Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more natural: start with a concise topic sentence naming the dish correctly, then give one or two specific reasons using precise vocabulary. Avoid repetition (e.g., "really" twice) and correct small errors (word order and article use). Use one linking word if adding a detail.

例: My favourite food is tom yum seafood soup. I love it because the broth combines spicy, sour and slightly sweet flavours, and the fresh prawns and squid make it very satisfying.

提案: Use past tense consistently and be specific about examples. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one specific example and a brief reason. Avoid vague phrases like "cheap potato" which are unclear—use accurate food names.

例: When I was young, I liked eating junk food, especially potato chips and candy. I enjoyed them because they were sweet and easy to get at school shops.

提案: Be direct and use natural phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No plus brief reason), then give a specific example and a linking word (e.g., "for example"). Fix pronoun errors and avoid awkward expressions like "at the same times of theirs."

例: Yes, I do. I change what I eat by season because I get bored of the same dishes; for example, in summer I prefer salads and cold drinks, while in winter I enjoy hot soups and stews.

提案: Use correct tenses and clearer linking. Begin with a topic sentence that states whether it has changed. Then explain briefly why and give one specific current favourite with a short description. Correct grammar ("changed", "when I got older").

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. As a child I loved sweet junk food, but now I prefer warm, comforting dishes such as nasi lemak, a Malaysian dish of coconut rice served with spicy sambal and fried anchovies.

× My favorite food is Me with Tom Yum Seafood. I really like this food because it's really sweet and sour at the same time.

✓ My favorite food is Tom Yum Seafood. I really like it because it's sweet and sour at the same time.

The phrase 'Me with Tom Yum Seafood' misuses the pronoun 'me' and is ungrammatical. Replace with the name of the dish 'Tom Yum Seafood' as the subject. Also replace 'this food' with the pronoun 'it' to refer back to the dish for natural English. Remove the extra 'really' to avoid redundancy but it's optional. Grammar Problem Type ID:12

× When I was young, I really like to eat junk food such as cheap potato and tomatoes candies.

✓ When I was young, I really liked eating junk food such as cheap potato and tomato candies.

The sentence sets a past time frame 'When I was young', so verbs describing habits should be in past tense. Change 'like' to 'liked'. Use 'liked eating' or 'liked to eat'; 'eating' is more natural here. 'Tomatoes candies' is incorrect word order and plurality; use 'tomato candies' (singular noun used as modifier). Also 'potato' as a modifier is acceptable: 'potato candies'. Grammar Problem Type ID:6

× Yes, probably. I eat different foods at different times of the year because if I eat the same foods at the same times of theirs, I will feel very bored and it's not tasty anymore.

✓ Yes, probably. I eat different foods at different times of the year because if I eat the same foods at the same times every year, I would feel very bored and they would not taste as good anymore.

The phrase 'at the same times of theirs' misuses the possessive pronoun 'theirs' and is ungrammatical. Replace with 'every year' or 'each year'. Also conditional logic: use conditional modal 'would' for hypothetical feelings and 'they would not taste as good' matches plural 'foods'. Avoid 'it's not tasty' when referring to plural 'foods'. Grammar Problem Type ID:12

× Yes, my favorite food change. When I was a child, I would really like to eat junk food because of this sweetness.

✓ Yes, my favorite food changed. When I was a child, I really liked eating junk food because of its sweetness.

The first clause discusses a past change, so use past tense 'changed' instead of 'change'. In the second clause, past habitual action requires past tense 'liked' rather than 'would really like' (which can be used but is less natural here). Use 'its sweetness' to show possession (the sweetness of the food). Also 'liked eating' is more natural than 'liked to eat' when discussing past preference. Grammar Problem Type ID:6

× But when I'm getting olders, I like to eat warm soups and eat nasi lemak, which is traditional food from Malaysia.

✓ But as I got older, I came to prefer warm soups and nasi lemak, which is a traditional food from Malaysia.

The phrase 'I'm getting olders' uses incorrect comparative form and tense. Use past 'as I got older' to describe change over time. 'Olders' is incorrect; 'older' is comparative adjective and does not take -s. Use 'came to prefer' or 'I started to prefer' to show change in preference. Also 'nasi lemak' is uncountable here; 'a traditional food' or 'the traditional national dish' works. Ensure tense consistency. Grammar Problem Type ID:6