误：1) “breathe under this accommodation” 介词用错，应为 “breathe in such accommodation” 或 “breathe in tall buildings”。2) “I would like to close to the nature” 缺少动词，正确为 “I would like to be close to nature”。3) “the nature” 中的定冠词不必要，通常用 “nature” 不加冠词。4) 结尾时态和语气更自然用 “I would choose” 表示假设/偏好而非确定将来。建议：注意固定搭配（breathe in, be close to），名词 nature 不加定冠词，句子保持语气一致。