Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with tense and article use, avoid repetition, and make sentences more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Correct vocabulary (e.g., 'we call it Sinigang', 'a tangy sour pork stew') and fix small errors like 'it it'.

例: My favourite food is Sinigang, a traditional Filipino sour pork stew. It has a tangy tamarind broth and is sometimes slightly spicy or salty, so we usually eat it with steamed rice. We often serve it at family gatherings because everyone enjoys its comforting, bold flavour.

提案: Use consistent past tense when referring to childhood and avoid overusing 'always'. Provide one clear contrast between past and present using linking words (e.g., 'back then', 'even now'). Keep it concise and natural.

例: Back when I was a little girl, I loved sweet treats such as cakes, doughnuts and ice cream. Even now, I still enjoy desserts, although I try to eat them less often to stay healthy.

提案: Watch subject-verb agreement and improve coherence by using linking phrases ('for example', 'on birthdays'). Give one specific example per occasion and keep sentences clear. Avoid vague phrases like 'just a simple get together' without connection.

例: Yes. For example, at Christmas we usually serve roasted chicken and pork, while at birthdays we often have spaghetti and cake. These traditional dishes change with the occasion and bring the family together.

提案: Clarify and correct unclear words ('salary soup' seems incorrect) and avoid repeating phrases like 'until now'. Use past and present contrast correctly and give one clear statement about change or continuity plus a reason. Check vocabulary and pronunciation to ensure the examiner understands the dish name.

例: My favourite foods have not changed much since childhood. I still love Sinigang, a sour soup usually eaten with rice, and I also enjoy sweet desserts like cakes and ice cream because they remind me of family celebrations.

× I'm always fond of Filipino food.

✓ I am fond of Filipino food.

The original uses 'I'm always fond' which is awkward with 'always' when stating a general preference; use simple present 'I am fond' for a general fact. Also keep consistent formality by writing 'I am' rather than contraction if preferred; suggestion: use 'I am fond of' or 'I always like'.

× We called it Sinigang.

✓ We call it Sinigang.

The question asks about favourite food in present time, so present simple 'call' is appropriate rather than past 'called'. Use present simple for general names or habits.

× It was a tangy sour pork Stew.

✓ It is a tangy, sour pork stew.

Describe a favourite food in present tense: use 'is' not 'was'. 'Stew' should be lowercase and 'tangy, sour' needs a comma between coordinate adjectives. Use present simple for definitions or descriptions.

× Sometimes it could be a little bit spicy or salty.

✓ Sometimes it can be a little spicy or salty.

Use 'can' to express typical possibility. 'Could' suggests past or conditional; also 'a little bit' can be shortened to 'a little' for naturalness.

× It it is good to pair it with the rice and we usually have it on family occasions.

✓ It is good to pair it with rice, and we usually have it on family occasions.

There is a typo 'It it'. Remove duplicate and use 'rice' without 'the' for general food. Add a comma before coordinating conjunction joining two independent clauses.

× When I was a little girl, I am always into sweets like cakes and doughnuts and ice cream.

✓ When I was a little girl, I was always into sweets like cakes, doughnuts, and ice cream.

The time clause 'When I was a little girl' requires past tense throughout: change 'am' to 'was'. Add commas in a list and use parallel past tense.

× Even today as an adult, I always crave that sweetness for desserts.

✓ Even today, as an adult, I always crave sweet desserts.

Original is grammatically acceptable but wordy and slightly awkward: 'crave that sweetness for desserts' is unnatural. Use 'crave sweet desserts' or 'still crave sweets' for clarity. Keep present simple as it expresses current habit.

× Yes, different occasions means different type of foods served on the table.

✓ Yes, different occasions mean different types of food served on the table.

'Occasions' is plural so use verb 'mean' not 'means'. Use plural 'types' to match plural occasions and use 'food' as an uncountable noun rather than 'foods' or use 'types of food'.

× On Christmas, roasted chicken and pork will not be missed.

✓ At Christmas, roasted chicken and pork are not missed.

Use 'at Christmas' (fixed expression) and present simple 'are not missed' to express habitual occurrence. 'Will not be missed' is awkward here; present simple is more natural.

× Also on special occasions like birthdays, spaghetti and cake will always be there and just a simple get together.

✓ Also, on special occasions like birthdays, spaghetti and cake are always served, and there is usually just a simple get-together.

Change 'will always be there' to present simple passive 'are always served' for habitual events. Add comma after 'Also'. 'just a simple get together' should be 'a simple get-together' with hyphen and include a verb 'there is' to complete the clause.

× Since I was a little girl, I always crave the same type of food.

✓ Since I was a little girl, I have always craved the same types of food.

When using 'since' with a past reference and a continuing situation, use present perfect 'have always craved' not simple present. Use 'types of food' (plural) to match general variety.

× Until now, the salary soup paired with rice and cravings on the sweets of cakes and ice creams are still my favorite food until now.

✓ Even now, the sour soup paired with rice and my cravings for cakes and ice cream are still my favorite foods.

'Salary soup' is a typo for 'sinigang' or 'sour soup' — assume 'sour soup'. Remove redundant 'until now' twice. Use 'cravings for' not 'cravings on'. Use 'ice cream' uncountable and 'favorite foods' plural to match multiple items. Use present simple or present perfect depending; present simple 'are still' is acceptable for current state.