Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid irrelevant details (e.g. mother being mad) and correct grammar (refresh → refreshed). Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

例: My favourite food is Korean food. I enjoy it because I like spicy flavours, which make me feel refreshed and satisfied. For example, I often eat kimchi and spicy stews because they are warming and full of flavor.

提案: Use past tense consistently and be specific. Give one clear topic sentence (I liked...), then add a specific reason and an example. Avoid repetition and improve fluency by linking ideas with words like because or for example.

例: When I was young, I liked sushi. I enjoyed it because the fresh fish and vinegared rice tasted light and comforting; for example, I often had salmon nigiri at family gatherings.

提案: This answer is clear but can be improved by adding linking words and one specific detail about why you choose those foods. Remove hesitations (uh) and avoid repeating words. Keep it within 3 sentences.

例: Yes. In summer I prefer cold dishes like chilled ramen and ice cream because they help me cool down; for example, I often eat cold noodles after playing sports. In winter I usually have hot pot because it warms me up and is great for sharing with friends.

提案: Use correct tense and avoid filler words. Give a clear contrast using linking words (when… but/now). Provide a brief reason for the change and an example of a spicy dish you like now.

例: Yes. When I was a child I couldn’t eat spicy food, but now I love it because my tolerance has increased. For instance, I now enjoy spicy Korean stews like kimchi jjigae and go out of my way to add chili paste to many dishes.

× My favorite food is Korean food because spicy food makes me more refresh and feel comfortable so I usually eat Korean food and however my mom was mad at me when I was 8.

✓ My favorite food is Korean food because spicy food makes me feel more refreshed and comfortable, so I usually eat Korean food; however, my mom was mad at me when I was eight.

The sentence uses adjective/adverb incorrectly: 'more refresh' is wrong because 'refresh' is a verb; the correct adjective is 'refreshed' or adverb phrase 'feel more refreshed'. Also combine clauses with appropriate punctuation and use 'however' as a transition with commas or a semicolon. Use 'eight' in words for numbers under ten in formal writing. Suggestion: replace 'more refresh' with 'more refreshed', add comma before 'so', and place 'however' correctly after a semicolon or period.

× My favorite food when I was young is sushi, because sushi is the one one of the Japanese traditional food and it makes me happy and comfortable, and sushi is my familiar food.

✓ My favorite food when I was young was sushi, because sushi is one of the traditional Japanese foods and it made me happy and comfortable, and sushi was a familiar food to me.

Tense inconsistency: the speaker refers to childhood (past), so verbs should be past tense ('was' instead of 'is' and 'made' instead of 'makes'). Word order and article use: 'one of the Japanese traditional food' should be 'one of the traditional Japanese foods' (plural 'foods' and adjective order). 'Familiar' needs a clearer construction: 'a familiar food to me'. Suggestion: keep past tense throughout when talking about past preferences and correct adjective order.

× My favorite food when I was young is sushi, because sushi is the one one of the Japanese traditional food and it makes me happy and comfortable, and sushi is my familiar food.

✓ My favorite food when I was young was sushi, because sushi is one of the traditional Japanese foods and it made me happy and comfortable, and sushi was a familiar food to me.

Redundant phrase 'the one one of' is incorrect; remove duplication. 'Traditional Japanese' is the correct adjective order. Use plural 'foods' when saying 'one of the ... foods.' Suggestion: remove duplicate 'one' and reorder adjectives.

× Yes I do, in summer I usually eat some cold food such as uh, cold ramen and ice cream. It makes me feel refreshed. Also in winter I I eat hot pot.

✓ Yes I do. In summer I usually eat cold foods such as cold ramen and ice cream; they make me feel refreshed. Also, in winter I eat hot pot.

Minor tense and agreement issues: 'some cold food' is better as 'cold foods' when listing multiple items. Pronoun agreement: use 'they make' to refer back to plural 'foods'. Remove duplicate 'I'. Use appropriate punctuation for clarity. Suggestion: use plural when listing multiple items and match verb to subject.

× Yes, uh, when I was a child I cannot eat spicy food such as chili. However, currently I can eat spicy food and I'm obsessed with spicy food.

✓ When I was a child I could not eat spicy food such as chili. However, now I can eat spicy food and I'm obsessed with it.

Tense error: referring to past ability requires past tense modal 'could' or 'could not' rather than present 'cannot'. 'Currently' and the contrast require 'now' in spoken contexts; keep 'now' with present ability. Pronoun repetition: use 'it' to avoid repeating 'spicy food.' Suggestion: change 'cannot' to 'could not' for past ability and replace repeated noun with pronoun.