Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add a brief reason or example with a linking word. Use one or two supporting details and keep it under five sentences.

例: My favourite food is spicy Asian dishes, especially ramen. For example, I often go to Ichiran, a famous ramen chain in Japan, because I enjoy its rich, spicy broth and chewy noodles. I usually choose extra spice to make it more flavourful.

提案: Remove unclear phrases and fillers, and give a clear topic sentence followed by a coherent explanation using linking words. Be specific about tastes and feelings and avoid contradictions in tense or perspective.

例: When I was young, I preferred Western foods such as pasta and hamburgers because they had simple, familiar flavours. In contrast, I avoided typical Japanese dishes like miso soup and sashimi at the time because I thought they were too mature for my palate.

提案: Be precise about traditions and use linking words to connect ideas. Correct vocabulary (e.g., "osechi" not "oseji") and give one or two clear examples of dishes for each season. Keep it fluent and complete the final sentence.

例: Yes, I do. For example, during New Year I usually eat osechi ryori, which are special preserved dishes served in boxes, and sometimes mochi. By contrast, at Christmas I often enjoy Western-style meals such as roast chicken or cake with my family.

提案: Use natural phrasing (e.g., "definitely changed") and avoid fillers. Provide a concise comparison with reasons or an example, and do not leave sentences incomplete. Use linking words like "however" or "as I grew older" to show contrast.

例: Yes, it has definitely changed. For example, when I was a child I preferred heavy, high-calorie Western dishes such as meat pasta and hamburgers; however, as I grew older I began to enjoy lighter, healthier Asian foods like miso soup and grilled fish because they make me feel better.

× Favorite food is spicy or Asian food.

✓ My favorite food is spicy or Asian food.

The sentence is missing the definite article or possessive determiner before 'favorite food'. In English, when stating one's favorite, use a possessive determiner like 'my'. Suggestion: Always include 'my' when talking about personal preferences (e.g., 'My favorite food is ...').

× For specifically ramen, I really like ramen so I got a lot of ramen chain restaurant in Japan.

✓ Specifically, I really like ramen, and there are many ramen chain restaurants in Japan.

The original sentence has word order and verb choice problems. 'For specifically ramen' is incorrect word order; use 'Specifically, I really like ramen'. 'I got a lot of ramen chain restaurant in Japan' uses 'got' incorrectly and has singular/plural mismatch. Use 'there are many ramen chain restaurants in Japan' to indicate existence and plural. Suggestion: Use 'there is/are' for existence and match plural nouns with plural verbs.

× My favorite one is Ichiran which is quite well known ramen chain restaurant in Japan.

✓ My favorite is Ichiran, which is a quite well-known ramen chain restaurant in Japan.

Missing article 'a' before 'quite well-known ramen chain restaurant' and hyphenation for compound adjective 'well-known'. Also 'one' is unnecessary after 'favorite'. Suggestion: Use 'a' before singular countable nouns and hyphenate compound adjectives before nouns.

× I like spicy taste.

✓ I like spicy flavors.

'Spicy taste' is unnatural; 'flavor' or 'food' fits better. Also plural 'flavors' is more natural when speaking generally. Suggestion: Use collocations like 'spicy food' or 'spicy flavors'.

× Amazon kicked.

✓ (Unclear intended meaning; possibly: 'I can't remember' or remove the sentence.)

'Amazon kicked.' is ungrammatical and unclear in context. It may be a transcription error. Suggestion: Clarify the intended idea or remove the fragment.

× I prefer western dishes like pasta and hamburgers because it's easy to uh, taste.

✓ I preferred Western dishes like pasta and hamburgers because they were easy to taste.

Tense should match past context ('did you like when you were young?'), so use past 'preferred'. 'Western' should be capitalized. 'It's' refers to singular but 'pasta and hamburgers' is plural, so use 'they were' or rephrase to 'because they were easy to eat/liked'. 'Easy to taste' is unnatural; use 'easy to eat' or 'simple to enjoy'. Suggestion: Match verb tense to time frame and ensure pronoun number matches antecedent.

× But uh, I I hate everyday Japanese food like miso soup and sashimi because I felt too.

✓ But I hated everyday Japanese food like miso soup and sashimi because I felt it was too mature for me at that time.

Tense should be past ('hated' and 'felt') to match 'when you were young'. 'I I' is repetition. 'Because I felt too' is incomplete; add what was felt ('it was too mature for me'). Suggestion: Use complete clauses and consistent past tense for past preferences.

× I felt too grown up for me at that time.

✓ I felt too grown up at that time.

Redundant 'for me' after 'I felt' is unnecessary. Use concise phrasing: 'I felt too grown up at that time.' Also keep past tense. Suggestion: Avoid redundant pronouns when subject already expresses perspective.

× Yes, uh, I'll eat a different food depending on the occasion.

✓ Yes, I eat different foods depending on the occasion.

Question asked about habitual behavior generally, so present simple is appropriate ('Do you eat different foods at different times of the year?'). Using 'I'll eat' (future) is less natural. Also use plural 'foods'. Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual actions and plural when referring to various items.

× During the year, for example, at the New Year's Eve and New Year's holiday, I would eat the traditional Japanese food, which is called oseji.

✓ For example, on New Year's Eve and during the New Year's holiday, I would eat the traditional Japanese food, which is called osechi.

Use 'on New Year's Eve' and 'during the New Year's holiday'. The term is 'osechi', not 'oseji'. 'During the year' is unnecessary. Suggestion: Use correct prepositions for specific days ('on') and correct cultural terms.

× It's kind of like a mochi.

✓ It's kind of like mochi.

'Mochi' is an uncountable/uncount noun in this context; do not use the article 'a' before it. Suggestion: Use nouns in their typical form (uncountable) and omit 'a' when comparing to such foods.

× But at the Christmas season, I would have a lot of Western dishes like.

✓ But at Christmastime, I would have many Western dishes.

'At the Christmas season' is awkward; 'Christmastime' or 'during the Christmas season' is better. 'A lot of ... like' is incomplete—remove 'like' or specify examples. Use 'many' with countable plural 'dishes'. Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments and use complete comparisons or examples.

× Yes it it is definitely chapter shifted.

✓ Yes, it has definitely changed over time.

Original is ungrammatical and unclear ('chapter shifted' appears incorrect). Use clear expression 'changed over time' to answer 'Has your favourite food changed since you were a child?'. Suggestion: Use idiomatic expressions such as 'changed' or 'shifted' with proper auxiliary verbs.

× For example when I was a kid I preferred heavy and high calorie uh western dishes like meat pasta and hamburgers.

✓ For example, when I was a kid I preferred heavy, high-calorie Western dishes like meat pasta and hamburgers.

Use past tense 'preferred' is correct; fix punctuation and hyphenate 'high-calorie' as a compound adjective, and capitalize 'Western'. Suggestion: Use hyphens for compound adjectives and proper capitalization.

× But as I get older I came to like healthy and light Asian food like Japanese miso soup and even ****.

✓ But as I got older I came to like healthy, light Asian food like Japanese miso soup and even ... .

Mixing tenses: 'as I get older' (present) vs 'I came to like' (past). Since speaking about past change, use past: 'as I got older'. Add commas and consistent tense. Suggestion: Keep time reference and verb tense consistent when describing changes over time.