Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, reduce fillers ('uh'), correct grammar (use present simple), and add one or two specific details about what makes your mother's beef noodles special. Use a linking word to connect ideas.

例: My favourite food is my mum’s beef noodles. I prefer her version because the broth is rich and fragrant and the beef is tender. In addition, she uses homemade noodles which have a chewier texture than store-bought ones, so the whole dish tastes unique.

提案: Answer directly with a clear past-tense sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, and explain briefly and coherently why your preference changed. Use linking words like 'but' or 'however' to show contrast.

例: When I was young, I loved sweet foods such as candy and sweet fruits because I had a big sweet tooth. However, I developed dental problems, so I changed my preference and now I prefer savoury dishes like beef noodles.

提案: This answer is clear and relevant but could be more concise and use smoother linking. Remove fillers and tighten sentences; give one specific example for each season and use linking words like 'for example' or 'in winter'.

例: Yes. In summer I usually eat cold dishes such as salads or cold noodles to stay cool. In contrast, in winter I prefer hot foods like hot pot or hearty soups because they warm me up and restore energy.

提案: Provide a direct, grammatical response in past and present tense to show change. Avoid vague or incorrect phrases ('mouth of bad teeth'); be specific about reasons and use a linking word to contrast past and present.

例: Yes, my favourite foods have changed. As a child I loved sweets, but now I prefer spicy and savoury dishes. This change happened partly because dental problems made it harder to enjoy very sugary foods, so I started choosing stronger-flavoured meals instead.

× I think my favorite food, uh, is beef noodle, especially made from my mom 'cause every time my mom made beef noodles, I think it is it taste really different from uh, noodles from other stores.

✓ I think my favorite food is beef noodles, especially those made by my mom, because every time my mom makes beef noodles, I think they taste really different from noodles from other stores.

Errors: missing plural/article and wrong verb forms. 'Beef noodle' should be 'beef noodles' (countable plural dish). Use 'made by my mom' instead of 'made from my mom'. Use 'because' not 'cause' in formal speech. Maintain present tense for habitual action: 'every time my mom makes'. Pronouns must agree: 'they taste' referring to 'beef noodles'. Suggestion: use consistent plural nouns and matching verbs and pronouns for clarity.

× And I really like the soup and the meat and the in the noodle.

✓ And I really like the soup, the meat, and the noodles.

Errors: subject-verb/agreement and unnecessary articles. 'the in the noodle' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'the noodles'. Use plural 'noodles' to match list and remove extra 'the' before 'in'. Suggestion: list items clearly and keep consistent plural forms.

× I think I like some sweet fruit, sweet food when I was young because I I got a very sweet teeth and I like to eat everything that tastes sweet S uh, so the con consequences like I got a amount of a bad teeth, so I switched my flavour.

✓ I liked sweet fruits and sweet foods when I was young because I had a sweet tooth and I liked to eat everything that tasted sweet, so as a consequence I had some cavities and I changed my taste.

Errors: tense inconsistency and wrong expressions. Use past tense 'liked' and 'had' for childhood habits. 'I got a very sweet teeth' is incorrect; correct idiom is 'I had a sweet tooth'. 'Bad teeth' should be 'cavities' or 'dental problems'. 'I switched my flavour' is unidiomatic; use 'I changed my taste'. Suggestion: use appropriate past forms for past habits and common idioms for dental issues.

× Now I like beef noodles now.

✓ Now I like beef noodles.

Error: redundant 'now' and tense clarity. Using 'now' twice is unnecessary. Keep single 'now' or omit it when present tense already indicates current preference. Suggestion: avoid redundancy.

× Yes, uh, of course I eat different foods.

✓ Yes, of course I eat different foods at different times of the year.

Error: incomplete reference to question. Tense is present and fine, but sentence did not explicitly address 'at different times of the year'. Clarify by adding phrase to match question. Suggestion: restate context when answering.

× Like I, I always eat some cold foods in summer and I always eat some like hot pot or hot soups in the winter because I need some hot things to warm up my body to get enough energy to fight with the cold.

✓ I always eat cold foods in summer and hot pot or hot soups in winter because I need warm foods to warm my body and get enough energy to fight the cold.

Errors: awkward '-ing' phrasing and word choice. 'Some cold foods' is acceptable but repetitive 'some like' is awkward. 'Hot things' is vague; use 'warm foods'. 'Fight with the cold' should be 'fight the cold'. Suggestion: simplify and use correct verb+noun collocations.

× Yes, it changed. I like to eat sweets, sweet foods when I was a child, but now I like to eat something that is spicy and salty when I uh, when I grow up because I got a mouth of bad teeth and I can't eat anything happily.

✓ Yes, it changed. I liked sweets when I was a child, but now I like to eat foods that are spicy and salty as I grew up because I had dental problems and I couldn't eat happily.

Errors: tense consistency. Use past tense 'liked' for childhood; 'as I grew up' or 'now that I have grown up' for transition. 'I got a mouth of bad teeth' ungrammatical; use 'I had dental problems' or 'I had bad teeth'. Matching past inability: 'I couldn't eat happily'. Suggestion: keep past tense for past events and use natural expressions for dental issues.

× So I switched to something that is salty and.

✓ So I switched to foods that are salty.

Errors: sentence incomplete and article/number agreement. 'Something that is salty and.' is unfinished; choose plural 'foods' to match general preference. Remove trailing conjunction. Suggestion: complete the sentence and match plural when speaking about general food preferences.