Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify the main idea with correct vocabulary and grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one specific detail. Use correct words (e.g., 'there are' not 'dial') and correct noun forms. Keep it short and natural.

例: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home because I live in Bangkok. For example, there are several office towers and shopping malls within a ten-minute drive.

提案: Be more coherent and specific. Give a clear topic sentence, then add a reason and an example using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example'). Avoid hesitation sounds and plural/singular mistakes.

例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings because I enjoy architecture. For example, I usually photograph older temples and modern skyscrapers when I walk around the city.

提案: Use correct tense and more precise vocabulary. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give specific reasons and a supporting detail. Use linking words like 'because' and 'also'. Avoid vague phrases like 'historical about architecture'—say 'architectural significance' instead.

例: Yes, I would like to visit the Sagrada Família in Barcelona because of its extraordinary architectural style. It was designed by Gaudí and is still unfinished, so I want to see its unique shapes and details in person before it is completed.

提案: Express your opinion clearly and add a specific reason and contrast. Use polite comparative language and correct grammar (e.g., 'has a nice garden'). Avoid overly emotional metaphors unless explained.

例: No, I wouldn't want to live in a tall building because it feels too confined for me. I prefer a house with a nice garden where I can relax and grow plants, so I would choose a low-rise home instead.

× Dial toll booting near my home because I live in Bangkok.

✓ There are tall buildings near my home because I live in Bangkok.

The original sentence contains incorrect and non-word items ('Dial toll booting'). The question asks about presence of tall buildings, so use 'There are' for existence and plural 'tall buildings'. This fixes 'There be issue' and subject-verb agreement for plural. Suggestion: use 'There are' + plural noun to state existence of multiple things. ID:3

× Yes, I take picture of building some building that look nice. I would take picture then umm.

✓ Yes, I take pictures of buildings that look nice. I would take pictures of them.

Multiple errors: 'picture' and 'building' should be plural when speaking generally, and 'some building that look' has subject-verb disagreement; 'buildings that look' is correct. Also repeat 'take pictures of them' to refer back. This addresses singular/plural and subject-verb agreement. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general habits and match verb form: 'buildings that look'. ID:1

× There was building that I would like to visit. It was Sagrada Familia in Barcelona.

✓ There is a building that I would like to visit. It is the Sagrada Familia in Barcelona.

The student used past tense 'was' but expresses a present desire to visit, so present tense 'is' fits. Also article needed: 'a building' for one of many, and 'the Sagrada Familia' uses definite article for a specific landmark. Suggestion: use present tense for current preferences and include appropriate articles. ID:5

× It's a building that has historical about architecture and it's not finished until now, so I would like to watch it before it's finished.

✓ It's a building that is historically important for architecture and it's still unfinished, so I would like to see it before it's completed.

Phrases like 'has historical about architecture' are ungrammatical. Use 'is historically important for architecture' or 'has historical significance'. 'Not finished until now' should be 'still unfinished' or 'hasn't been finished yet'. 'Watch' is not appropriate for visiting a building; use 'see'. Suggestion: use correct adjective/adverb forms ('historically important'), correct tense for ongoing state ('is still unfinished'), and correct verb 'see' or 'visit'. ID:13},{

× No, I don't like living in a tall building. It's like living in a tall jail. I would love to live in a house that have a nice garden.

✓ No, I don't like living in a tall building. It's like living in a tall jail. I would love to live in a house that has a nice garden.

The clause 'a house that have' has subject-verb disagreement: singular 'house' needs 'has'. Change 'have' to 'has'. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with singular third-person nouns: 'house' -> 'has'. ID:2