Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more natural: start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar, avoid redundancy, and keep to 2–4 sentences. Use linking words to add one or two specific reasons or examples. Also correct verb tenses and word choice (e.g., 'healthier', 'when I want something lighter and healthier').

例: I’m a big foodie, and my favourite type of food is seafood. I especially enjoy salmon and lobster because they taste fresh and are healthy. Sometimes I choose grilled squid when I want something lighter and healthier.

提案: Use past tense consistently and make the structure clearer: give a topic sentence about past preference, then briefly explain why and add a linking phrase for the change. Reduce fillers like 'uh'.

例: When I was young, I liked fast food such as burgers, fries and pizza because it tasted good. However, I later realized it was unhealthy, so I gradually changed my diet and started eating more vegetables and home-cooked meals.

提案: Good structure and coherence. Improve by using smoother linking phrases and more concise wording, and correct small grammar (e.g., 'prefer more filling foods' and 'I choose' → 'I choose'→ 'I choose' is fine but 'I tend to choose' sounds natural). One clear specific example per season is enough.

例: Yes, my diet varies by season. For example, last winter I tended to eat warming, filling foods like soups because of the cold weather, while in summer I usually choose lighter meals such as salads and fresh fruit.

提案: Provide a full clear sentence as the topic, use correct tense and grammar, avoid repetition and list errors. Explain briefly why your preference changed with specific reasons (e.g., acquired taste, health). Correct word choice ('shrimp', 'healthier').

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed since childhood. I didn’t use to like seafood, but over time I developed a taste for shrimp, salmon and lobster because I learned to appreciate their flavours and because they are healthier options.

× I may be the foodie and my favorite type of food is seafood.

✓ I might be a foodie, and my favorite type of food is seafood.

The speaker used 'may be' which is acceptable but 'might be' is more natural here when expressing possibility about oneself; also the article before 'foodie' should be 'a' not omitted. Suggest using 'might be a foodie' for more natural phrasing.

× I especially like salmon and lobster because they taste fresh and more healthy.

✓ I especially like salmon and lobster because they taste fresh and healthier.

Comparative form should be 'healthier' rather than 'more healthy'. Use the comparative '-er' with short adjectives. Also ensure agreement between plural subject 'they' and verb 'taste' is correct (it is).

× Occasionally I enjoy grilled squid fish when I went something liar and healthier.

✓ Occasionally I enjoy grilled squid when I want something lighter and healthier.

Multiple issues: 'went' is past tense but context needs present 'want'; 'liar' is incorrect word; use adjective 'lighter'. Also 'squid fish' is redundant—'squid' is sufficient. Use present tense 'want' to match 'enjoy'.

× When I was young, I like fast food such as burger and fries, pizza because it was tasty and, uh, delicious.

✓ When I was young, I liked fast food such as burgers, fries, and pizza because it was tasty and delicious.

The timeframe 'when I was young' requires past tense 'liked' rather than present 'like'. Also pluralize 'burger' to 'burgers' and use commas for a list. Remove filler 'uh'.

× Uh, after that, I realized it was unhealthy and I tried to change my diet and started eating more vegetables and, uh, homemade foods.

✓ After that, I realized it was unhealthy, so I tried to change my diet and started eating more vegetables and homemade food.

The sentence is generally correct but tighten tense sequence and conjunction: 'realized' and 'tried' are past—keep consistent. Use 'so' to show result. 'Homemade foods' is awkward; 'homemade food' is more natural.

× For example, last winter I ate healthier warming foods like soups because the cold weather made me prefer some things more filling, while in summer I choose meals such as salads and fruits.

✓ For example, last winter I ate warming, healthier foods like soups because the cold weather made me prefer more filling dishes, while in summer I choose meals such as salads and fruit.

Adjust adjective order ('warming, healthier') and use 'dishes' instead of 'things'. 'Fruits' is often 'fruit' when referring to types of fruit collectively. Tense 'ate' for past and 'choose' for present is acceptable if meaning is habitual; if describing past contrast, use 'chose'.

× Yes, changed.

✓ Yes, it has changed.

Fragment 'Yes, changed.' lacks a subject and auxiliary verb. Use 'it has changed' to form a complete present perfect sentence indicating change since childhood.

× For example when I was child I didn't like seafood, but now I really like I loved seafood.

✓ For example, when I was a child I didn't like seafood, but now I really like seafood.

Missing article 'a' before 'child'. Also 'I really like I loved seafood' is ungrammatical; keep present 'like' to indicate current preference. Remove extra 'loved'.

× For example, sheeramp, salmon, squid, fish, lobster.

✓ For example, shrimp, salmon, squid, and lobster.

'Sheeramp' is a misspelling of 'shrimp'. Avoid redundant 'fish' when 'squid' is listed; include 'and' before the last item in the list and use commas correctly.

× I think seafood is more healthier.

✓ I think seafood is healthier.

Use 'healthier' without 'more' because using both is redundant and ungrammatical. Use a single comparative form.'