Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and choose one or two specific favorite dishes to discuss. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons or a brief example. Reduce fillers and repetition.

例: I usually prefer Italian food, especially seafood pasta and carbonara. I enjoy them because the pasta is rich and comforting, and the seafood adds a fresh, salty flavor. For instance, I often order shrimp linguine at my local Italian restaurant when I want something satisfying.

提案: Provide a clearer main sentence and give a specific example of a dish you liked as a child. Avoid grammatical mistakes and unnecessary repetition. Use a linking phrase to connect traveling experience to your childhood preference.

例: When I was young I mostly enjoyed simple fast food like burgers and fries, even though my family traveled a lot. Because we tried many cuisines, I remember loving a particular fast-food burger after long trips, which felt familiar and comforting.

提案: Be specific about seasons or occasions and give one clear example. Remove hesitations and redundant words. Use a linking word (e.g., "for example" or "for instance") and describe a particular dish or occasion briefly.

例: Yes, I do. For example, during holidays I eat richer foods like roast turkey at Christmas, while when I travel I try local specialties—such as paella in Spain—because I want to taste authentic dishes unique to each place.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence stating whether your favorite changed, then provide one or two specific examples of foods you now like that you disliked before. Avoid hesitations and complete sentences; finish thoughts fully.

例: Yes, my tastes have changed. As a child I disliked vegetables, but now I enjoy salads and roasted vegetables. For example, I used to avoid broccoli, but now I often have it with garlic and olive oil as a side dish.

× My favorite food really changes on a daily basis, but these days I'm really craving some Italian food like seafood, pasta or carbonara.

✓ My favorite food really changes daily, but these days I'm craving Italian dishes like seafood, pasta, or carbonara.

Reduction of redundant adverb phrase 'on a daily basis' to 'daily' makes sentence more natural; 'really craving some Italian food like seafood, pasta or carbonara' is improved by using 'craving Italian dishes' and adding commas for list clarity. This is primarily a word choice and modifier placement issue; use adjectives/adverbs that are concise and place them next to the words they modify.

× I really do enjoy them.

✓ I really do enjoy them.

No grammatical change required; pronoun 'them' correctly refers to plural foods and 'do enjoy' is an emphatic present form. Left unchanged.

× I wasn't too picky to when I was a child since my family always used to travel and they always would bring me along with them.

✓ I wasn't too picky when I was a child because my family used to travel and they always brought me along.

Remove extraneous 'to' after 'picky' and simplify verb phrases: 'used to travel' is correct and 'always would bring me along with them' is wordy and mixes tense/modal forms. Use simple past 'brought' for repeated past action. This fixes sentence structure and tense consistency.

× I had the chance to taste different cultures dishes at a really young age, but I preferred food that any child would prefer at that age like fast food.

✓ I had the chance to taste different cultures' dishes at a very young age, but I preferred the kinds of food any child would prefer at that age, like fast food.

Add possessive apostrophe to 'cultures' to indicate dishes of different cultures; change 'a really young age' to 'a very young age' and add 'the kinds of' for clarity. Also insert commas to separate clauses. This corrects prepositional/possessive usage and improves noun phrase structure.

× For example, in special occasions or when I'm traveling, I eat foods that I don't eat on a daily basis.

✓ For example, on special occasions or when I'm traveling, I eat foods that I don't eat daily.

Use preposition 'on' with 'occasions' (not 'in'). Replace 'on a daily basis' with 'daily' for concision. This fixes preposition usage and refines present tense habitual description.

× Umm, like this special dishes of the country that I'm in or uh, luxury foods that we go in a restaurant in a special for a special occasion.

✓ For example, special dishes of the country I'm in or luxury foods we have at a restaurant for a special occasion.

Original sentence has mixed fragments and incorrect prepositions ('go in a restaurant', 'in a special'). Recast sentence into a clear noun phrase: 'special dishes of the country I'm in' and 'luxury foods we have at a restaurant for a special occasion.' This corrects sentence structure and preposition use.

× Of course, I think everyone's does because our tastes, umm, taste system improves when we grow into an adult.

✓ Of course, I think everyone's changes because our taste system improves as we grow into adulthood.

'Everyone's does' is incorrect; 'everyone's' requires a noun like 'everyone's taste' or use 'everyone's changes' referring to 'taste.' 'Taste system' is awkward; 'taste' or 'sense of taste' is better. Use 'as we grow into adulthood' for natural present-tense general statement. This fixes tense and word choice.

× For example, you start to like the food that you didn't, you didn't like when you were a child.

✓ For example, you start to like foods that you didn't like when you were a child.

Remove the repeated fragment 'you didn't,' change 'the food' to plural 'foods' to match 'you start to like,' and streamline the clause. This corrects redundancy and improves sentence structure.

× Uh, for example, meat.

✓ For example, meat.

Remove filler 'Uh' when writing; leave concise example. This addresses unnecessary interjection and cleans sentence structure.

× I hated all vegetables, but right now I like.

✓ I hated all vegetables, but now I like them.

Sentence lacks an object after 'like'; add 'them' to refer to vegetables. 'Right now' can be shortened to 'now' for naturalness. This fixes present tense predication and missing object.