Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words (umm) and incomplete sentences. Also correct tense and subject-verb agreement.

例: My favourite food is pasta. I have been making it since I was about 12, and I enjoy experimenting with different sauces and ingredients. For example, I often add roasted vegetables or a spicy tomato sauce, and I like to share it with friends and family when we have dinner together.

提案: Give a clearer topic sentence and use specific details. Remove fillers and use linking words (for example, sometimes). Mention one or two concrete dishes and describe them briefly rather than repeating vague phrases.

例: When I was young, I preferred traditional Iraqi dishes. For example, I often ate rice with a light broth called makarona, sometimes served with soft flatbread, which made the meal comforting and easy to eat.

提案: Be specific about seasonal foods and avoid vague language. Use linking phrases such as "for example" and give one or two specific examples of seasonal dishes or traditions. Correct grammar and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I do. For example, during Ramadan we often eat special sweets like qatayef in the evenings, and at Christmas my family prepares roasted meat and special desserts. These seasonal dishes have distinct flavours and bring back family memories.

提案: Answer directly and keep focus on the food change. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain reasons and give a specific example. Reduce filler words and correct grammar (tenses and agreement).

例: Yes, my tastes have changed since childhood. I used to prefer plain, soft foods without spices, but now I enjoy spicy dishes like noodles with jalapenos and chilli sauce. I think my palate changed as I tried more international foods and became more adventurous.

× I really like the flavors that I added and also sometimes I just being creative and add more more ingredients to this dish.

✓ I really like the flavors that I add, and sometimes I just get creative and add more ingredients to this dish.

The original uses 'added' which is past tense but the meaning is habitual, so present simple 'add' is correct (Grammar Problem Type 8 relates to verb + -ing but here the issue is verb form for habitual action). Also 'just being creative' is incorrect here; use 'get creative' or 'am being creative' depending on meaning. 'More more' is redundant; use a single 'more'. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions and 'get creative' to express becoming creative. Note: Correction focuses on verbs that match the habitual context and fixes redundancy.

× Other times I'm just share it with my friends and family and they.

✓ Other times I just share it with my friends and family, and they share it too.

The original sentence uses 'I'm just share' which mixes auxiliary 'am' with base verb 'share' incorrectly; present simple 'I just share' is appropriate (Grammar Problem Type 26). The sentence ends abruptly with 'they'; supply the missing verb 'share' to complete the clause. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb structures are complete and consistent.

× When I was younger, I used to like, umm, the traditional dishes, the Iraqi traditional dishes, just like a rice and a soup.

✓ When I was younger, I used to like traditional dishes, the Iraqi traditional dishes, such as rice and soup.

'a rice' and 'a soup' are incorrect because rice and soup are uncountable or general food items and do not take the indefinite article 'a' (Grammar Problem Type 22). Also repetitive 'the traditional dishes, the Iraqi traditional dishes' can be streamlined. Suggestion: remove inappropriate articles with uncountable nouns and use 'such as' to give examples.

× And sometimes they put it with, umm, a piece of bread inside, which is very soft to eat.

✓ And sometimes they put a piece of bread in it, which makes it very soft to eat.

Original 'put it with...a piece of bread inside' is awkward. Use 'put a piece of bread in it' to clarify the object and 'which makes it' to link cause and effect (Grammar Problem Type 13). Suggestion: restructure the clause for clarity and correct verb usage to show result.

× And also it's really, uh, flavor and, uh, easy to eat.

✓ Also, it has a really good flavor and is easy to eat.

'It's really flavor' is ungrammatical; flavor is a noun, so use 'has flavor' or 'is flavorful' and add an adjective 'good' for clarity. Also supply 'is' before 'easy to eat' (Grammar Problem Type 13). Suggestion: use 'has a good flavor' or 'is flavorful' and ensure verbs are present.

× Sometimes we just eat kind of let me say sweets and eat in footer and sometimes we eat something special for Christmas.

✓ Sometimes we eat sweets and pastries, and sometimes we eat something special for Christmas.

Phrase 'eat in footer' is unclear; likely wrong preposition or word choice. Replace with 'eat pastries' or appropriate food term. Also remove 'kind of let me say' filler. Use simple structure 'Sometimes we eat X, and sometimes Y' (Grammar Problem Type 11). Suggestion: avoid fillers and use correct nouns for foods and simple conjunctions.

× And I think that in different different times of the year we eat different dishes.

✓ And I think that at different times of the year we eat different dishes.

Use the preposition 'at' with 'times of the year' (this also relates to preposition use but mainly adjective repetition). Remove repeated 'different' (Grammar Problem Type 13). Suggestion: avoid repetition and choose correct prepositions.

× Some of them they are very flavor and leave a very nice.

✓ Some of them are very flavorful and leave a very nice taste.

'Very flavor' is incorrect; use adjective 'flavorful'. The clause 'leave a very nice' is incomplete; specify 'taste' or 'impression' (Grammar Problem Type 13). Suggestion: use correct adjective forms and complete the object.

× I used to eat an easy and umm, soft foods that I didn't umm really have a spices, but right now I change it and now I'm eating noodles with very uh, spices and jalapeno.

✓ I used to eat simple, soft foods that didn't really have spices, but now I've changed, and I'm eating noodles with strong spices and jalapeño.

Mix of tense and number errors: 'an easy ... soft foods' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove article and use 'simple' not 'easy' (Grammar Problem Type 6 and 1). 'I didn't really have a spices' wrong subject: foods didn't have spices; use 'that didn't really have spices'. 'Right now I change it' should be present perfect 'I've changed' to show change up to now. 'jalapeno' spelling fixed to 'jalapeño'. Suggestion: match singular/plural, correct tense for change over time, and use appropriate adjectives.

× I think this is because of even my personality have been changed.

✓ I think this is because my personality has also changed.

Original 'because of even my personality have been changed' has wrong word order, unnecessary 'even', and wrong verb agreement 'have been changed' with singular 'personality' (Grammar Problem Type 26 and 27). Use 'has changed' for subject-verb agreement and place 'also' for emphasis. Suggestion: simplify to 'my personality has also changed'.