Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetitions and fillers, and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct small errors (e.g., 'similar to Japanese cuisine', 'soy sauce' relevance).

例: My favourite food is Thai cuisine because it is very healthy and balanced. For example, many dishes use fresh herbs and vegetables, and the flavours are light yet complex. I also enjoy Japanese food sometimes because both cuisines emphasize freshness and simple seasoning.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and organize details logically. Avoid confusion and irrelevant fragments. Say what you liked, why you liked it, and give a brief example. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'I liked strawberries', 'my mother bought them for me').

例: When I was a child I loved strawberries because they tasted sweet and were easy to eat. For example, my mother often bought fresh strawberries for me as a snack after school, which made me very happy.

提案: Answer directly and give seasonal examples. Explain how seasons or occasions affect your choices, and use linking words ('for example', 'also'). Avoid repeating 'because' twice. Correct phrasing: 'I do' then justify.

例: Yes, I do. For example, in summer I prefer light Mediterranean dishes like Italian salads and pasta, while in winter I enjoy heartier French stews. Also, my husband and I like trying different cuisines throughout the year, which influences our meals.

提案: Provide a clear, complete answer: say whether it changed and explain why with specific reasons and a short example. Avoid fragments and unclear phrases. Use linking words ('because', 'so', 'now') and correct grammar ('I cook for myself', 'I live in Tokyo').

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. As a child I preferred simple snacks, but now I enjoy Korean dishes because I live in Tokyo with my husband and we cook Korean food at home. For example, we often make kimchi stew together, which I now love.

× I like Thai food because Thai, Thai food is very healthy and I feel, umm, I feel it's similar Japanese food cuisine. So I like Thai food and I like soy sauce.

✓ I like Thai food because it is very healthy and I feel it is similar to Japanese cuisine. I also like soy sauce.

Errors: redundant words and awkward structure; missing preposition 'to' after 'similar'; unnecessary repetition of 'Thai' and 'I feel'; incorrect noun order 'Japanese food cuisine'. Suggestion: Remove repetitions, use 'it' to refer to Thai food, add 'to' after 'similar', and use 'Japanese cuisine' for natural phrasing.

× When I was a kid, kids, I was like strawberries because I have had sick, uh, when I was child food and my mother bought to me this.

✓ When I was a kid I liked strawberries because I had been sick when I was a child and my mother bought them for me.

Errors: repetition 'kids'; incorrect verb choice 'was like' should be 'liked' (past tense preference); incorrect tense and form 'I have had sick' should be past perfect or simple past 'I had been sick'/'I was sick'; 'when I was child' needs article 'a child'; 'bought to me this' uses wrong word order and pronoun — use 'bought them for me'. Suggestion: Use simple past to narrate childhood preferences, include articles, correct verb forms, and place objects after verbs ('bought them for me').

× Yes I do because I like eating food such as Italian and French because my husband also likes eating different cultural food.

✓ Yes, I do, because I like eating Italian and French food and my husband also likes foods from different cultures.

Errors: word order and noun choices — 'eating food such as Italian and French' is awkward; 'different cultural food' is unnatural. Suggestion: Use 'Italian and French food' and 'foods from different cultures' for correct noun phrases and clearer meaning. Commas improve readability.

× Yes, make Koreans. Uh, I'm living in Tokyo with my husband and I cooking. I'm cooking the food myself for myself. So in my childhood.

✓ Yes, I eat Korean food now. I'm living in Tokyo with my husband and I cook the food myself. In my childhood, I did not.

Errors: 'make Koreans' is ungrammatical — needs subject and verb such as 'I eat/make Korean food'; 'I cooking' missing auxiliary verb 'am' or should be 'I cook'; 'I'm cooking the food myself for myself' is repetitive — use 'I cook the food myself'; final fragment 'So in my childhood.' is incomplete. Suggestion: Use complete sentences, correct verb forms (present simple for habitual actions 'I cook'), avoid repetition ('for myself' once), and clarify contrast with childhood using a full clause.