Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more concise, correct small grammar errors, and add one specific detail about adobo to illustrate why you like it. Use a clear topic sentence, one linking phrase, and avoid fillers (um, uh).

例: My favourite food is adobo, a popular braised pork dish from my country. It combines tangy vinegar, soy sauce and garlic for a rich umami flavour, and the meat becomes very tender after slow cooking. For example, I love it with steamed rice because the sauce soaks in and balances the taste.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and give a specific example of a sweet food you liked as a child. Use one linking word to connect explanation and avoid short fragments.

例: When I was young, I liked sweet snacks, especially chocolate chip cookies. Because I was a child, I preferred sugary treats, and I often had cookies as an after-school snack which made me feel happy.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples of seasonal foods and explain why you try them. Remove hesitations and unclear phrases to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year. For instance, I buy mangoes in summer because they are sweetest then, and I try mooncakes during the autumn festival to taste traditional flavours.

提案: Give a clear, direct answer first (yes or no), then provide one specific example of a food you disliked as a child but like now, and explain briefly why your taste changed. Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, my favourite foods have changed since childhood. For example, I used to dislike bitter vegetables like broccoli, but now I enjoy them because I appreciate their texture and health benefits, and I learned to cook them in tasty ways.

× In my country, this there's this dish called adobo.

✓ In my country, there is a dish called adobo.

Use 'there is' without repeating 'this'. The original has extra 'this' creating an ungrammatical insertion; simplify to 'there is' to introduce the dish.

× It is savory and sweet and there's this umami that is going on and when you eat it, there's a explosion of flavors and I think everyone will love it because it is like a braised pork.

✓ It is savory and sweet, with a strong umami flavor, and when you eat it, there is an explosion of flavors; I think everyone will love it because it is a braised pork dish.

Place adverbial phrases and clauses clearly and use correct article 'an' before vowel sound. Original 'there's this umami that is going on' is informal and awkward. Also 'a explosion' is wrong; use 'an explosion'. Breaking into clearer clauses improves readability.

× I love chips.

✓ I loved chips when I was young.

Context question asks about childhood; use past tense to match time frame. 'I love' refers to present; change to 'I loved' to correctly indicate past preference.

× I love sweet because as a child, everybody loves sweet food as a child.

✓ I loved sweet foods because, as a child, everyone loves sweet things.

Repeat of 'as a child' is redundant. Use plural 'sweet foods' or 'sweet things' for natural phrasing. Keep tense consistent (past) for personal preference and present generalization for children.

× So when I was younger, I love, I'm a sweet tooth.

✓ So when I was younger, I loved sweets; I'm a sweet tooth.

Maintain consistent tense in the first clause (past) and use a semicolon or separate sentence for the present-state comment 'I'm a sweet tooth'. 'I love' incorrectly mixes present with past context.

× I love to eat sweet foods and yes.

✓ I loved to eat sweet foods, and yes.

Match past tense 'loved' to the childhood timeframe; remove trailing 'yes' or keep it as 'and yes' with punctuation. The original trailing 'yes' is informal and unclear.

× I do love to order fruits.

✓ I do like to order fruits.

'Do love to order' is grammatically possible but overly emphatic and odd; 'do like to order' is more natural. Also 'fruits' can be 'fruit' as uncountable when speaking generally.

× I love experimenting on my foods also.

✓ I also love experimenting with my food.

Use 'experiment with' not 'experiment on' for trying different preparations; 'food' as uncountable is more natural and 'also' placed before verb improves flow.

× So during different time of the year, there's a there's a like foods that comes out during that occasion.

✓ So during different times of the year, there are foods that come out for those occasions.

Use plural 'times' and plural agreement 'there are' for 'foods'. Remove duplicated 'there's a there's a like'. Use 'come' (present plural) to agree with plural 'foods' and use 'for those occasions' for clarity.

× There's some food that I like still until now.

✓ There are some foods that I still like now.

Use 'there are' with countable plural 'foods' and place adverb 'still' and 'now' in natural order. Original used 'there's' (singular) with 'some food' awkwardly.

× But yes, as a child your taste really does change.

✓ But yes, as a child, your tastes really change.

Keep general statement present tense 'tastes really change' when speaking about people in general. Use plural 'tastes'. Original 'does change' is not incorrect but less natural; punctuation and plural improve clarity.

× So I think a lot of foods that I don't like during a child, I like, I do like now.

✓ So I think a lot of foods that I didn't like as a child, I do like now.

Use past tense 'didn't like' to refer to childhood. Use 'as a child' rather than 'during a child'. Simplify repetition 'I like, I do like' to 'I do like now' for emphasis and correctness.