Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and concise: state the favourite food clearly in one sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words.

例: I love cheesy foods, especially pizza and pasta, because I enjoy the rich, creamy flavors and the variety of toppings. For example, I often choose Margherita pizza for its fresh tomatoes and basil, or creamy carbonara when I want something comforting.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence about your childhood preference, then add a specific example and a brief reason using a linking word like 'because' or 'for example'. Avoid repeating 'you' and correct tense/person.

例: When I was young, I loved sweets. For example, I often ate candy and chocolate after school because they were treats that made me happy.

提案: Answer directly, then give 1–2 clear examples and a brief reason, using linking words (e.g. 'for instance', 'because'). Reduce hesitations and avoid listing too many cuisines without context.

例: Yes, I do eat different foods throughout the year. For instance, in winter I prefer Korean stews because they are warming, while in summer I often choose Japanese cold noodles because they feel light and refreshing.

提案: Make a clear comparison between past and present with a topic sentence, then explain why with specific details and linking words like 'however' or 'now'. Avoid unclear phrases and fillers.

例: Yes, my tastes have changed since childhood. When I was a child I preferred very sweet foods, but now I prefer balanced flavors and avoid overly sweet or salty dishes because I focus more on health and variety.

× My favorite is more on cheesy foods and I like pizza, burger, pasta, everything about cheese.

✓ My favorite foods are cheesy things, and I like pizza, burgers, and pasta—everything with cheese.

The original uses awkward adjective/adverb constructions ('more on cheesy foods') and inconsistent noun forms. Change 'is more on' to 'foods are' for correct subject complement and pluralize 'burger' to 'burgers'. Use 'things' or 'foods' after 'cheesy' to make the adjective-noun combination natural. Also use commas and conjunctions to list items clearly. Suggestion: Use adjective + noun ('cheesy foods' or 'cheesy things') and keep list items parallel and plural when speaking generally.

× Of course, when you were young and a kid, you mostly like sweets, and I like sweets.

✓ Of course, when you were young and a kid, you mostly liked sweets, and I liked sweets.

The sentence mixes past context ('when you were young') with present-tense verb 'like'. Verbs referring to past time should be in past tense: 'liked'. Keep tense consistent. Also 'you' vs 'I' usage seems mixed but here corrected both verbs to past to match 'when ... young'. Suggestion: Match verb tense to the time reference; use past tense for past events.

× Yeah, I eat different foods in different time of the year because when I feel crave for Japanese food, Korean food, Filipino food or American food, yes, I eat different, uh, food.

✓ Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year because when I crave Japanese, Korean, Filipino, or American food, I eat those different foods.

Preposition and noun form errors: use 'at different times of the year' (not 'in different time of the year'). 'Feel crave' is incorrect; say 'crave' or 'feel a craving for'. Also pluralize 'times' and use consistent phrasing for lists. Remove filler words and keep parallel structure. Suggestion: Use 'at different times of the year' and 'crave X' or 'have a craving for X'.

× Your it changes because when you were child you like more sweet spoon, but right now when you grow up, I don't like sweets anymore.

✓ It changed because when I was a child I liked sweeter foods, but now that I've grown up, I don't like sweets anymore.

Multiple issues resolved under third-person and tense consistency: 'Your it changes' is incorrect—use 'It changed'. 'When you were child' should be 'when I was a child'. 'You like' should be past 'I liked' to match past context. 'More sweet spoon' is ungrammatical; intended meaning is 'sweeter foods'. 'Right now when you grow up' mixes present and past; use 'now that I've grown up' or 'as I've grown up'. Suggestion: Keep subject consistent ('I') and match tense to time references; use correct comparative adjective ('sweeter') and appropriate nouns ('foods').

× I just prepare, umm, just uh, regular food. Not too sweet, not too salty like that.

✓ I just prepare regular food—nothing too sweet or too salty.

The original has disfluencies and sentence fragments ('Not too sweet, not too salty like that.') Combine fragments into a complete sentence and remove fillers. Use a dash or conjunction for clarity and parallel structure: 'nothing too sweet or too salty.' Suggestion: Avoid filler words in formal responses and join fragments to make complete, fluent sentences.