Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and use varied vocabulary; start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repeating phrases like “would” and combine related ideas with linking words.

例: My favourite food is tinola, a Filipino chicken soup. It reminds me of childhood because my mother always made it when I was ill, and its warm, ginger-flavoured broth quickly made me feel better.

提案: Use correct tense and a clearer topic sentence; keep it natural and add one specific example. Replace vague phrases and link cause and effect with words like “so” or “because”.

例: When I was young I liked sweet foods the most because they felt like special treats. For example, if I scraped my knee my mother often brought home a large lollipop to cheer me up.

提案: Be more specific and use accurate vocabulary; avoid informal or surprising words without context (e.g. “bugs”) and give one concrete seasonal example with a linking phrase.

例: Yes, I usually eat seasonal foods. For instance, in summer I eat ripe mangoes and chilled watermelon, while in the rainy season I enjoy fresh fish from local markets.

提案: Correct and clarify dish names and give a brief reason for the change; use linking words like “however” and provide one specific contrast (taste, convenience, or experience).

例: My favourite foods have changed. As a child I loved Filipino dishes such as tinola and adobo; however, as an adult I prefer Korean food like kimchi and samgyeopsal because I enjoy the bold flavours and social dining style.

× My favorite food is a chicken soup called tinola in my native language.

✓ My favorite food is a chicken soup called tinola in my native language.

No correction needed; sentence is grammatically correct. 'Called' is the past participle used correctly in a reduced relative clause describing the soup.

× I really love this food because whenever I was sick as a child, my mother would cook this for me and it would bring me comfort and it would ease my pains.

✓ I really love this food because whenever I was sick as a child, my mother would cook it for me and it would bring me comfort and ease my pains.

Use of 'this' repeatedly is awkward; replace with pronoun 'it'. 'Would cook' correctly expresses habitual past. Removing the second 'would' before 'ease' makes the sentence smoother. 'Ease my pains' is acceptable; no tense change needed.

× I prefer sweet foods when I was young because I saw these things as treats, so whenever I fell down, my mother would bring home a big lollipop to cheer me up.

✓ I preferred sweet foods when I was young because I saw them as treats, so whenever I fell down my mother would bring home a big lollipop to cheer me up.

The time frame 'when I was young' requires past tense 'preferred' not present 'prefer'. Replace 'these things' with 'them' for clarity and concision. Commas: remove comma before 'my mother' to avoid a comma splice; the clause is fine without it.

× I prefer eating foods that are in season at different times of the year.

✓ I prefer eating foods that are in season at different times of the year.

Sentence is correct. 'Prefer' in present tense fits the question about current habits; no change needed.

× In my country there are a lot of seasonal foods like mangoes, blackberries, some fishes and actually some bugs.

✓ In my country there are a lot of seasonal foods like mangoes, blackberries, some fish and even some bugs.

'Fish' as a plural is usually 'fish' not 'fishes' (unless referring to species). 'Actually' is informal; 'even' is a clearer word choice. Overall plural usage corrected.

× As a child, I really loved eating Filipino foods like dinola, adobo, caricare and Machado.

✓ As a child, I really loved eating Filipino foods like tinola, adobo, kinilaw and menudo.

The original contains misspelled or incorrect dish names. 'Tinola' is the correct dish name (not 'dinola'); 'kinilaw' and 'menudo' are more typical Filipino dishes than the unclear originals. Past tense 'loved' is appropriate for childhood habits.

× But as an adult, I prefer Korean foods more like kimchi, bureaucrage and samgyeopsal.

✓ But as an adult, I prefer Korean foods more, like kimchi and samgyeopsal.

Removed 'bureaucrage' which is not a Korean food (likely a mistaken word). Added a comma after 'more' and listed two clear examples. Present tense 'prefer' correctly describes current preference.