Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more specific and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence naming one or two favourites, then give a brief reason or example. Correct grammar (e.g. "types", avoid "all that junk food"). Use linking phrase for clarity if needed.

例: My favourite food is pasta, especially creamy carbonara. I also enjoy sweets occasionally because they are comforting, but I try not to eat them too often.

提案: Eliminate hesitations and repetition. Give a clear topic sentence then one or two supporting details (why you liked it and a memory). Use connectors like "and" or "because" and correct time expressions ("on weekends").

例: When I was younger, I loved creamy pasta because it tasted rich and comforting. I still enjoy it today and often eat it with my family on weekends.

提案: Provide a fuller, more specific response. Say when and why your choices change (season, festivals, mood) and give an example. Use linking words such as "for example" or "because" to make it coherent.

例: Yes, I do. My diet changes with the seasons: in winter I prefer hot, hearty meals like stews, while in summer I choose lighter salads. I also change what I eat depending on my mood — for example, I crave comfort food when I'm tired.

提案: Avoid repetition and improve coherence. Begin with a concise statement about change, then explain reasons and give specific examples of foods you prefer now. Use linking words like "however" and "because" to show contrast and cause.

例: Yes, my preferences have changed. As a child I mainly liked sweets and chips, but now I prefer cuisines like Japanese and Spanish because I discovered more flavours and healthier options as I grew older.

× I have many type of favorite foods, pasta, sweets, chips and all that junk food.

✓ I have many types of favorite food: pasta, sweets, chips and all that junk food.

The noun 'type' should be plural ('types') because it modifies 'many', which indicates more than one. Also 'favorite foods' can be simplified to 'favorite food' after 'types of'. Use a colon or comma to introduce the list. Suggestion: use 'many types of favorite food' or 'many favorite foods'.

× When I was when I was younger, I used to love uh, the creamy ****** pasta.

✓ When I was younger, I used to love the creamy ****** pasta.

The sentence contains a repetition 'When I was when I was' which is redundant rather than a tense error; corrected to remove duplication. 'Used to love' correctly expresses past habitual action. Remove filler 'uh' for clarity. Suggestion: keep single 'When I was younger' and maintain past habitual 'used to'.

× It tastes so rich that until now, until today, I still love eating it and enjoying it with my family in weekends.

✓ It tastes so rich that even now I still love eating it and enjoying it with my family on weekends.

'Until now, until today' is wordy; use 'even now' or 'to this day'. Use 'on weekends' (preposition 'on' required) not 'in weekends'. Maintain present simple 'tastes' for a general truth and present simple 'I still love' for ongoing preference. Suggestion: use 'on weekends' and simplify time phrase.

× Actually, yes, it depends. Sometimes it depends on my mood and my cravings.

✓ Actually, yes. It depends sometimes on my mood and my cravings.

Original is understandable but repetitive ('depends' twice). Better phrasing: 'It depends sometimes on my mood and cravings' or 'Sometimes it depends on my mood and cravings.' Both keep present simple to express general truth. Suggestion: avoid repeating the same verb.

× Yes, definitely. It did change.

✓ Yes, definitely. It has changed.

Use present perfect 'has changed' to indicate a change that occurred in the past and has relevance now. 'Did change' is grammatical but sounds abrupt; present perfect fits better with 'Has your favourite food changed since you were a child?'. Suggestion: use 'has changed'.

× When I was a child, I used to love sweets and candies and chips.

✓ When I was a child, I used to love sweets, candies and chips.

Grammar is correct for past habitual action using 'used to'. Only punctuation: use commas to separate list items. Suggestion: keep 'used to' for past habits and add commas.

× I do love them now, but I do not prefer to eat them.

✓ I still love them now, but I don't prefer to eat them.

'I do love them now' is acceptable but 'still' better conveys continuing affection. Use contraction 'don't' (optional) and keep present simple to express current state. Suggestion: use 'I still love them, but I don't prefer to eat them.'

× I do prefer Japanese food, Spanish food, because when I was younger I was not even introduced to these.

✓ I prefer Japanese and Spanish food because when I was younger I had not even been introduced to them.

'Do prefer' is unnecessary emphatic; simple 'prefer' is smoother. Use 'had not even been introduced' (past perfect passive) to show that the lack of introduction occurred before the time being discussed. Use object pronoun 'them' for 'Japanese and Spanish food' rather than 'these'. Also combine items: 'Japanese and Spanish food'. Suggestion: use past perfect passive for earlier past and correct pronoun 'them'.