Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence naming your favourite food, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid mixing unrelated ideas in one sentence.

例: My favourite food is Rajma Chawal. I enjoy it because it is a comforting, spicy kidney-bean curry served with rice, and my mother makes it with a special blend of spices. Therefore, it feels homely and satisfying.

提案: Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood and keep sentences concise. Provide one clear comparison between past and present, using linking words (e.g., ‘but’, ‘however’). Reduce fillers like 'uh' and avoid repeating ideas.

例: When I was young, I liked junk food such as pizza and burgers. However, now I prefer Rajma Chawal because my mother cooks it with fragrant spices and it tastes homemade and comforting.

提案: Be more specific about seasonal changes or occasions and use clearer linking words. Mention one or two concrete examples of foods you eat when travelling or at home, and keep sentences shorter and grammatical.

例: It depends on the occasion. For example, when I travel with friends I try local dishes like street noodles or regional curries, but when I am at home I usually eat homemade meals such as Rajma Chawal.

提案: Answer directly with a clear yes/no and then explain briefly. Use proper tense and correct names of dishes; avoid hesitations and contradictions. One or two sentences are enough.

例: No, my favourite food has not changed. I enjoyed Rajma dishes as a child and I still prefer Rajma Chawal because I associate it with family meals and comfort.

× I basically like various type of cuisines where either Italian or Chinese, but my favorite food is Rajma Chawal.

✓ I basically like various types of cuisine, such as Italian and Chinese, but my favorite food is Rajma Chawal.

The phrase 'various type of' is incorrect because 'various' requires a plural noun ('types'). 'Cuisines' can be singular collective 'cuisine' or plural 'cuisines'; here 'types of cuisine' is natural. Also 'where either Italian or Chinese' is awkward; use 'such as Italian and Chinese' to list examples. Suggestion: Use 'various types of cuisine' or 'various cuisines' and 'such as' to introduce examples.

× What kind of food did you like when you were young?

✓ What kind of food did you like when you were young?

This sentence is already correct for asking about past preferences; no change needed. (Included for completeness; no grammatical error detected.)

× When I was young, I like to eat various type of junk foods, especially pizza and burger.

✓ When I was young, I liked to eat various types of junk food, especially pizza and burgers.

The main clause refers to the past ('When I was young'), so the verb should be past tense 'liked', not present 'like'. 'Various type of' should be 'various types of' or 'various', and 'junk foods' is usually 'junk food' as an uncountable noun; specific items like 'pizza and burgers' should be plural for consistency. Suggestion: Use past tense for habits in the past and correct quantifier/plural usage.

× But now I like to eat Rajma chawal, which is especially made of my mother because it, uh, is involved various type of spices and it is made by love.

✓ But now I like to eat Rajma Chawal, which is especially made by my mother because it involves various types of spices and is made with love.

Use 'made by my mother' (not 'of my mother'). 'Is involved various type of spices' is ungrammatical; 'involves various types of spices' is correct. 'Made by love' should be 'made with love'. Also capitalize 'Chawal' consistently. Suggestion: Use active verb 'involves', plural 'types', and the preposition 'with' for 'made with love'.

× It particularly depends upon the occasion when I have to eat, especially if I have travelling with my friends, I like to eat various type of foods based on various cultures.

✓ It particularly depends on the occasion when I have to eat; especially if I am traveling with my friends, I like to eat different foods from various cultures.

Use 'depends on', not 'depends upon' (both exist but 'depends on' is more natural here). 'If I have travelling' is incorrect; use 'if I am traveling' or 'when I travel'. 'Various type of foods' should be 'different foods' or 'various types of food'. 'Based on various cultures' is better as 'from various cultures'. Suggestion: Use correct verb forms and prepositions: 'depends on', 'am traveling', 'different foods from various cultures'.

× If I'm at home, I prefer to eat food made at home.

✓ If I'm at home, I prefer to eat food made at home.

This sentence is grammatically correct and matches present habitual meaning; no change needed. (Included for completeness.)

× Since when I was a child, I like to eat Rajma jawar and now currently I also like to eat Rajma chawal.

✓ Since I was a child, I have liked to eat Rajma Jowar, and now I also like to eat Rajma Chawal.

The phrase 'Since when I was a child' is incorrect; use 'Since I was a child' or 'When I was a child'. When describing a habit that started in the past and continues now, use present perfect ('have liked') for the ongoing preference. 'Rajma jawar' likely intended 'Rajma Jowar' capitalization and spelling. Avoid 'now currently' (redundant). Suggestion: Use 'Since I was a child' and present perfect for actions continuing to present: 'I have liked'.

× So yeah, uh, so no. My uh, decision of eating my favorite food is ha has not been yet changed.

✓ So no. My choice of favorite food has not changed yet.

The original has filler words, repetition, and incorrect structure. 'Decision of eating my favorite food' is unnatural; 'choice of favorite food' or 'preference' is better. 'Is ha has not been yet changed' is ungrammatical; use present perfect passive only if needed ('has not changed' active is simpler). 'Yet' usually appears after the verb: 'has not changed yet.' Suggestion: Remove filler words and use a clear concise structure: 'My preference has not changed yet.'