Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear and concise: start with a direct topic sentence naming the food, then give 1–2 specific supporting details (when you eat it, why you like it) using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid vague phrases and repetitions. Improve pronunciation of key words and correct sentence structure (e.g., 'I like it because...' not 'I like that bad').

例: My favourite food is spicy North Korean instant noodles. I enjoy them because the strong flavour is comforting, and I usually eat them when I watch movies or listen to music in the evening.

提案: Answer directly and use past tense consistently. Start with a clear topic sentence about childhood preferences, then add a specific reason or example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas, and choose accurate vocabulary (e.g., 'sweet snacks' instead of 'a cheap').

例: When I was young, I didn’t eat much spicy food because my stomach was sensitive. Instead, I loved sweet snacks like candies and chocolate, which I often ate after school.

提案: Give a clear yes/no or more detailed answer and explain with examples tied to seasons. Use linking words (for example, 'in winter' and 'in summer') and specific foods or drinks. Correct grammar and vocabulary (e.g., 'warming foods' not 'more wonderful for our bodies').

例: Yes. In winter I prefer warm, hearty foods like soups and stews because they keep me warm. In summer I choose cool drinks and salads, such as iced tea or a cucumber salad, to feel refreshed.

提案: Answer directly with a clear statement about change, then explain why with specific reasons and use consistent tense. Use linking words like 'because' or 'however' to contrast past and present preferences. Avoid contradictory or unclear phrasing.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. As a child I liked sweet snacks, but now I prefer spicy dishes because I enjoy stronger flavours and my tolerance for spice has increased.

× My favorite food is something like spicy and a little bit so so it's gonna be in stock.

✓ My favorite food is something spicy and a little bit so-so; it's instant North Korean noodles.

The sentence uses adjectives and adverbs incorrectly and has unclear phrasing. 'Spicy' should modify 'food' directly. 'So so' should be hyphenated as 'so-so' or replaced with 'a little' for clarity. 'It's gonna be in stock' is informal and unclear; context shows the student means 'it's instant North Korean noodles.' Use concise, correct adjective placement and avoid informal contractions. Suggestion: Say 'My favorite food is something spicy, a little so-so; it's instant North Korean noodles.' Use correct adjective placement and standard vocabulary.

× I like that bad as I eat it when I have time and when I watching the movies and listening songs.

✓ I like it a lot because I eat it when I have time and when I watch movies and listen to songs.

The clause 'when I watching' incorrectly uses the present participle instead of the base form after 'when I'. After 'I' we need the simple present 'watch.' Also 'listening songs' needs the verb 'listen to' plus the object. 'Like that bad' is incorrect collocation; use 'like it a lot' or 'like it a lot.' Suggestion: Use simple present verbs for habitual actions: 'I eat it... when I watch movies and listen to songs.'

× Uh, as a kid when I was young, I don't eat that much spicy food as I know because at that time I cannot eat that much spicy.

✓ Uh, as a kid when I was young, I didn't eat very spicy food because at that time I couldn't eat much spice.

The sentence mixes present tense ('don't eat') with past time context ('as a kid', 'when I was young'). For past habits, use past tense: 'didn't eat' and 'couldn't.' Also 'that much spicy' is ungrammatical; use 'very spicy food' or 'much spice.' Suggestion: Use past tense consistently when referring to childhood habits.

× And as a kid I love to eat sweet snack like a cheap.

✓ As a kid I loved to eat sweet snacks, like cheap candy.

Tense inconsistency: 'I love' should be past 'I loved' for childhood. 'Sweet snack' needs plural 'snacks' or 'a sweet snack.' The phrase 'like a cheap' is incomplete; likely 'cheap candy' or 'cheap sweets.' Suggestion: Use plural nouns for general habits and correct collocations: 'sweet snacks' and specify the item: 'cheap candy.'

× So is not that sure because uh, one is winter season.

✓ I'm not sure, but in winter I...

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'So is not that sure' lacks a subject. Replace with 'I'm not sure' for personal uncertainty. 'One is winter season' is unnatural; specify 'in winter' to indicate the season. Suggestion: Use a clear subject and natural prepositional phrase: 'In winter I like...'.

× I like to eat more wonderful for our bodies and uh, 1 is really hot.

✓ I like to eat more nourishing foods for our bodies, and when it is really hot...

'More wonderful for our bodies' is awkward; use 'more nourishing' or 'healthier.' '1 is really hot' appears to be a typo for 'it is really hot' or 'it is very hot.' Suggestion: Use appropriate adjectives such as 'nourishing' and correct pronouns: 'when it is really hot.'

× I like to eat some kind of cool like a beverage.

✓ I like to have something cool to drink, like a beverage.

'Eat some kind of cool' is wrong because 'cool' modifies a drink, and you 'have' or 'drink' beverages, not 'eat' them. Use 'have' or 'drink' and 'something cool to drink' for natural English. Suggestion: Say 'I like to have something cool to drink, like a beverage.'

× Yes, definitely. That changed a lot when I was young.

✓ Yes, definitely. That has changed a lot since I was young.

The student answers whether their favourite food has changed (present perfect context). Use present perfect 'has changed' and time expression 'since I was young' to show change from past to now. The original 'That changed a lot when I was young' implies change occurred in the past while young, not that it changed since then. Suggestion: Use present perfect for life changes continuing to present.

× I love to eat sweet as I mentioned, but now I prefer to eat kind of spicy and little bit.

✓ I loved eating sweets as I mentioned, but now I prefer something spicy, a little bit.

Tense inconsistency: 'I love to eat sweet' should be past if referring to childhood ('I loved eating sweets'). 'Prefer to eat kind of spicy and little bit' is awkward; use 'prefer something spicy, a little bit' or 'prefer mildly spicy food.' Suggestion: Use correct tense for the reference time and natural adjectives: 'mildly spicy' or 'a little spicy.'

× So yeah. But if I have to go back when I was young, I wish I could eat that spicy food.

✓ So yeah. But if I could go back to when I was young, I would wish I could eat that spicy food.

The conditional about going back in time requires subjunctive/conditional forms. 'If I have to go back' incorrectly uses present tense; use 'If I could go back' or 'If I were able to go back.' Also 'to when I was young' needs 'to.' Suggestion: Use proper conditional structure: 'If I could go back to when I was young, I would eat that spicy food.'