Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, avoid fillers (uh), and add a clear reason and brief description using linking words. Use 2–4 sentences max. Pronunciation of specific words (Momo, keema) should be clear.

例: My favourite food is momo, a dumpling filled with spicy chicken keema. I like it because the filling is flavorful and the outer dough is soft, which makes it very satisfying to eat.

提案: Answer directly with a topic sentence about childhood preferences, avoid repeating 'used to', and give one specific example and a linking reason or contrast. Keep it under five sentences and remove hesitations.

例: When I was young, I enjoyed simple home-cooked dishes like rice with lentils because my parents cooked for the family. However, now I prefer spicier and saltier foods, so my tastes have changed over time.

提案: Give a direct answer then expand briefly with specific examples and correct vocabulary (e.g., 'festivals' not 'orgasms'). Remove filler words and keep sentences coherent using linking words like 'however' or 'sometimes'.

例: No, my diet is mostly the same throughout the year; I usually eat dal and curry every day. However, during festivals we prepare special dishes such as chicken rolls or sweets to celebrate.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence stating the change, explain specific examples of past and present preferences, use linking words like 'in the past' and 'now', and avoid fillers. Keep it concise and specific.

例: Yes, my favourite foods have changed. In the past I liked milky, sweet foods such as rice pudding, but now I prefer spicy and salty dishes like curries and stir-fries because I enjoy stronger flavours.

× I really enjoy eating various types of fast foods like Momos or any St. foods, but among them my favorite food is Momo, which is filled with uh, chicken keema, uh, and wrapped with flour. And it is.

✓ I really enjoy eating various types of fast food like momos or other street foods, but my favorite is momo, which is filled with chicken keema and wrapped in dough.

The student used 'fast foods' and 'St. foods' incorrectly. 'Fast food' is an uncountable noun and 'street food' should be written in full. 'Momos' can be plural but when referring to the favorite item singular 'momo' is better. 'Wrapped with flour' is incorrect; use 'wrapped in dough'. Remove filler words ('uh') and redundant phrases. Suggestion: use 'fast food', 'street foods', and 'wrapped in dough' for clarity and correct article/phrase usage.

× I usually don't remember what I used to eat when I was young because at that time I used to eat whatever my parents prepared for me.

✓ I usually don't remember exactly what I ate when I was young because I used to eat whatever my parents prepared for me.

The phrase 'what I used to eat when I was young' mixes habitual past ('used to') with a statement of memory. Use simple past 'ate' to refer to specific past actions within 'remember'. Keep 'used to' for habitual background ('I used to eat whatever my parents prepared'). Suggestion: use 'ate' for remembered past events and 'used to' for general past habits.

× So right now I love eating spicy and salted foods and during and when I was young I used.

✓ So right now I love eating spicy and salty foods, but when I was young I used to prefer milder flavors.

The original sentence is incomplete and mixes time frames awkwardly ('during and when I was young I used'). It lacks an object for 'used' and uses 'salted' instead of 'salty'. Rephrase to contrast current preference with past preference and complete the verb phrase with 'used to prefer'. Suggestion: complete clauses and use 'salty' as the adjective.

× No, I don't eat different foods at different times of year. Normally I eat Dal, Bharat or Curry every day.

✓ No, I don't eat different foods at different times of the year. Normally I eat dal, bharta, or curry every day.

Missing article 'the' in the phrase 'at different times of the year'. Also 'Bharat' likely intended 'bharta' (a dish) and capitalization can be reduced. Suggestion: include 'the' for this time expression and use correct dish names and capitalization conventions.

× Uh, through, uh, to erase my hunger and sometimes, uh, on the special orgasms we prepare extra food such as chicken's roll or anything special.

✓ I eat these to relieve my hunger, and sometimes on special occasions we prepare extra food such as chicken rolls or other special dishes.

Multiple issues: 'erase my hunger' is unnatural — use 'relieve my hunger' or 'satisfy my hunger'. 'Orgasms' is a typo for 'occasions'. 'Chicken's roll' incorrectly uses possessive; use 'chicken roll' or 'chicken rolls'. Remove filler 'uh' and fix pluralization. Suggestion: use 'relieve my hunger', 'special occasions', and 'chicken rolls'.

× Yes, when I was child I used to eat umm, foods like, uh, mixed with uh, milk and whatever I eat it.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I used to eat foods mixed with milk and whatever I could find to eat.

Missing article 'a' before 'child' ('when I was a child'). 'Foods like, mixed with milk and whatever I eat it' is ungrammatical; simplify to 'foods mixed with milk'. 'Whatever I eat it' is incorrect — use 'whatever I could find to eat' or 'whatever was available'. Suggestion: include necessary articles and simplify sentence structure.

× It used to be with milk, but nowadays I like foods which are more, uh, spicy and salty.

✓ They used to be made with milk, but nowadays I like foods that are spicier and saltier.

'It used to be with milk' is vague and mismatched in number; 'they' or 'those foods' is better. Use comparative forms 'spicier' and 'saltier' to compare past and present. Also use 'made with milk' to describe preparation. Suggestion: match number between subject and verb and use comparative adjectives for contrast.