Keys— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (umm, uh), and use correct possessive forms (my room's door → my room door or my bedroom door). Limit to 2–4 sentences and add a brief linking phrase if needed.

例: I don't carry many keys; usually three. One is for the screen door, another for the main door, and the third for my bedroom door.

提案: Clarify meaning and avoid repetition. Use clear chronology and correct tense. Remove unclear fragments and numbers, and give one or two specific details about when or how often you lost keys. Use linking words like Therefore or As a result.

例: Yes, I've lost my keys several times. Therefore I always make a duplicate as soon as we get a new key so I have a spare at home.

提案: Be more fluent and avoid hesitations and repeated words. Use consistent pronouns (I/we/you) and provide a clear sequence: frequency, then typical actions, using linking words (If it happens, we usually...). Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: It happens occasionally, maybe once or twice a year. If it does, we usually try to use a plastic card to open the door or, failing that, reach the doorknob through an unlocked window.

提案: Organize the answer: give a clear opinion, then a short reason. Avoid repeating synonyms excessively and remove fillers. Mention one condition (trusted neighbour) to show nuance.

例: Yes, I think it's a good idea to leave a spare key with a trusted neighbour because they can help if you lock yourself out. However, make sure you only give it to someone reliable.

× Umm 3 to be exact.

✓ Umm 3 to be exact.

No grammatical change needed; numeric expression is acceptable but for formality it could be written as 'three'.

× So one is for our screen door, another one is for our main door, and then the third and the last one is for my uh, rooms door.

✓ So one is for our screen door, another is for our main door, and the third and last one is for my room's door.

The phrase 'rooms door' is incorrect because a singular possessive should be used to show ownership: room's door. Also 'another one is for our main door' is smoother without 'one'. Use consistent articles and possessive apostrophe for clarity.

× I have lost our keys a lot of times already.

✓ I have lost our keys many times already.

The present perfect 'have lost' is fine, but 'a lot of times' is informal and awkward here; use 'many times'. No subject-verb disagreement, but this improves register.

× So whenever we we have a new key at home 8 before the main door made before, uh, our room store.

✓ So whenever we have a new key at home, I make sure we also make a copy before the main door or our room key is used.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. I removed repeated words, corrected word order, and clarified meaning: make a copy of the new key. Ensure subject-verb structure and logical sequence.

× So I, I made I make sure that we have a spare copy or a duplicate of that key.

✓ So I make sure that we have a spare copy or duplicate of the key.

Mixed tenses and repetitions ('I made I make') create confusion. Use simple present 'I make sure' to describe habitual action and remove redundancies.

× This doesn't happen often, but I think it happened already once or twice, just for a few times.

✓ This doesn't happen often, but I think it has happened once or twice.

Use present perfect 'has happened' to connect past occurrences to the present. 'Just for a few times' is redundant; 'once or twice' suffices.

× And what we do when this happens is that we tried to use a card to open the the main door.

✓ And what we do when this happens is try to use a card to open the main door.

Change 'tried' to base form 'try' to match 'what we do' (habitual action). Remove duplicate 'the'. Use present form for general routines.

× Sometimes you try to open the window and try to reach the doorknob and just open it through through the window.

✓ Sometimes you try to open the window and reach the doorknob to open it through the window.

Remove repeated words, streamline verb forms, and use 'to reach' to express purpose. 'Through the window' is correct prepositional phrase used once.

× Do you think it's a good idea to leave your keys with a neighbour?

✓ Do you think it's a good idea to leave your keys with a neighbour?

No grammatical change needed; sentence is correct. Included here to indicate review completed.

× Yeah, I think it's a good alternative also to leave your keys, maybe your spare keys, your extra keys, duplicated keys to your neighbors, just in case you forgot your keys from inside the house or you misplaced your keys.

✓ Yes, I think it's a good alternative to leave your spare or duplicate keys with your neighbour, just in case you forget or misplace your keys inside the house.

Use 'Yes' for formality. Replace repetitive phrasing with 'spare or duplicate keys'. Use 'with your neighbour' rather than 'to your neighbors'. Use present tense 'forget' for general situations and 'misplace' for clarity. Match singular/plural and preposition use.

× Umm, you have, uh, your neighbor to go to, to, uh, to give you that, that spare key for you to open the door.

✓ You have a neighbour to go to who can give you that spare key to open the door.

Original had awkward repetition and incorrect structure. Use 'a neighbour to go to who can give you' to form a relative clause and avoid repetitive 'to'. Use 'neighbour' spelling consistent and concise phrasing.