Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with word choice and concise structure. Begin with a clear topic sentence, correct the word error (“fruit”→“food”), and avoid redundant phrases. Use one or two linking words to add a specific reason or example. Keep answers under five sentences.

例: My favourite food is a Frankie, a rolled flatbread similar to a burrito. It usually contains spiced potatoes and a variety of sauces, which make it both spicy and slightly sweet. I especially enjoy it when melted cheese is drizzled on top because it adds a rich texture and balances the spices.

提案: Good content and specific details, but avoid repetition and minor grammar errors. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give two concise supporting details with linking words (for example, 'for example' or 'because'). Correct phrasing like 'based on' and avoid doubled words.

例: When I was young I loved South Indian food. For example, I enjoyed dosas and idlis, and the curries—often made with coconut milk—paired perfectly with dosas because they are creamy and flavourful.

提案: Be more concise and avoid awkward phrasing. Begin with a clear direct answer (Yes/No), then provide a brief specific example using linking words like 'however' or 'for instance'. Remove filler phrases and correct small grammar mistakes.

例: Not really; however, some foods are seasonal. For instance, we eat Till Ladoo in winter because sesame and jaggery are believed to provide warmth and energy on very cold nights.

提案: Organise the answer with a clear topic sentence and avoid repetitive sentences. Use linking words ('although', 'but', 'also') to show contrast and add one concise reason or example. Keep to fewer sentences and correct phrasing like 'I was a kid'→'when I was a child'.

例: No, my favourite foods haven't changed much since childhood. I still love dosas, and although I began enjoying frankies as I grew older, I never stopped liking my earlier favourites; instead, I have simply broadened my tastes.

× It's similar to a burrito, but it has potatoes inside of it and you can put a lot of different sauces on top of it.

✓ It's similar to a burrito, but it has potatoes inside it and you can put many different sauces on it.

'Inside of' and 'on top of' are wordy; standard English prefers 'inside' and 'on'. Also 'a lot of different sauces' is informal and slightly wordy; 'many different sauces' is more concise. Suggestion: Use 'inside' and 'on' for cleaner prepositional phrases and 'many' for a formal count reference.

× These curries are usually based out of coconut milk or coconut oil and you need you have very beautiful dosas with which you can couple them and they taste just magnificent.

✓ These curries are usually based on coconut milk or coconut oil, and you have very nice dosas to pair with them; they taste magnificent.

Several issues: 'based out of' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'based on' (preposition error). The original contains a duplicated fragment 'you need you have' and awkward formal phrasing 'with which you can couple them.' Replace with 'you have very nice dosas to pair with them.' Also 'beautiful' describing dosas is acceptable but 'nice' is more natural here. Suggestion: Use 'based on' for composition, remove duplicate words, and use natural collocations like 'pair with'.

× Not necessarily that I'm having different foods at different times of the year, but there are certain foods that are made for winter because they help you provide warmth inside.

✓ Not necessarily that I eat different foods at different times of the year, but there are certain foods made for winter because they help keep you warm.

'I'm having different foods' is unnatural; 'I eat' is the correct present-tense habitual form. 'Help you provide warmth inside' is ungrammatical and awkward; correct phrasing is 'help keep you warm.' Suggestion: Use simple present to describe habitual actions and use 'keep you warm' for physical warmth.

× We have a ladoo named Till Ladoo which helps you feel warm during, especially during very cold nights.

✓ We have a ladoo called Til Ladoo that helps you feel warm, especially during very cold nights.

Word choice and word order: 'named' is acceptable but 'called' is more natural; correct spelling is 'Til' or 'Til Ladoo' (avoid 'Till' which usually means 'until'). Remove the extra comma and unnatural insertion 'during, especially during'. Use a single 'especially during' phrase. Suggestion: Use 'called' and place 'especially during very cold nights' at the end.

× I feel this is not true. I used to love dosas and I was a kid.

✓ I don't think that's true. I used to love dosas when I was a kid.

'I feel this is not true' is grammatical but sounds unnatural in spoken English; 'I don't think that's true' is more idiomatic. The clause 'I used to love dosas and I was a kid' incorrectly connects two time-related clauses; use 'when I was a kid' to indicate time. Suggestion: Use 'when' to link past habit to the time period.

× So for me my food preferences remain constant. It is just that they keep on adding that is I start liking more food dishes.

✓ So for me, my food preferences have remained constant. It's just that I keep discovering and liking more dishes.

Tense and phrasing: 'remain' can be acceptable, but because earlier the student refers from childhood to now, present perfect 'have remained' better links past to present. 'They keep on adding that is I start liking more food dishes' is ungrammatical and unclear. Rephrase to 'I keep discovering and liking more dishes.' Suggestion: Use present perfect for continuity and concise verbs like 'discover' and 'like.'

× But I think it has never happened to me that I've stopped liking something.

✓ But I don't think I've ever stopped liking anything.

Word order and redundancy: 'It has never happened to me that I've stopped liking something' is wordy and awkward. Use present perfect negative contraction 'I don't think I've ever...' and 'anything' is more natural than 'something' in negative contexts. Suggestion: Use concise present perfect constructions for life experiences.