Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence stating your favourite food, then give one or two specific reasons or an example. Avoid repetition and filler words like "you know." Use linking words (for example, because, so) to connect ideas.

例: My favourite food is hot pot, especially Chinese and Korean styles. I enjoy hot pot because I can cook my own ingredients and try different sauces, which makes the meal sociable and fun. For example, last month I went to an all-you-can-eat hot pot restaurant and tried spicy broth with fresh beef and vegetables, which I loved.

提案: Use correct tense and clearer vocabulary. Begin with a simple topic sentence, then describe a specific dish with concrete details (name, ingredients, how it's cooked). Limit filler words and ensure sentences are grammatical.

例: When I was young I mainly ate Egyptian dishes. One of my favourites was kebab on flatbread: seasoned minced beef placed on thin bread and grilled over charcoal. It tasted smoky and rich, especially when served with a spicy garlic sauce.

提案: Answer directly and give a brief explanation with an example. Use linking words (however, sometimes) and avoid repeating phrases. Mention a seasonal or mood-based example to make the answer specific.

例: I don't follow a strict seasonal diet; it mostly depends on my mood. Sometimes in winter I crave hot soups and hot pot, while in summer I prefer lighter dishes like salads or sushi. For instance, last winter I often chose spicy Korean stews to warm up.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence stating whether it has changed, then explain why with specific examples of new cuisines. Use correct grammar and reduce filler words. Mention particular dishes you've adopted to illustrate the change.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. Growing up in Egypt I mostly ate traditional Egyptian dishes, but after moving to Dubai I discovered many cuisines. For example, I now enjoy Korean barbecue and Chinese hot pot, which I didn't eat often as a child.

× Yeah, My favorite food, I always like to go outside and eat in the unlimited buffet, for example, the Chinese hot pot and Korean hot pot, because I really like to cook my own food, you know, and it gives a lot of good vibes, you know, And it's something nice that I would like, you know, to cook, you know.

✓ My favorite food? I always like to go out and eat at an all-you-can-eat buffet, for example Chinese hot pot and Korean hot pot, because I really like to cook my own food and it gives me good vibes. It's something I enjoy doing.

Errors: unnecessary capitalized My, incorrect article 'the unlimited buffet' (should be 'an all-you-can-eat buffet' or 'an unlimited buffet' but more natural is 'an all-you-can-eat buffet'), repeated filler phrases and informal 'you know' should be reduced, and 'go outside' is better as 'go out'. Also 'it gives a lot of good vibes' should be 'it gives me good vibes' to use a clear subject. Suggestions: use appropriate articles ('an' before vowel sounds), choose natural collocations ('go out', 'eat at a buffet', 'gives me good vibes'), remove excessive fillers, and keep sentence structure concise.

× When I were young, I mainly like the Egyptian food, you know, especially the one which is oily, like the, how she, this is kind of bread, you know, which you put minced beef with some of some kind of spices, you know, and then they grill it in the charcoal. It's very tasty, you know, especially if you will add some, uh, you know, sauce.

✓ When I was young, I mainly liked Egyptian food, especially the oily ones, for example a type of bread topped with minced beef and spices that they grill over charcoal. It's very tasty, especially if you add some sauce.

Errors: 'were' should be 'was' for singular first person (subject-verb agreement). Tense consistency: 'mainly like' should be past 'mainly liked'. Problems with articles and word choice: 'the Egyptian food' → 'Egyptian food', 'the one which is oily' → 'the oily ones' or 'especially oily dishes'. Awkward relative clauses and filler phrases removed. Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood and simplify descriptions for clarity.

× Again, no, depends, you know, it depends on the mood. I don't have specific kind of food. So sometimes I I'm craving for eating Korean food, sometimes I'm craving for eating Chinese food. I don't have specific kind of food. You know, I've tried everything I like.

✓ It depends on my mood. I don't have a specific favourite food. Sometimes I crave Korean food; sometimes I crave Chinese food. I don't have a particular favourite because I've tried many things I like.

Errors: tense and form issues: 'depends' needs a subject ('It depends'), 'I don't have specific kind of food' needs article ('a specific kind of food' or 'a specific favourite food'), and 'I'm craving for eating' is incorrect collocation — use 'I crave' or 'I'm craving' (no 'for' or 'eating'). Repetition should be avoided. Suggestions: supply necessary subjects, use correct articles, and use natural verbs for cravings ('crave' or 'be craving').

× Yeah, my favorite food has changed since I were young, because when I was young I was living in Egypt.

✓ Yes, my favorite food has changed since I was young, because when I was young I lived in Egypt.

Errors: 'since I were young' — incorrect verb form; should be 'since I was young' (subject-verb agreement). 'I was living in Egypt' can be simplified to 'I lived in Egypt' for a completed past situation. Use 'since' with present perfect ('has changed since I was young') and ensure past simple for the past fact.

× So specifically I was, I like the Egyptian food, but right now it has been different cuisines because I live in Dubai, which is like multinational city, you know, it has a lot of variety of food, you know, and different cultures and different type of food.

✓ I specifically liked Egyptian food, but now I eat different cuisines because I live in Dubai, which is a multinational city with a wide variety of foods and cultures.

Errors: tense mismatch ('I was, I like' should be 'I specifically liked'), awkward phrasing 'it has been different cuisines' is incorrect; use 'I eat different cuisines' or 'I now enjoy different cuisines'. Article and noun form issues: 'a multinational city' (needs article) and 'different type of food' → 'different types of food'. Suggestions: keep tense consistent, use correct articles, and use plural nouns for 'types' and 'foods' when speaking generally.