Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and correct minor grammar (e.g., "favorite", "I usually choose biryani over other dishes", "the most comforting food").

例: I don't have a single favourite food, but I usually choose biryani when I eat out because it feels like comfort food. In particular, I like its fragrant rice and spicy meat, which remind me of family meals.

提案: Give a clearer topic sentence and use specific vocabulary. Replace vague words like "layers" with the correct item (perhaps "lollies/sweets" or "crisps"). Use linking words (e.g., "because", "for example") and limit to two supporting details. Fix grammar: "I used to eat more packaged snacks than home-cooked food."

例: When I was young, I ate more packaged snacks than home-cooked meals because they were convenient. For example, I often had crisps and sweet candies as after-school treats.

提案: Answer directly and use concise linking phrases. Correct grammar (e.g., "different times of the year", "special events that happen"). Provide one specific example of a seasonal dish to make the answer more vivid.

例: Not usually; we mostly eat the same everyday foods. However, at special occasions like Christmas we prepare traditional dishes such as roast turkey and special desserts, so our meals change during those celebrations.

提案: Make a clear topic sentence and use specific examples. Use correct tense and grammar ("I used to avoid", "I eat now", "they have become"). Limit to two sentences and include a reason or example to support the change.

例: Yes, my food preferences have changed since childhood; I now enjoy many dishes I once avoided. For example, I used to dislike vegetables, but now I often eat grilled broccoli and salads because I appreciate their flavors and health benefits.

× I don't particularly have a favorite food but most of the time when I go to restaurants I choose eating biryani then the other food items because that is the most comfort food I have ever got.

✓ I don't particularly have a favorite food, but most of the time when I go to restaurants I choose biryani over other dishes because it is the most comforting food I have ever had.

The phrase 'choose eating biryani' is incorrect; after 'choose' use a noun or infinitive, not a gerund in this context. Also 'other food items' is better as 'other dishes', 'most comfort food' should be 'most comforting food', and 'have ever got' is wrong in standard English; use present perfect 'have ever had'. Suggest using nouns and correct adjective form and correct past participle for 'have'.

× When I was young, I used to eat packed food items than the normal food that we choose to eat every day.

✓ When I was young, I used to eat packaged food items more than the normal food that we chose to eat every day.

'Packed' is acceptable but 'packaged' is more natural here. The sentence incorrectly uses 'than' without a comparative structure; use 'more than'. Also maintain past tense consistency: 'choose' should be 'chose' to match 'used to' and past timeframe.

× I like, uh, layers and all those potato chips that are being packed and all those varieties of layers.

✓ I liked, uh, Lays and all those packaged potato chips and the different varieties of Lays.

Pronoun and noun form issues: brand name 'Lays' (capitalized) and repetition 'layers' seems to be 'Lays'. Maintain past tense 'liked' to match 'When I was young'. 'That are being packed' is awkward; use 'packaged' or omit passive. Clarify 'varieties of Lays' rather than 'varieties of layers'.

× I don't really think that I eat a different food at different levels of the year because, uh, we tend to make special food items only on special events like Christmas, Easter and all those festivals and traditional cultural events that happens in our family.

✓ I don't really think that I eat different foods at different times of the year because we tend to make special dishes only on special occasions like Christmas, Easter and other festivals and cultural events in our family.

'At different levels of the year' is incorrect; use 'at different times of the year'. 'Food' as a countable plural here is better as 'different foods'. 'Special events' vs 'special occasions' — occasions is more natural. 'Happens in our family' should be 'in our family' without 'happens'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and natural prepositions.

× Other than that, we used to make common foods that we eat every day.

✓ Other than that, we usually make the common foods that we eat every day.

'Used to' implies a past habit; context is present habit so 'usually make' is better. 'Common foods that we eat every day' is acceptable but adding 'the' clarifies. Ensure verb tense matches the intended meaning.

× Of course, a lot of things changed as days passed.

✓ Of course, a lot of things changed as the days passed.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'days' makes the phrase unnatural. Keep past tense 'changed' consistent; include 'the' for natural phrasing.

× The lot of food items that I used avoid when I was a child, I am eating right now when I have grown up and that have become my favorite recently.

✓ Many of the food items that I used to avoid when I was a child I eat now that I have grown up, and they have become my favorites recently.

Several issues: 'The lot of' is incorrect — use 'many of the'. Missing 'to' after 'used' — correct form is 'used to avoid'. Tense consistency: 'I am eating right now when I have grown up' is awkward; use 'I eat now that I have grown up'. Pronoun number: 'that have become my favorite' should be 'they have become my favorites' to agree with plural 'food items'.

× Not only a single food, many of the food items.

✓ Not just a single food; there are many food items.

Sentence fragment and article misuse: 'Not only a single food' is incomplete; better to say 'Not just a single food' or 'Not only a single food, but many food items.' Add a verb to complete the sentence and use natural phrase 'many food items'.