Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your favourite food, then give one or two specific reasons and a short example. Avoid filler words like "uh" and phrasing errors (e.g., "like the homemade food"). Use linking words (for example, "because" and "so") correctly and keep to 2–4 sentences.

例: My favourite food is homemade meals, although I often eat pizza on my day off. I prefer homemade food because it is fresher and healthier, but pizza is convenient since a good shop is only 20–25 minutes away. For example, we sometimes buy pizza and watch a movie together at home.

提案: Improve grammar and sentence variety. Begin with a clear topic sentence about what you liked, then provide specific details and avoid repeating "so." Correct verb forms (e.g., "my mother cooked") and use linking words like "because" and "for example." Keep it brief and specific.

例: When I was young, I mostly ate homemade food because my mother cooked for us and we lived in a village with few restaurants. We often ate fresh vegetables from our own fields, which I loved for their flavor and freshness. For example, I remember helping pick tomatoes that we later cooked for dinner.

提案: Make your response more natural and precise. Start with a direct answer (Yes/No), then explain briefly with specific details and one linking phrase. Avoid repeating the word "normal" and improve phrasing (e.g., "available year-round").

例: Not really. In Canada many fruits and vegetables are available year-round, so I usually eat the same kinds of foods throughout the year. For instance, I can buy apples and carrots any season, so my diet doesn't change much.

提案: Clarify and correct mistakes. Start with a direct statement about whether your preferences changed, then give clear reasons and specific examples. Fix grammar (e.g., "My tastes have changed a little"), use linking words like "but" and "because," and avoid awkward phrases like "now I'm become."

例: Yes, my tastes have changed a little. As a child I often ate instant noodles and snacks like Lays, but now I prefer home-cooked meals because I am more health-conscious. For example, I now choose vegetable-based dishes instead of processed snacks.

× I love to eat like the homemade food but during my day off I would like to eat some pizza because it's available near my home.

✓ I love to eat homemade food, but on my day off I would like to eat some pizza because it is available near my home.

Use 'homemade food' without 'the' and remove filler 'like'. Use preposition 'on' with 'day off'. 'It' refers to 'pizza' so use 'it is'. Also avoid 'would like' plus present habitual—'would like' is okay for preference. Improve fluency by removing unnecessary words. Grammar problem type: 8 Verb + -ing form (original had informal 'like the homemade' misuse affecting verb/noun patterns).

× So it's just 20 to 25 minutes and we grab them and have some movie at home with and enjoying our pizza.

✓ It is just 20 to 25 minutes, and we grab it and watch a movie at home while enjoying our pizza.

Use 'it' to refer to the trip time, not 'them'. Use 'watch a movie' (verb) rather than 'have some movie'. Use 'while enjoying' to connect actions correctly; avoid mixing 'and' plus gerund incorrectly. This fixes verb forms and coordination errors.

× When I was young so usually my mother cook food at home because we live in a village so there is no many options.

✓ When I was young, my mother usually cooked food at home because we lived in a village, so there were not many options.

The sentence describes past habits, so verbs must be in past tense: 'cooked', 'lived', 'were'. 'There is no many options' is ungrammatical; use 'there were not many options' or 'there weren't many options'. Remove unnecessary filler 'so' after the introductory clause.

× So I love to eat homemade food like some fresh vegetables which we bought from our own fields.

✓ I loved to eat homemade food, such as fresh vegetables that we bought from our own fields.

Maintain past tense 'loved' and 'bought' to match 'when I was young'. Use 'such as' for examples. Replace 'which' with 'that' for essential clause; both are acceptable but 'that' is common in informal speech. Ensure pronoun/tense consistency.

× So I think that's the only thing I love to enjoy at my home.

✓ So I think that was the only thing I enjoyed at home.

Maintain past tense to match context. 'Love to enjoy at my home' is awkward—use 'enjoyed at home'. Remove redundant 'my'. This corrects sentence structure and tense consistency.

× I don't think so because here in Canada we are finding the same items all over the year.

✓ I don't think so because here in Canada we can find the same items all year round.

Use simple modal 'can find' for ability/availability. 'Are finding' (present continuous) is unnatural for general statements. Use 'all year round' or 'throughout the year' instead of 'all over the year'.

× So I just eat the normal food which we can buy easily from the market, like the normal vegetables, normal fruits and not any different kind of food.

✓ So I just eat ordinary food that we can easily buy at the market, like regular vegetables and fruits, not any special kinds of food.

Replace repetitive 'normal' with 'ordinary' or 'regular' and move adverb 'easily' before verb. Use 'that' for essential clause. 'Not any different kind of food' is awkward; use 'not any special kinds of food'.

× Has your favourite food changed since you were a child? Yards change a little bit, like during my childhood days I love to eat Maggie and some Lays, some crackers from the shop.

✓ My tastes have changed a little bit. During my childhood I loved to eat Maggi, some Lays, and crackers from the shop.

Answer should use present perfect 'have changed' for change since childhood; student response should match tense. 'Yards' appears to be a mispronunciation; replace with 'my tastes'. Use past tense 'loved' for childhood habits. Correct brand spelling 'Maggi'. Use commas to separate items.

× But nowadays I usually prefer to eat from home because it's more healthy and now I'm become a little bit more health conscious also.

✓ But nowadays I usually prefer to eat at home because it's healthier and I have become a bit more health-conscious.

Use 'eat at home' (preposition). 'More healthy' should be 'healthier'. Use present perfect 'have become' to describe change up to now. Hyphenate 'health-conscious' or write as two words; place 'a bit' for natural phrasing. Remove redundant 'now' and 'also'.