Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail and avoid fillers like “uh”. Use a richer adjective or brief reason to show preference.

例: I love biryani because it combines fragrant basmati rice with well-spiced meat. For example, the slow-cooked spices and tender lamb make it a comforting and flavorful meal.

提案: Structure the answer: topic sentence about childhood preference, then briefly explain how and why it changed using linking words (e.g., later, because). Reduce hesitations and be more specific about foods.

例: As a child I mostly ate plain rice and curry. Later, I realized this wasn’t very balanced, so I began adding foods like eggs, chicken, and vegetables to increase protein and healthy fats.

提案: Answer directly then expand with concise supporting detail and a linking phrase. Replace filler words and give one reason or example for your routine.

例: No, I usually eat the same types of food year-round. I typically have two main meals—lunch and dinner—because I follow intermittent fasting to manage my energy and weight.

提案: Avoid repeating earlier points; give a concise comparison with one clear reason for the change. Use linking words (e.g., however, now) and specific examples of foods you prefer now.

例: Yes, it has changed. As a child I ate mainly carb-heavy meals like rice and curry; now I prefer balanced meals such as grilled fish, brown rice, and steamed vegetables because I want more protein and stable energy levels.

× It is made-up of, uh, rice and uh, meat.

✓ It is made up of rice and meat.

The hyphenated 'made-up' suggests an adjective; here the passive construction requires 'made up' (past participle) without a hyphen. Use 'made up of' to indicate composition. Remove filler words and extra commas for clarity.

× When I was saying I used to eat rice and Curry, I believe it is not very nutritious and later in my life I noticed uh we need to have a balanced diet and I started giving importance to protein and fat as well along with carbs.

✓ When I was young, I used to eat rice and curry; I believed it was not very nutritious, and later in my life I noticed we needed to have a balanced diet, so I started giving importance to proteins and fats as well along with carbohydrates.

Multiple tense errors and word forms: 'When I was saying' is incorrect; use 'When I was young' or 'When I was a child'. 'I believe' conflicts with past context; use past 'I believed' or change surrounding verbs to present. 'Curry' should be lowercased. Use plural forms 'proteins', 'fats', 'carbohydrates' when referring to nutrient categories. Also clarify sentence structure by splitting with punctuation.

× No, I eat mostly same kind of food all over the year.

✓ No, I mostly eat the same kind of food throughout the year.

Word order and quantifier usage: 'eat mostly same' is awkward; place adverb before verb phrase: 'mostly eat'. Include definite article 'the' with 'same kind of'. Use 'throughout the year' rather than 'all over the year'.

× My main meals are at the afternoon and in the evening, so I only take two meals a day, which is uh, allowing me to practice intermittent fasting.

✓ My main meals are in the afternoon and in the evening, so I only take two meals a day, which allows me to practice intermittent fasting.

Preposition: use 'in the afternoon' not 'at the afternoon'. 'Which is allowing me' is a continuous form that is unnecessary; use simple form 'which allows me'. Remove filler words and extra commas.

× Yes, I, as I mentioned earlier, I, when I was a child, I was mostly fed with, uh, carbs and, uh, Curry, which is, uh, going to increase glucose levels, uh, a lot. Now I'm more focusing on, uh, a proper diet, having, uh, balanced amounts of fats and, uh, proteins and, uh, mixed carbs.

✓ Yes, as I mentioned earlier, when I was a child I was mostly fed carbohydrates and curry, which increased my glucose levels a lot. Now I focus more on a proper diet, with balanced amounts of fats, proteins, and complex carbohydrates.

Redundant fillers and incorrect tense/use: 'which is going to increase' describes a past effect, so use past 'which increased'. 'I'm more focusing' is unidiomatic; use 'I focus more' or 'I am focusing more'. Use correct nutrition terms: 'carbohydrates' and 'complex carbohydrates' instead of 'mixed carbs'. Remove unnecessary commas and filler sounds for clarity.