Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence naming one or two favourite foods, then give one brief reason or example. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases (e.g., “With that Bin said,” “Pete”). Use linking words (also, for example) to connect ideas and limit to 2–4 sentences.

例: My favourite foods are sushi and Italian pasta. I love sushi because it feels fresh and light, and I often go to a small restaurant that makes excellent rolls. I also enjoy pasta because it's comforting and comes in many tasty sauces.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and finish the thought with specific, coherent details. Avoid trailing off and unclear references (e.g., “SH shrimps”). Use one linking phrase (for example, because) to explain why you liked it and include one short memory or detail.

例: When I was young, I loved my aunt’s homemade shrimp dishes. For example, she cooked fresh prawns with garlic and spices from a secret family recipe, and the food always tasted very savory and comforting, which made family dinners special.

提案: Avoid starting awkwardly (e.g., “I actually never thought of this question”). Begin with a direct answer, then give 1–2 specific examples of seasonal or occasion foods using linking words (for example, during, on). Keep sentences concise and coherent.

例: Yes, I do eat different foods at different times of the year. For example, in winter my family cooks hearty stews and roasted dishes, while in summer we prefer light salads and grilled seafood. Also, on holidays we prepare special traditional meals that we only eat for celebrations.

提案: Good structure: direct answer and contrast. Improve by using clearer linking words (e.g., “used to” vs “now”), correct small grammar (overtime → over time), and add a short reason for the change. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed since I was a child. I used to love my aunt’s spicy shrimp because it felt homely, but now I prefer sushi from The Sushi Shack because I enjoy its variety and fresh flavours.

× Uh, for me, I have a variety options that I consider my favorite dishes.

✓ Uh, for me, I have a variety of options that I consider my favorite dishes.

The phrase 'a variety options' omits the preposition 'of' required after 'variety'. Use 'a variety of options' to indicate a selection. Suggestion: remember that 'variety' as a noun is followed by 'of' before a plural noun. (Grammar problem type ID:14)

× For example, I really like Japanese cuisines.

✓ For example, I really like Japanese cuisine.

'Cuisines' is plural but when referring to the style of cooking from a country, 'cuisine' as an uncountable noun is more natural: 'Japanese cuisine'. Alternatively, name specific cuisines (regional) if plural is intended. Suggestion: use 'cuisine' for a country's food style. (Grammar problem type ID:13)

× With that Bin said, I love sushi a lot.

✓ That being said, I love sushi a lot.

The phrase 'With that Bin said' is a misformation. The correct transitional phrase is 'That being said'. This is a lexical/pronoun-like misuse of words. Suggestion: use common discourse markers correctly, e.g., 'That being said' or 'Having said that.' (Grammar problem type ID:12)

× And another thing is Italian cuisines.

✓ And another one is Italian cuisine.

Similar to the earlier sentence, 'cuisine' is typically uncountable when speaking of a national cooking style. Also 'another thing is' is better as 'another one is' when listing items. Suggestion: say 'another one is Italian cuisine' or 'another is Italian food.' (Grammar problem type ID:13)

× I really love pasta and Pete.

✓ I really love pasta and pizza.

'Pete' is likely a mispronunciation or incorrect word for 'pizza' in this context. This is a word choice/pronoun-like error. Suggestion: use the correct noun 'pizza' when listing Italian dishes. (Grammar problem type ID:12)

× When I was a child, I used to love my auntie's food and she made homemade fresh meals like SH shrimps.

✓ When I was a child, I used to love my auntie's food; she made homemade, fresh meals like shrimps.

'examples: 'made homemade fresh meals' is acceptable but needs punctuation and 'shrimps' is usually 'shrimp' (uncountable) or 'shrimp dishes'. Also 'SH' seems extraneous. Use 'shrimp' without plural 's' when uncountable. Suggestion: write 'homemade, fresh meals like shrimp' or 'shrimp dishes.' (Grammar problem type ID:9)

× She made it in her own ingredients with a secret recipe and it's really savory and.

✓ She made them from her own ingredients with a secret recipe, and they were really savory.

'Made it in her own ingredients' is ungrammatical: use 'made them from her own ingredients'. Also sentence fragment ending 'and' must be completed; maintain tense consistency (past). Use 'they were really savory.' Suggestion: say 'She made them from her own ingredients with a secret recipe, and they were really savory.' (Grammar problem type ID:11)

× I actually never thought of this question and I never paid attention to it, but I think, yes, I do enjoy different foods at different times of the year.

✓ I had never thought about this question or paid attention to it, but I think I do enjoy different foods at different times of the year.

Use consistent verb tense and smoother linking: 'I had never thought about' fits when reflecting on past in relation to now. 'Thought of' vs 'thought about' both possible; 'or' better than repeated 'and I never'. Remove extra commas. Suggestion: use consistent tense and concise connectors. (Grammar problem type ID:26)

× For occasions, we eat different foods for a natural day or an ordinary day, we eat something that we all usually do eat.

✓ On special occasions we eat different foods; on an ordinary day we eat the things we usually eat.

'For occasions' is awkward; use 'On special occasions'. 'A natural day' is incorrect — likely 'a normal day' or 'an ordinary day'. Also word order 'we eat something that we all usually do eat' is redundant; simplify to 'we eat the things we usually eat.' Suggestion: use correct determiners and natural collocations. (Grammar problem type ID:22)

× I think yes, my favorite food changed over time.

✓ Yes, I think my favorite food has changed over time.

When describing a change from the past to the present, use present perfect ('has changed') rather than simple past ('changed'). Suggestion: use present perfect for actions with relevance to the present. (Grammar problem type ID:5)

× Umm my favorite food like I said earlier is the spicy shrimp my auntie used to make for me.

✓ My favorite food, as I said earlier, is the spicy shrimp my auntie used to make for me.

Sentence needs commas around the parenthetical phrase 'as I said earlier'. The structure is fine otherwise; ensure clarity. Suggestion: use commas to set off insertions. (Grammar problem type ID:6)

× But now overtime I started to love sushi made by my favorite restaurant, The Sushi Shack.

✓ But now, over time, I have come to love the sushi made by my favorite restaurant, The Sushi Shack.

'Overtime' should be two words 'over time' meaning 'gradually'. Also tense: use present perfect 'have come to love' to show change continuing to present. Add 'the' before 'sushi' when specifying a restaurant's product. Suggestion: write 'over time' and prefer present perfect for gradual change. (Grammar problem type ID:11)