Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief info), avoid irrelevant details, correct grammar (use 'near my house' or 'near where I live'), and fix repetition ('the the'). If you mention the owner, connect it to something relevant (e.g. what the building looks like or how it affects you).

例: Yes. There is a tall office building near my house that belongs to a newspaper company. It stands out because of its glass facade and large logo, but I don't really pay attention to the newspaper itself.

提案: Make the response grammatically correct and coherent. Begin with a direct answer, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, 'instead' or 'rather'). Correct noun forms and articles ('well-decorated cafés', 'my family or friends'). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: No, I don't usually take photos of buildings. Instead, I prefer photographing well-decorated cafés because I like to share pictures of the coffee and atmosphere with my friends and family.

提案: Be direct and eliminate filler phrases. Use one clear topic sentence stating the building, then add specific reasons why you want to visit, using linking words like 'because' or 'since'. Avoid contradictions (saying you're not interested in architecture then naming a famous building without reason).

例: I would like to visit the Empire State Building because it's an iconic landmark and offers impressive city views. Although I'm not very interested in architecture generally, I'm curious to see the observation deck and the skyline from there.

提案: Clarify your meaning and fix grammar and vocabulary. Start with a clear statement, then give specific, coherent reasons with correct word choice ('live' not 'leave', 'enjoy beautiful skylines' → 'enjoy the skyline', 'more natural light' not 'costs more natural lights'). Avoid hesitations and contradictory phrases. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it offers great views of the city and plenty of natural light. I think living higher up would feel quieter and more private as well.

× Yes, there is a tall building nearby my house.

✓ Yes, there is a tall building near my house.

Use of 'nearby' as an adverb is incorrect before a noun. 'Nearby' modifies verbs/adjectives; to show proximity to a noun, use the preposition 'near'. Suggestion: say 'near my house.'

× It is owned by a newspaper company, but I've never read the the article from that company.

✓ It is owned by a newspaper company, but I've never read any articles from that company.

There is a repeated 'the the' and article misuse. 'The article' implies a specific article; context suggests unspecified articles, so use 'any articles' or 'an article'. Also remove duplicated 'the'. Suggestion: use 'any articles' or 'an article' depending on meaning.

× No I don't. I usually take photographs when I go to a good decorated cafes to send them to my family or friends to share my thoughts about coffee.

✓ No, I don't. I usually take photographs when I go to well-decorated cafes to send them to my family or friends to share my thoughts about coffee.

Multiple issues: 'a good decorated cafes' mixes singular article with plural noun and wrong adjective order. Change to plural 'cafes' and use 'well-decorated' (adverb + past participle) to modify 'cafes'. Also add comma after 'No'. Suggestion: use 'well-decorated cafes.'

× Well, that's a tough question. Honestly, I'm not interested in architecture, but I would like to visit the Empire State Building and someday.

✓ Well, that's a tough question. Honestly, I'm not interested in architecture, but I would like to visit the Empire State Building someday.

Extra conjunction 'and' before 'someday' creates an incomplete phrase. 'Someday' should directly modify 'visit'. Suggestion: remove 'and'.

× I've heard about that before. That is an iconic skyscraper in New York.

✓ I've heard about it before. It is an iconic skyscraper in New York.

Pronoun reference: 'that' can be used but 'it' is more natural following 'Empire State Building'. This is more about pronoun clarity (use 'it'). Suggestion: use 'it' to refer back to the building.

× Yes, I like to live in a tall building as I'm leaving right now.

✓ Yes, I'd like to live in a tall building, but I'm living where I am right now.

Original mixes present preference with incorrect verb 'leaving' (likely intended 'living') and unclear contrast. 'I'm leaving' is present progressive meaning departing; correct is 'living'. Suggestion: use 'I'd like to live...' for preference and 'I'm living' for current residence.

× Hmm. Because you can't enjoy a beautiful skylines and white panoramic views.

✓ Hmm. You can't enjoy beautiful skylines and panoramic views.

Starting a sentence with 'Because' creates a sentence fragment; also 'a beautiful skylines' mixes singular article with plural noun and 'white panoramic views' is odd—'panoramic views' alone is sufficient. Remove 'Because', drop 'a', and remove 'white'. Suggestion: form a full sentence and correct article-noun agreement.

× It also costs more natural lights.

✓ It also has more natural light.

'Costs more natural lights' is incorrect collocation. 'Cost' is wrong verb; 'natural light' is uncountable and singular. Use 'has more natural light' to express greater natural lighting. Suggestion: say 'has more natural light'.